how do i find you on twatter? for some reason i thought formsprung was twatter. Dammit, and i am not even a natural blonde! Fukkit, technology scares the bejesus outa me.

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Search for LeichenWasser, I'll pop up with my rainbow icon on the right as PEOPLE. Add me and we can sweet - SEX TWEET.

You got me all teary eyed! Such an emotional ending. I loved that Bill finally opened up to Tom, and that he is really warming up to him. But I'm a little nervous about the fact that Tom suspects Bill's attack might be from Andreas and yet he did say anything to the cops. You got me all worried! I can't wait to learn more about that. And I also can't wait to read more of Bill and Tom's relationship developing....have I even mentioned how much I love this chapter yet? XD

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Good, I'm glad! Your tears keep me young.

*huggles you*

I shall consider this my bday present from you.(My bday is on Saturday.) Bill didn't die, and I got more insight. YAY!

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HAPPY BIRFDAY! I got you ToHo performing live in Moscow, I hope you like it.

OH HELL. *tears* Bill, my heart aches for him right now, seriously I feel his pain and I know where he's been.

I am so damn proud of Tom, he's really outdone himself; staying by Bill's side and making everything good for Bill money wise. It's so wonderful to see that Bill has let himself trust Tom, and that he's opened up.

Amazing chapter darling, it brings tears to my eyes and warmth to my heart. *anuggles you*

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You reviewed! Aw, thanks! I know things have been hectic for you. <3

I almost started fricken crying at the end of this it was so sad yet sweet and gosh just gosh T.T

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I read this is "frying chicken" upon first glance

sorry about the spam, I’m new to the site and realised it might not like some of my squigglies. (chunks of text went missing.) trying again, eh.

well, you kind of asked for it, and I don’t really require much encouragement. >.> feel free to skip the next thousand words or so. >.>

“sterile capsule around him, timeless and white and too still, like everything was already over.”
I like how you set this up in an ‘eye of the storm’ kind of way, b/c the ending of the last chapter was oh-so-dramatic, and you stylistically set up a storm when you go on to explain what has happened through flashbacks. (and kudos for BEARABLE!FLASHBACKS. I tend to tell people to stay away from them b/c flashbacks can kill a story in three sentences. but clearly you have conquered the beast -- booyah.)

”the fear that made his strong arms weak.”
oh. oh, um. 3 this coupled with the description of tom being so ruffled and covered in blood that people at the hospital think he’s injured is brilliant imagery. and STAVING!OFF!ANXIOUS!TEARS – you’re laying it down thick for us. CLEARLY YOU WANT TO MAKE THE FANGIRLS CRY. I see through your ploy! ...*wibbles*

“’There's so much blood,’ Tom said in a tight whisper. ‘Oh God. There's so much blood.’”
points for realistic panic!dialogue! :Db (and the tight whisper is surely because THERE IS NO ROOM FOR ALL THE EMOTIONS)

“Tom did sob then, utterly frustrated, biting it back with a gasp, his shoulders slumping defeatedly. ‘I don't want to fill out a fucking form, I don't want to file a fucking report, I just want to see Bill. They won't tell me anything, fuck, fuck-’"
fuck the fucking fuckers. when you’re powerless words take on a whole new meaning. AND HE LIED, WHEN ARE THEY GOING TO SEE THROUGH THAT ONE?

tom’s “humiliatingly thick” voice when he talks to his parents is quite interesting b/c it is a huge indicator for his relationship with them, and the person he is trying to project to them. like he is embarrassed to show them his weaknesses b/c he’s been keeping up appearances for so long while he was in bad circles and that it’s a hard habit to break. INTERESTING. (but then he tells them everything, so the humiliation is an uncontrollable emotional reaction while the interaction with them is a learned openness. damn, your characters are so good.)

"’I don't even know his birthday,’ Tom said, strangled, into his mother's scarf.”
ooh, scarf.

“Tom's legs felt weak; he thought he might throw up, or fall to his knees. ‘He's okay?’ He breathed, just to be sure.“
y haro thar correctly used semicolon. so pleased to see you out and about. 3 + more points for being realistic in your descriptions and how well you project emotion into physical reactions.

generic smiles. they’re awful to wear. have they ever truly been in fashion?

