Date: 02/14/13 01:01 am Title: Chapter 4
this sounds like a good story!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Date: 05/08/12 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 4
Make....more....PUHLEEZE!
Date: 10/23/11 06:18 pm Title: Chapter 4
I think you should write more sexy stories
Date: 06/21/11 06:31 pm Title: Chapter 4
This story is very aggressive but, sensitive at the same time :D Hope you write more! cause I'm in love with this story :D
Date: 05/27/11 06:06 pm Title: Chapter 4
Bill is starting to lose his mind or is he drugged ?
HE4S been raped so difficult to just get and and dance!!!
Besides hygiene is the key to everything
Date: 05/27/11 07:41 am Title: Chapter 1
I reaaally like it
Date: 05/26/11 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 4
I think it was awesome, and I must apologise for the illiterateness of my last review. It was a combination of really really tired, and my keyboard glitching.
It feels like Bill is getting Stockholm awfully quick. You might want to slow it down just a hair, depending on how long you are planning on making the fic.
So far I love it. I can't wait to see more.
Date: 05/26/11 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 4
Nice i like it. n wut song is that?
Author's Response: Sitch me up-Julian Perrette
Author's Response: Stitch me up-Julian Perrette
Date: 05/26/11 03:53 pm Title: Chapter 4
Was Tom going to kill Bill?
Author's Response: Just to scare him.
Date: 05/25/11 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
Ther just aren't enough of these stories out there. There just isn't. I am always hapy to fone another one. I ook forward to seeing more! Keep up the good work
Date: 05/25/11 10:16 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm reviewing cautiously. Not trying to bring you down but hopefully you will grasp this as a constructive critique. This story concept is strong, but the way you've begun writing it is detracting from it. The bits you've done so far are superficial, rushed, and incohesive. You can do this much better. Read Cat and Mouse (i think Neko Shiro wrote that, and observe her character development. Read The Butterfly Cycle (Cinematics) and observe her story deveolpment. Read anything at all by Gaja or Fyredancer, and you will learn how to write a good story. I'm not saying to let their stories influence you, i'm saying learn from them and you will be better. I think you have that spark to be a good writer but you need guidance.
Hope you took this well, it is only meant to help.
Author's Response: Oh my, I must apologize for such a terribly late reply. Thank you for the guidance, they are much appreciated and needed. English isn't my first language, so even to this day I'm improving. Although I like to think that after five years I've turned into a much better writer. Reading my writing now makes me cringe, actually. rnrnCurrently I am thinking of a Bill/Tom Twincest fic, trying to plot it out from the beginning to the end. I definitely want it to be unique, something that will keep the readers at the edge of their own seats. I am definitely all about that angst, the more angst the better actually. rnrnThank you so much for for saying that you think I have a spark to be a good writer, it truly means something to me. b29;
Date: 05/25/11 09:42 am Title: Chapter 3
you are an amazing writer I can't wait until the next chapter is ready
Author's Response: b29; That means so much to me c:
Date: 05/25/11 09:08 am Title: Chapter 3
My feelings are hurt :(
Date: 05/25/11 02:55 am Title: Chapter 3
Great fic! I can't wait for more.
Date: 05/24/11 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wtf?!?!
I find this to be sick!
It's hard to stop reading but what the fuck?!
Date: 05/23/11 01:45 pm Title: Chapter 2
I really like this so far! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: 05/23/11 09:09 am Title: Chapter 1
That's a bit creepy >.> There was a point in time when I was scared of my shadow. Thanks for reminding me of that XD
Author's Response: LOL. x]