Date: 06/30/11 05:44 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
oh my goodness, that was amazing. Once again, you have wrote another terrific chapter that made me squeal like a mouse all over the place. It's so cute how Tom is so protective over Bill and I love Jealousy on Tom, it's such a hot thing. Maybe next time we'll get to see the jealous side of Bill? :) Anyways, I love your story, it's like the only one I really care about and track on this site. Can't wait for the next chapter, thank you soo much for updating
Author's Response:
Whoa, that's a mighty compliment right there! Thank you muchly!
rnI agree, though. A jealous, overprotective Tom is a hot Tom. Not... that I can think of a Tom that isn't hot. But you get me. I know you do.
Date: 06/30/11 01:55 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
hiiii! lov this chapter, jaaa poor chicken nugget!!!
You ask that and i say "the longer the better" xD
Keep writting!!!
Author's Response:
Hay gurl haaayyyyyy
rnYou keep translating! AND REVIEWING!
Date: 06/30/11 12:03 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
Omg! This is the first time I write a review for this story, I hardly ever write a review 'til the story is finished, but I'm making an exception with this one. I have to tell you that I love the way you write, it makes me laugh the conversations that Bill and Tom have, so full of irony and that stuff. And their way of showing how much they like each other is pretty weird, but I like it anyway. I love the fact that Bill's a completely bitch in this story, he's usually the sweet and weak one, but not in this story. I fell in love with "Cupid's Chokehold" since I read the first chapter, 'cause it's like something different and cool. And although I don't speak english properly and it's really hard for me to understand it (sometimes), I've managed to understand every word I've read, that's nice I think and I've also improved my english a lot by reading stories haha xD Now, talking about this chapter, How on hell did Jenny dare to ruin Bill's first kiss? It was supposed that Tom would give it to him, and that girl fucked it up. Grrr *steam coming out my ears* Anyway it was plain to see that Tom was dying of jealously. When will he realize that he's head over heels in love for Bill? Come on, it's about time! I want more action between Bill & Tom, you know what I mean right? *blush*...Great chapter! I hope you upload the next chapter pretty soon, 'cause this one took you long and I thought I'd die for waiting that much. Lots of love, and bear hugs!
Author's Response:
LONG REVIEW, LONG REVIEW! :D
rnYour English is actually better than most Americans I know, hahaha. You've done well, my child. <3
rnFear not! There will be plenty of gay to go around - starting very, very soon. :D
rnI WILL TAKE THESE BEAR HUGS, ALL OF THEM
Date: 06/30/11 04:16 am Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
Aww, bill is such a softie underneath it all. Anyway, great chapter! it was definitely worth waiting for. and god, how i love their sarcasm. It made me laugh like crazy throughout all the chapters, and since i read a big part through my phone, at the bus, people looked at me weirdly... oh well.
Can't wait for the next chapter :)
Author's Response:
I get that a lot too. Usually it's for wearing my flying squirrel pajamas, but yes, I get weird looks as well.
rnNeither can I! FETCH ME COFFEE MINION
Date: 06/30/11 03:11 am Title: First Step is a Stumble
I WILL CRAWL INTO THE DEEP PITS OF YOUR BRAIN AND FIND OUT WHO IS BEHIND THE BEATINGS! DON'T DOUBT ME.
And Kit, love, I thought we established this that night with the tequila, the drinking, and the and the confusion and bed tumbles. How could you forget ;-; You must not love us anymore.
Author's Response:
GOOD LUCK WITH THAT HONEY
rnExcept for the part where I totally do.
Date: 06/29/11 10:17 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
Aww Bill does appreciate Tom xD I swear Tom you're an idiot :l You love Bill simple as that; really it is. And stupid mofo for taking Bill's first kiss that's my job! Wait...I mean that's Tom's job!
Any how, I'm glad you finally explained why the car got trashed :D Buut I still wanna know who attacked Bill D:
Now, go get some tortillas and peanut butter and start writing more bitte ;-;
Author's Response:
They are both equally retarded, lets be fair now
rnYOU NEVER EVER WILL HAHAHAHA
rn.... ew that is a terrible combination born of pregnancy cravings, are you trying to tell me something
Date: 06/29/11 08:31 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
In between the never-ending circle of menstrual cramps (/tmi) and the need for something to prevent me from sobbing in pain all night instead of sleeping, I decided to read this against my judgment, because I never read WIPs. One: there's always this possibility that the story will never get completed and that makes me want to break my laptop more than anything and Two: the updating... the cliffhangers... I just can't handle it. MY POOR HEART.
Oh my God. Oh my God. I am one fucking sad panda right now. I don't know why I had this feeling that this was 35 chapters long instead of 20. I don't know what's wrong with my small brain. So I started reading and thought that hey, this is going to take looong, I shall enjoy it. And when I reached ch. 17 or so I kept grinning like an idiot 'cause wow I still have more than ten chapters, this is heaven.