“Tom didn't know the skinny boy in the coarse hospital gown, with the lank black hair and smudged, bruised face; didn't recognise the chipped, broken nails on the splinted and casted hands. He'd been so desperate to see Bill, to see that he was okay, and this was just... anticlimatic, unfulfilling. Bill *wasn't* okay. And now that he was here, Tom didn't know what to do with himself, with either of them.”
this paragraph and the one leading up to it (I CAN’T QUOTE EVERYTHING FFS) are brilliantly contrasted, the first as a reinforcement of the bill we have known so far, and then this paragraph introduces a new bill, which to me seems a bit like it’s a bill that has always been there but hasn’t been completely visible before. awesome use of adjectives, you build and build, but because you cut up your sentences it doesn’t seem like you are stuffing it. SKINNY, COARSE, LANK, BLACK, SMUDGED, BRUISED, CHIPPED, BROOOOKEEEEEEENNNN, SPLINTED, CASTED.  good choice putting casted at the end, since that shows a progression towards healing.
BUT BILL ISN’T OKAY. WANGST.

“‘Friends don't make friends stand here like a moron while they're unconscious.’ He swallowed thickly, into the silence. ”
sure they do. it just tends to be on ibiza after a bucket of cosmopolitan and a rather too intimate visit to the loo. >.> (BUT I HEAR YOU BB, I HEAR YOU.)

“watery yellow light”
atmospheric.

"’Mom?’ Bill croaked, and Tom swallowed stiffly.
‘Not unless this is an episode of Jerry Springer,’"
*CACKLE* back to your lovely, funny dialogues which I want to squish to within an inch of their (hypothetical) lives.
"’That's what happens when you get in an argument with a baseball bat.’"
this conjures up the mental image of a baseball bat come to life, floating around midair and accusing ppl for insulting his maw. BALDY.

BILL’S HANDS. DDD: very symbolic and harsh. it’s breaking someone’s life, making them incapable to fend for themselves even if it might only be temporary.

"’There's nobody else,’ Bill choked out, and turned his face away from Tom.”
*IS PUDDLE* BUT FFS DON’T TURN AWAY FROM THE PERSON WHO IS THERE, EEJIT.

"’How're my boys doing?’"
HA. :D

“No car accidents”
people budget for that?? >.> clearly I have epic mad driving skillz b/c I don’t.

"’You really mean this, don't you,’ Simone said, her awe in her voice and her slack mouth. ‘You really want to do this, he means that much to you.’"
unexpected depth, apparently. :P AND OF COURSE HE MEANS THAT MUCH. HE BE BILL: THE SQUISHY BITCHY BFF FROM FLASHY!VILLE. :D HIS SUPERPOWERS ARE MAKING PANCAKES AND OSTRACISING PEOPLE! :DDDDD

“ It'd be like feeding a dog truffles, he wouldn't be able to appreciate it, and it just might kill him.”
XDDD ace.

“Tom had made sure he understood every aspect of Bill's condition, so he wouldn't fuck anything up.”
because it’s too important. *grins*

"’He's always been the shy, sensitive one,’ Tom sighed. ‘He loves kids and baby animals, isn't that right BiBi?’
Bill turned a withering, lopsided glare on Tom. ‘And TomTom's always been the ugly, bitchy one. Isn't that right, TomTom?’"
ROFL. XD

AND I’M SKIPPING SOME OF THE AWESOME FUNSIES B/C YOU’RE A GROWN SQUIRREL AND WON’T BE UPSET IF YOU DON’T GET ATTENTION. and because it’s basically just a whole bunch of me going *CACKLE*LOL*FLAIL*BWAHAHAHAHA*SNORT*

I like how bill’s dialogue is choppy, but at the same time seems quite rushed since you use repetition and words which flow smoothly together so that despite the punctuation there are very few pauses.

“ He brought a hand up to brush back Bill's hair, and there was nothing awkward or unusual about it.”
*squee*

”Tom's bad blood seeping into Bill.”
oooh, the guilt. *cackle*

“ jostling it so that the contents clacked together.”
bang, imagery. :)b

“That was what Tom liked about him; he was real, he was honest; independent and happy to be. He wore what he wanted, said what he wanted, and did what he wanted, and fuck the consequences.“
despite the bitching these are some qualities it would do most people some good to have.

