Date: 06/05/11 09:46 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
Hmmm...I think you should flip back & forth between them! It was cool to finally see it from Tom's point of view, but Bill's mind is really fun to be in!
Author's Response: I'll definitely be doing that from now on!! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)
Date: 06/05/11 08:59 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
i kidn of like them both. i like your writing style. its funny
Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
Date: 06/05/11 08:52 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
Ha ha, my favorite chapter so far! Bill is awesome. And I loved seeing things for Tom's point-of-view. LOVE LOVE LOVE!!! :) :) :)
Author's Response: Thank you soooo SO much! I'm so glad you loved it! I'm going to definitely be interjecting Tom's view a lot more :)
Date: 06/05/11 08:49 pm Title: Sweating Balls
There's quite a few ways you can do that. Transitions words and phrases are really helpful like "Meanwhile" or "Across town" or "Unknown to Bill, Tom..." or "Afterward", "At the same time", "During", etc. Sometimes even putting some sort of a break such as some centered symbols or something (though this isn't recommended to do often because it can be distracting) can be used. I write all my stories in third person simply because it's easier for me to follow, and they tend to cover multiple people's actions and thoughts all at the same time. ^^
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much. I just looked at your profile and realized that I've read and looooved quite a few of your stories! So I may just have to study at your feet :)
Date: 06/05/11 08:24 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
ROFL he curses Willow out for the catchy song XD It is quite catchy for real.
Author's Response: It really is!! haha thanks for reading :)
Date: 06/05/11 08:18 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
Back and forth! bill is soo confusing lol *thinks of tom for 2 seconds* *pauses* *whips hair back and forth* cant wait for the next one, this story is hilarious!! :D
Author's Response: Thank you so so much! Next one will be up tomorrow!! :) And yes Bill really is quite confusing!
Date: 06/05/11 07:28 pm Title: Sweating Balls
I hope you enjoy it :D
Author's Response: I did enjoy it! She is such a little cutie. Thanks for the rec ;)
Date: 06/05/11 07:22 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
I'm really enjoying this so far :) and it's good to see Tom's point of view so it would be good to have a few Tom POVs throughout, but mostly Bill. Tracking the story now so will watch out for when you next post :D
Author's Response: Aww thank you so much! It will definitely mostly be Bill's pov intermixed with Tom's! Thanks for reading and tracking :D
Date: 06/05/11 07:19 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
So far I think this story is kinda cute. But, we've still not seen things from Tom's POV. It's in third person, which means it's still in the point of view of the unknown narrator. Sure we've got more insight on Tom's day and thoughts, but it wouldn't be Tom's POV unless the story was in first person and it was being told by Tom. Does that make sense? XD
Author's Response: Oh yes it absolutely makes sense and thank you so much for your input! For me, I don't particularly like to write in first-person because the main character tends to get too caught up in their own head and then there's less character to character interaction, you know? At least when i write it. But even with third-person, the story tends to portray one character's thoughts more than others. Like with this story and Bill. But when I wrote that part in Tom's "pov", his thoughts we're written instead of Bill's. Is there another term for that? Or should I just switch back and forth without specifying? Thanks so much for reading and your thoughts :)
Date: 06/05/11 07:15 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
I like both point of views. Lmao I agree with Tom. I hate that sog but it's so fucking catchy. I love Bill! So fucking care-free. Haha he's so honest, too. I still find it hilarious that he doesn't know hoe to text with normal letters. Lmaooo
Author's Response: Ok I gotta say, I know some people in real life who are all caps texters. I don't understand it! Lol. I'm so glad you're enjoying this and I hope you keep reading!! Thank you so much!
Date: 06/05/11 06:53 pm Title: Sweating Balls
Hehehehhhh I like this :D I LOVE the idea of younger!Bill and older!Tom working out together. Hopefuly ~making out~ together will make an appearance soon ;)
Mmm this is such a juicy idea, and little Bill is hilarious xD
Author's Response: Thank you soooo much! I definitely predict making out in the future :) hehehe.
Date: 06/05/11 06:30 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
It was interesting to see things from Tom's POV I'd totally want to see more of it :D And Tom's just so cute XD
Author's Response: Tanks so much :) I'll be sure to include more of it!'
Date: 06/05/11 06:23 pm Title: Trampoline Skills
First thought: fuck, that banner is still awesome.
Second thought: yay update!
Third thought: ooohhh some character development.
Well you did say to let you know what i thought. I'm going to go smile at your banner some more.
Author's Response: Haha I love all of your thoughts! And by all means, stare away!! That's what it's there for ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 06/05/11 05:53 pm Title: Sweating Balls
Fuuuck yeah can't wait for the next post :D And I listened to 21 century girl. I liked it a bit more than Whip My Hair.
Author's Response: Oh I've never listened to that song before! I shall have to, now!
Date: 06/05/11 04:32 pm Title: Whip My Hair
Shiiit if i saw Tom dancing in my house i would sit down with Bill and watch... even in my mind it's so... mesmerizing. Really can't wait for more... usually i just say that but i ACTUALLY mean it this time :P
Author's Response: Haha I know, I totally would too! After the initial shock of it all I'd sit down and make myself comfortable and enjoy the show! The end of your review made me smile so big :) Thank you so much! The next chapter should drop tooooday!
Date: 06/05/11 04:12 pm Title: Sweating Balls
I fucking loveeee this! I couldn't stop to review earlier because I had to hit the next button :) Awesome story!
Author's Response: Oh wow! I fucking love your writing :) I'm super flattered that you're reading and that you reviewed. Thanks so so much! I hope you stick around!
Date: 06/05/11 03:32 pm Title: Whip My Hair
Im gonna have a 'pirate' moment...This story is fucking amazing, and also fucking hilarious and bill makes me die XD i cannot wait for the next one!
Author's Response: I love pirate moments!! Thank you so so much! I'm glad you're enjoying it. The next chapter should be up today!
Date: 06/05/11 03:27 pm Title: Whip My Hair
lol o bill lol!
Author's Response: He's such a goof :)
Date: 06/05/11 03:09 pm Title: Whip My Hair
-imagines Tom dancing to Willow Smith- hahahahahahahahahahaha sorry I had a laughing fit in the middle
Author's Response: Seriously that boy dancing period, makes me laugh. But dancing to that song and whippin those dreads is completely ridiculous haha. Thanks so much for reading! :D
Date: 06/05/11 03:07 pm Title: Whip My Hair
This was so funny! Plus right when I saw the title to the chapter I felt the need to listen to Willow, 'cept I listened to a different song of hers. But Tom doesn't seem so straight now :o Post again soon :D
Author's Response: Haha thank you! Yeah he definitely lost some straight points with that dance. I'll post again today! What Willow song did you listen to?