Date: 11/10/11 10:35 pm Title: 13. Ztai
So0o0o0o sweet !!!!!!!!! It was sooo cute..!! I love it !!
You are amazing for writing this !!!
Author's Response:
Haha aw, thank you for reading it!
Date: 11/09/11 06:38 pm Title: 13. Ztai
Cheesiness is sometimes an essential part to a good romance fic :D lol
I enjoyed this chapter, well done!
Maybe proofread it and check for spelling/grammar errors, I spotted a few but the story and plot are really good, so they can be ignored :) But its always nice to touch it up a bit.
I'm happy to see you updated earlier then last time, lol
I'm excited to read more ^^
Author's Response:
Oh thank you, I dont have a beta anymore xD So I do what I can, since English is not my first language. Im sorry for the mistakes though, but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway! :D
Date: 11/09/11 02:12 pm Title: 13. Ztai
Heh, this was brilliant. I really liked this chapter :D
Oh my gosh, I would love to go to that restaurant.
Tom pocked his cell phone > pocketed*
And 'dessert' is spelled with two s's.
entered in him > 'in' shouldn't be there, as the word 'enter' already means to go in.
Tom lied atop Bill > *lay atop
There's a few other sentences where the word choice was odd, but it got the meaning across :)
PS: Oh, whoops, forgot this one: he didn’t know what emotions where running inside him > were*
Author's Response:
Thank you soo soo much you always save me. Embarrasing, this time I got so many mistakes, lol. Yeah, maybe I write differently because of my mother tongue, but if you guys still get what I want to say then it's ok, though I know it should be better. Thank you again, Daissa!
Date: 10/25/11 03:46 am Title: 12. The Tonker
Thanks for the update. i'm glad they got to have a sweet and normal moment. can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Yay, thanks!
Date: 10/24/11 02:28 pm Title: 12. The Tonker
Oh sexy :'DDD
Author's Response:
:3
Date: 10/24/11 04:18 am Title: 12. The Tonker
I'm happy you updated! It put's a smile on my face :D But poor Bill! But I guess that's what he gets, good thing Tom saved him though
Author's Response:
Aww, I'm glad it makes you happy ;D I know, thank God for Tom, xD
Date: 10/23/11 03:22 pm Title: 12. The Tonker
Gah, what the hell?! Georg didn't recognize him? Oh geez, oh geez DX
I'm so glad Tom saved him in time.
Don't worry about the wait. This entirely made up for it, and anyway, it wasn't too long a wait, lol.
There's only a few parts where I think a different word would fit better. Or where a little word should be added.
“He doesn’t want, man.” -- "He doesn't want -to-, man"
“He’s not on sale, he’s mine.” -- "He's not -for- sale"
Oh, and this little typo: The first thing Bill noticed was the crowed living room > crowded*
Otherwise, it's pretty much error-free! :D
Back to the story, I'm worried that Bill might have a mild concussion :(
And sort of surprised that Bill would want any sort of intimacy after almost being forced upon, but it could be that he would want it with Tom before anything like that happens again.
Author's Response:
Thank you soo soo much for the corrections! What would I do without you? :D Yeah, I was actually worried about that last scene, I didnt know if Bill was ready for it, but I thought maybe he would want to be close to Tom after what happened.
Date: 10/23/11 12:58 pm Title: 12. The Tonker
Yummy yum yummers ;D
I really hope they go even further in the next chappy ... don't judge, I'm a dirted minded little girl *licks lips* lol
LOVE LOVE LOVE!!!!~♥
Author's Response:
Haha oohhh, be careful what you wish for cuz you might get it (8) *dances*
Date: 10/23/11 07:21 am Title: 12. The Tonker
Omg, Bill D: Tupac wannabe is such a horrible man, and Bill's slightly stupid for going inside, and Tom is foolish for taking Bill there in the first place...baaah, poor Biiill!
Author's Response:
I know, I know! u.u Good think nothing happened o.o
Date: 10/23/11 03:24 am Title: 12. The Tonker
Thank Goodness Tom got to Bill before anything more happened! Great chapter =)
Author's Response:
Yeah! :D Thank youu!
Date: 10/07/11 06:40 am Title: 11. Not so Welcome
im completely in love with this story!
Author's Response:
aw, you're so sweet.
Date: 10/02/11 06:16 pm Title: 11. Not so Welcome
I have a feeling Bill going with To is not going to go well. Keep up the good work. =)
Author's Response:
I know o.o Thank you!
Date: 10/02/11 06:13 pm Title: 10. “You confuse me”
yay! what a cute way to make up. =)
Author's Response:
aww :D
Date: 10/02/11 05:05 pm Title: 5. Drunk and Moneyless
interesting friendship beginning here.
Author's Response:
;D
Date: 10/02/11 04:56 pm Title: 2. Let’s Party
'I better not be stuck in these jeans for nothing.' lol
Author's Response:
xD
Date: 10/02/11 04:27 pm Title: 1. Just another Day
poor Bill. That phone conversation conveys a lot.
Author's Response:
Yes :(
Date: 10/02/11 02:36 pm Title: 11. Not so Welcome
I get that Andreas is concerned but I think he needs to back off a bit. Tom's dad is something else! I feel bad that his dad's behaviour is so frequent it's become a natural thing to live with. Bill seems a bit naive, persisting to see where Tom lives after being warned. But I get he just wants to know more about Tom & where he lives. I'm not so sure taking Bill to work with him is such a good idea, but we'll see lol.
Author's Response:
I agree. I agreeee :D
Date: 10/02/11 02:34 pm Title: 11. Not so Welcome
I actually dislike Andreas in this story -__- He's just so ... close minded and stupid. Lol, I hope he's not like that in real life xD
I'm neutral about Bill's dad :)
I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER *jumps happily*
Author's Response:
Lol Andreas xD
Date: 10/02/11 12:55 pm Title: 11. Not so Welcome
ohh, here comes the nitty gritty
Author's Response:
Yup O.O
Date: 10/02/11 09:09 am Title: 11. Not so Welcome
I'm scared for Bill.
Author's Response:
Yeah O.o