“The nurses all made their goodbyes, largely to Tom who had in his usual fashion endeared himself to them with ridiculous ease.”
realism in abundance. I think this would be very true of real tom too. :P

“a compulsive habit - a bit like pressing at a mousetrap to see if you'd lose a finger, pleased when you succeeded in coming away unscathed - and just to reassure himself that Bill was there, on his couch, real and warm and here.”
nice imagery. and the last part of this sentence sounds like something I would write, so of course that is a major jackpot. XD

I like the word percolated. it’s a bit like someone purring and falling over whilst calling out for someone named ted.

“Bill had taken off his sunglasses, and that he hadn't bothered to apply any make-up.”
no make-up makes people look vulnerable(if they’re usually done up). is it the haggard shards of messy sleep-deprived reality which shocks us to the core? (b/c I never go without outside the house in case I scare children. MUM WHY IS A BEAR COMING AT US. – BABY, JUST RUUUUUUN.) anyway, vulnerability. SWEET.

bill’s story is of course very heart-rendering and imo made bushido seem like a complete asshatting dickhead b/c he should fecking know better. GRRRRRRRR.

“’I thought I was going to die, Tom, and nobody... nobody would come for me, and nobody would... would even fucking know. I thought they were gonna finish what my stepdad started, that night... I didn't want to die anymore... I wanted to stay, and I was so f-fucking scared that I wouldn't be able to... that I wouldn't be able to see you, or Lola again. Fuck. Fuck.’ He pressed his hand over his eyes, humiliated to be seen so naked.”
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“’I don't ever... ever want to relive that night again.’ Tom swallowed. ‘I was scared too,’ he admitted. ‘But I'm not anymore. I'm here, and you're here with me, and you're gonna be fine. We're gonna be fine. You've been so fucking strong for so long... lean on me a little, okay? I won't drop you. I'm not like the rest. I promise.’"
I am fecking thrilled to read dialogue which is emotionally pleasing without being mushy and complete fail like ice cream left out to melt in the park near the ducks’ pond. you win at writing. feel free to take my kidney. (I suppose I could offer you the kid I apparently had without knowing about it when I reapplied for citizen registration, but vital organs are more fun.)

and your last line is a kicker. awesome. I AM SURE YOU MADE PEOPLE CRY. :DDDb (if nothing else, then in envy.)

hit and run? wtffff. I hope you wore a helmet.

and Linda Sundblad is great. I love her and her braces(she had them in Melodifestivalen this year :P). she said in an interview once that her fav musician was robyn b/c their voices were similar. XDD MISGUIDED NARCISSISM FTW. :D

yeah, clearly you have better things to do than read this crap, BUT I REALLY ENJOYED THE CHAPTER. XDD cheers for updating. :)

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First off? This is probably THE BEST review I have ever gotten. You are so in depth, it's really great - I love hearing how things impacted you, made you feel, and what you enjoyed about it. If you ever think that you shouldn't leave another of these babies on my stories, STOP YOURSELF, AND WRITE ME ANOTHER NOVEL.

*scrabbles away towards the notes that fell to the floor* ah ha! *reads aloud * "and then Tom turned Bill over his knee"

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NO THAT'S NOT UNTIL CHAPTER 28-

Everything about this chapter was amazing. The emotion you put into this and poured from your characters truly eminated.

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Dude... wow. Thank you! Some of the best praise a writer can ever hear tbh

WOW, Bill´s had it pretty bad in life, it was obvious but still... It was awesome when Bill told Tom about his life.
God I´m so tired I can´t find any words to say what I want about this chapter so that´s gonna be all you´re gettin´ ;) Peace and love zZzZzZzZZZ

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JEEZ YOU GUYS AND BEARDGATE

absolutey amazing chapter :) sad that you're putting this on hold though...but i guess you gotta do what you gotta do and we just have to wait it out

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/plays some Sarah McLachlan to a slow montage of me packing up my things and leaving, with one last backwards glance