Date: 11/06/11 02:19 am Title: Chapter 3
I honestly don't understand how this doesn't have more reviews! I loved it - I'd never read anything from the scorned girl's point of view before. The concept of "an outsider looking in" really made me think differently about Tom and Bianca illicit relationship. And the ending was so fitting! If you ever need a beta, I'd be happy to offer my services (as meager as they may be, ahaha).
Author's Response: Well, thank you :)
Date: 08/10/11 05:52 pm Title: Chapter 2
Fuck, I could almost feel the humiliation and hurt with that chapter. Poor girl ): amazing job btw.
Date: 08/10/11 12:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
oh goodness. this is a really good story.
Date: 06/23/11 10:20 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm really excited to see what you're going to write next (: first chapter and I'm already sucked in.
Date: 05/15/11 02:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
WARNING: I do comments instead of 'reviews'. they tend to be rather long so sorry if they annoy you
comment one: I alresdy think this is beautifully written
comment2: poor girl. having someonefidgit while your talking to them, and knowing they want to go is the worst
comment3:"now seems like an abandoned battle zone that only held the spirits of those who braved it." thats a reallystrong line. in a good way
comment4:"have I ever told you how talented you are with it?" this made me laugh. I imagine it was a litle sarcastic seeing how deperate and sad she seems
comment5: i smell 'make up sex'... such a stupid thing.
comment 6:"The demon’s intense kisses with an angel’s mouth. My golden haired Satan, the deceiver turned honest turned deceiver again. You never could make up your mind, Tom." i dont actually have a comment for this. i just think its a beautiful line
comment7:"So I wanted to taste you. Does that make me impure? Did you only want me as an innocent virgin? You can’t. You can’t taint me and reject me." she was a virgin when they met? this was b4 tho right? they've slept together already...?
comment8:this first time sounds so special.its sad that he's just fucjking her now but im kind of happy that she realizes it. so many other girls dont.
comment9:"Love makes us martyrs at some point, doesn’t it?" thats one way of putting it
comment10:" Along with my virginity you’ve taken my heart and I want it back." that ansers my virgin question
comment11:“Why? I don’t see a lady anywhere.” wooow what an ass
comment12: the ending confusses me. but only because i cant remember if this was an ongoing story or if thats really the end
Author's Response: I like comments :)And to answer your question, the last one that is, is a WIP.
Date: 05/15/11 02:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
WARNING: I do comments instead of 'reviews'. they tend to be rather long so sorry if they annoy you
comment one: I alresdy think this is beautifully written
comment2: poor girl. having someonefidgit while your talking to them, and knowing they want to go is the worst
comment3:"now seems like an abandoned battle zone that only held the spirits of those who braved it." thats a reallystrong line. in a good way
comment4:"have I ever told you how talented you are with it?" this made me laugh. I imagine it was a litle sarcastic seeing how deperate and sad she seems
comment5: i smell 'make up sex'... such a stupid thing.
comment 6:"The demon’s intense kisses with an angel’s mouth. My golden haired Satan, the deceiver turned honest turned deceiver again. You never could make up your mind, Tom." i dont actually have a comment for this. i just think its a beautiful line
comment7:"So I wanted to taste you. Does that make me impure? Did you only want me as an innocent virgin? You can’t. You can’t taint me and reject me." she was a virgin when they met? this was b4 tho right? they've slept together already...?
comment8:this first time sounds so special.its sad that he's just fucjking her now but im kind of happy that she realizes it. so many other girls dont.
comment9:"Love makes us martyrs at some point, doesn’t it?" thats one way of putting it
comment10:" Along with my virginity you’ve taken my heart and I want it back." that ansers my virgin question
comment11:“Why? I don’t see a lady anywhere.” wooow what an ass
comment12: the ending confusses me. but only because i cant remember if this was an ongoing story or if thats really the end