ARGHJDLFGKJ. Talk about mental cock-block right now. I don't know if I'm angry or ecstatic that I read it eventually because I fucking LOVE it. You have a great way with words and this is one of the most interesting things I've read in here and believe me, I've read a looooot. I love the characters and the storyline, I love that you put Nathan in it because I love Misfits and I could totally imagine him being friends with Tom, weird as it it. You're probably so good that you made it seem so believable.
I just love that they're BOYS you know? I've read my fair share of fag!twins, too sensitive for the world and fragile snowflakes or something. I love how this is real and love how it made me feel and you are so great and thank you for writing it.
But really, I am sort of depressed right now... I cannot describe in words what my face looked like when there was no 'Next' button at the end of this chapter. Probably worse than Tom's face when that girl decided to steal Bill's first kiss like that! There's nothing breaking my heart more than long breaks between updates so please, be gentle? *puppy eyes*.
I shall crawl back to my corner now *salutes*.
Author's Response:
I fancy you, let us hold hands.
rnAlso, your handle. Fellow DeathNote stan, YUSS /high-fives you in the face
rnI am sorry this was not actually 37 chapters long. I apologize to you, and your uterus. I am sorry you are shedding your lining, and also tears over the lack of chapters. I am a terrible person, and so is God for doing this to you every month. He pays you back with multiple orgasms though, so there's that. ( I have sisters and 90% of my friends are girls. I know how it is. )
rnI like writing boys. :D They are fun to write. Fun to make-out with and canoodle with as well BUT WE WILL GET TO THAT, eventually. To be honest, I wrote a shyer, more damaged Bill once, but there's a damn good reason I never posted it. It was crap, and wank, and just UGH. I like writing coarser characters to bottle up their feelings. Like me :D And that has obviously worked so well.
rnOn a serious note, I'm glad it made you feel SOMETHING, whether amused or mad or sad. If you hate it, love it, either way it made an impression; if you glazed over reading it, I've done something wrong. So! Thank you for actually reviewing this, and for being so in depth. It means a lot to me, in all honesty.
rn/tucks you in with a hot water bottle and Vicodin
Date: 06/29/11 05:44 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
More, more, more!
Author's Response:
Okay! :D
Date: 06/29/11 04:18 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
You would totally find a randomass video like that xD
Author's Response:
Frankly I'm just angry I didn't make it first.
Date: 06/29/11 02:57 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
I donīt mind at all, these chapters being so long. It just means double time enjoying ;) Your characters are so natural and where do you get those lines from? The conversations are just so GOOD, smooth and real-like (is that even a real word?). But now, Iīm just waiting for Billīs REAL first kiss. Tom, you sure now who would be good enough for Bill īcause he already has him b29;
Author's Response:
Yay! :D
rnI LIKE ALL OF THIS, ALL OF THIS REVIEW. These are exactly the things I'm striving for. Thank you so much. ;_; HOLD ME
Date: 06/29/11 02:42 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
Oh god boo, I really am gonna make you marry me sometime soon. Just wait and see. But to the story.. I simply love it. Everytime I think back to when Tom found Bill almost dead, I almost start crying.. AND STUPID JENNY. Stay away from Tom's property! And I totally loved the fact that Tom was jealous. It made my stomach flutter. I really am a sucker for love-ish things. But.. Yeah. I WANNA GIVE BIRTH TO YOUR CHILDREN.
Author's Response:
Make me, MAKE ME D:< I GET MARRIED ON MY OWN TERMS which is really just a fishtail gown and an open bar
rnGood, I'm glad, your tears will keep me young. :D
rnBill needs a tattoo somewhere, or a brand, PROPERTY OF TOM KAULITZ/BABYFACE/TEARDROP
rnI'm a sucker for that shit too... obviously.
Date: 06/29/11 02:39 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
this story....i figgin love it. and the end notes!!! and the video. OH MY GOD, THE VIDEO!!!
Author's Response:
I DIE EVERYTIME I WATCH THAT VIDEO. It is a good thing I am immortal on a technicality
Date: 06/29/11 02:10 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
The third thing I do every morning is reading my e-mails and browsing tokiohotelfiction for "my" stories.... Do you believe that when you wish for something really hard it will become true? If not you definitely should :-) Because... Two last days I thought very intense about this story and wished for new update so when I opened today my e-mail account and I saw:: Update to favorites at THF and then I read which story was updated I was mega happy :)
This is definitely the longest chapter you have ever written... And like every other chapter this made me smile, made me sad but made me mad too ( what was that with Billīs first kiss, hm?! )
The sixth sentence was great, I laugh so much reading and rereading it :D
"Fuck your biscuits," Bill replied, hunting down a spoon. ... well this definitely broke my heart, poor Tom :( Jealous Tom is so cute :) but of course, he is not jealous... he is just overprotective :) He should be jealous in every chapter, it is sooo funny :D
But I hope Bill will be jealous too, someday(in the near future)
About Billīs mother.... she is just failure of the nature. The whole situation is so sad but shit happens. Thanks god there is Tom for him...
And Bill has birthday soon? 18? Or what else doesnīt he like celebrating? Hm, what could Tom get him? ... I know :D Romantic dinner at beach :)
And a little message for Tom:
We all know that you wanted be Billīs first kiss, donīt deny it!. But... you can be is first REAL kiss and first everything else... you just have to analyze your feelings a little bit more :) Sleeping with someone in one bed AND like it... it is not about friendship, it is something deeper, something more .... With your attitude you are not going to fool anyone, maybe only Bill, he is as blind as you :D
Oh and respect for Bill. What he did for Jenny was... WOW. I love him. I understand why she thought she loved him. I hope she will find someone as good as Bill because Bill is not single any more :)
Author's Response:
That is AMAZING! It must have been you that got to me finish it and post it, finally. <3
rnI love that I could make you smile and laugh! Best feeling in the world. <3
rnYeah. His Mom isn't the greatest... but he has people that more than make up for it. <3 Tom being one of the best, obviously.
rnAnd yep! Little Bill's gonna be legal soon! :D
rnTom says: What, me, kiss Bill? Dude, no, that's gay. I mean, not bad. I'm sure it would be awesome. But not Bill. Ppfffttt. No way. Yeah... no way...
rnThank you! That is an AMAZING compliment, thank you!
Date: 06/29/11 12:48 pm Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
*pinches Tom's cheeks* Its Ok Tom, one day he will be all your and ypou wont have to share, well, maybe a little sharing with Lola, but thats diffferent.
*tries to pinch Bill's cheeks, but get slapped away harshly* B-but *stunned wibbles*
Author's Response:
WAY DIFFERENT.
rnBill. ಠ_ಠ
Date: 06/29/11 07:53 am Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
It's so sweet. . . Come on Tomithug, claim the 2nd kiss. . .
Author's Response:
C'mon c'mon c'mooonnnnn already...
rn/bites nails
Date: 06/29/11 07:01 am Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
WOAAAH UPDATE! *throws confetti & does a crazy dance in the middle of the street*
Umm, what can I say? I just love this story, soososososososoososos(...)sosososo SO much! And I can't wait for a kiss after which, Bill won't have to wipe his mouth... HEHE *swoon* I think I don't need to tell you with who it's supposed to happen *shifty*
...
NO, NOT NATE!
Author's Response:
I KNOW, IT CAME OUT OF FUCKING NOWHERE
rnIt's on it's way :D
rnWHAT DO YOU MEAN NOT NATE THEN WHO ELSE?
Date: 06/29/11 05:26 am Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
"I am a human being," Tom said, leaning around the corner and narrowing his eyes at his roommate.
"What, who told you that," Bill demanded, glancing up from his magazine, eyebrows raised. "Shouldn't you be whisking something?"
Tom's jaw jutted indignantly. "I'm not your slave, you know."
"Oh please, don't give yourself so much credit," Bill scoffed
BAHAHAHAHAHAHHA!
FUCK I LOVE YOU FOR WRITING THIS STORY! It's cute AND it makes me laugh so much
Author's Response:
I FUCKING LOVE YOU FOR REVIEWING AND QUOTING
rnROCK ON ROCK LOBSTER
Date: 06/29/11 05:24 am Title: Saying Grace
"It's not something that comes up in conversation often. I understand you may not know this, since it requires actually talking to people, so I'll overlook it."
Bill gave Scotty a wary look, where he was cocking his head at Tom, perplexed, while Tom scritched his flanks. "It looks retarded," he said.
"Oh you're welcome," Simone dismissed. "It was more Tom's idea, I think he just wanted to weasel the recipe out of me."
"Lies after you just said grace? Dude, Mom."
- OMG, there was so much humor in this chapter. I kept giggling at it. It was so great. One of the best fanfictions I've ever read so REALLY great job on this.
Tom & Bill are so cute together.
I love them so much & I love your story so much too!
Author's Response:
Dude, wow, thanks! So effusive with your praise, are you sure you're not hitting on me, I mean c'mon
rnThank you, thank you, thank you! And yes. Yes they are.
Date: 06/29/11 05:08 am Title: Bad Boys, Bad Boys
"Hey, I'm a catch," Bill said defensively.
"So? So are 20 foot Great Whites," Tom said as he got behind the wheel
OMG, this is great! :DDDDDDD lolololol
Author's Response:
Haha, thanks! I LOVE SHARKS
Date: 06/29/11 03:41 am Title: The Green Eyed Tomnus
;_; Kibbles I love you ;_; I must confess, I fell asleep last night reading this because I was so tired, but that made it last longer :D How DARE she take Bill's kiss? That was Tom's >.> I will forever hate ALL people named JENNY D:< I related news... Can I just... Tie Tom and Bill up until they smex? >.> You're just so amazing ;-; Cripple and Baby Thug... It's cute, though it reminds me of that one South Park episode... Hmmm... Okay! Now I'm going to pester you to write... MORE! Mehehehe ^-^
Author's Response:
If you are going to literally rope them into having sex you might want to mind what position they're in. Just a thought.
rnEW SOUTH PARK but it's okay I still love you