Date: 09/26/11 05:12 pm Title: The Teenage Dream
Ah, this chapter: I tried too hard to make it last and failed. The ending was a mite danglingish or maybe I just wanted more...
What I adored was Bill's trolley ride with the groceries on top of him and his ineffectual attempts at shopping control.
'Gently bite your man's foreskin and tug on it, it'll drive him wild'. I've never even had a blowjob and that just sounds like a bad idea."
*prays to changefrog God* Please let Bill be implying a Tom-based desire.
Bill smelling Tom's shirt in one scene and punching Tom in another. Is it wrong to find this sexy?
Awww, their first fight since kissing. Bill is kind of like the woman in the Gift of the Magi, sacrificing himself to make Tom happy when Tom was already happy.
Love Tom's parental tone on Bill's disgusting creamed corn & BBQ sauce. Was this based on your fav snack or sommat? Post eggplant recipe?
Put me in for an order for a change frog, please.
Author's Response:
IT'S VERY DANGLY I was going to make a wildly inappropriate comparison but decided not to
rnHahaha, YES. So much fun to write!
rnTHE CHANGEFROG GOD HAHAHAHAHA THAT IS SO AWESOME, LETS MAKE THIS A THING NOW OKAY. And when is he not having Tom-based desires? We'll get into that next chapter.
rnIT IS NOT. Because I do too.
rnGift of the Magi! I have always loved that story. <3
rnMy roommate was similarly repulsed by my propensity for canned foods and raw foods. :/ THEY'RE GOOD OKAY. As long as they're not cold. Ugh. The eggplant is simple; lop off the top, and either slice it or just shred it with a fork in the pan - then fry it in low oil with egg, garlic, salt, and pepper. You can add a little bit of flour/breadcrumbs into the egg before adding it, to make it crunchy. You can eat it on it's own, or on skinny spaghetti. VERY HEARTY. V V GOOD STUFF.
rnI will do! Ours is getting old too, so.
Date: 09/26/11 04:34 pm Title: The Teenage Dream
The change frog is freaking adorable! And this fic continues to crack me up so much, it puts me in such a good mood XD
Author's Response:
Isn't it! I LOVE THAT LITTLE GUY.
rnI'm glad! Your reviews do the same! <3
Date: 09/26/11 04:17 pm Title: The Teenage Dream
egbfbijolytihkwjsmiojdhkl Have I ever told you I love you? Yes? Well, good. Coz I do. So much. I just. I can't even. I just can't even think straight right now. I am just... so in love wtih this. And you. And this. And your characters. And this. And your completely utterly fantastic writing. Which, is this. But yes. I just love this so much that I want to cry. WHY ARE YOU SO FUCKING TALENTED? you constantly make me laugh and it gets me weird looks because my roommate just never laughs, and it's fantastic. Truly.
"JSYK eggplant is the devils fetus" is just about the most amazing thingI have ever read. I died so hard whilst reading it. I truly did. and and and I just love how easy-goingthis story is, but it still has drama and and that frog purse? I had one, but my friend accidentally threw it into a waterfall.
ANYPOODLE, thisis so fucking amazing and you have no idea how excited I am for more to comeeee~ (:
Author's Response:
YES. But say it again, my parents never hugged me as a child.
rnI love making you laugh! Few things make me happier, to be honest. ONE OF THEM BEING CANNED FOODS.
rn... accidentally. Into a waterfall. ... into a waterfall, accidentally. This... none of this sounds accidental.
rnThank you, thank you, THANK YOU! For reading, and reviewing, and just... sticking around, and being so cool all the time.
Date: 09/26/11 03:45 pm Title: First Step is a Stumble
CHEETOS WITH CHOCOLATE SYRUP! You have got to try it, it's sooooo yummy.
Date: 09/26/11 01:58 pm Title: The Teenage Dream
I can't even begin to explain how much I adore this xDDDD
Author's Response:
My heart is gladdened regardless! Thanks for letting me know! <3
Date: 09/26/11 01:23 pm Title: The Teenage Dream
How is this story so perfect? HOW? Bill, I swear to god, is such a fool. Tom lasted a long time, dealing with that, but the manhandling in the end was totally worth it. I think by this point in any other story, I'd be RABID for some sort of declaration, but honestly, I love how this is just slowly dawning on them, how they feel. Even if Bill is loathe to put a name to it. And man, I was waiting for someone to catch them making out against the car. Hmmm.
Good stuff and I'm so glad to have it. *_*
Author's Response:
My heart always skips a beat when you review, jsyk
rnBill is an absolute idiot, and for the most part, Tom is no better. But this time... Bill... man.
rnHahaha! I dunno if a declaration or an sort of officiality will ever eventuate, but I think one day things will become unavoidably obvious. :D Thank you for being so patient with this, and with me! D: <3
rnInterestingly enough, I initially wrote that someone did! But! This works out MUCH better, I think.
rnYou are so very welcome! Thank YOU for continuing to review!!
Date: 09/26/11 01:02 pm Title: The Teenage Dream
I canīt believe how uncertain Bill is... Everyone see that he is great boy with good heart, but he just think he deserve anything good in his life... Sometimes I hate his mother because of this.... It is really sad, his whole situation. But I am glad that Jessica talked to Tom and everything is alright now....
I like when Bill is blushing :) I donīt know why but it is extremely cute and sweet... But he is shy only around Tom and Tom is obviously enjoying the effect he has on him :)) The scene in the supermarket was great, with the director as witness of their kissing, next day every teacher in their school is going to know that they are dating :D
And Bill in shopping cart? I canīt imagine it :D
Origami and doing laundry - another sweet moments - Bill is really melting, good bye Snow Queen :)
I liked their argument too. It was refreshing, not everything is perfect everytime and a little bit of drama is always good... but I am glad Tom solved it all in the end.
Very nice chapter :) Now, when Bill is sure that Tom really likes him, I think they are going to make another little step in their relationship :) (I mean in sex life of course :D)
Author's Response:
Long review, long review...! /claps
rnWe're always our own worst critic, and experience has taught him not to rely on people. Hopefully Tom can persuade him to have a little faith in him. :)
rnTom does too! Bill is not a guy that blushes easily, that's the fun of it. And haha, probably! Riding in a shopping cart is fun! Try it sometime!
rnThat is the perfect way to phrase it! Melting Snow Queen. <3
rnI want this story to be as UNperfect as possible! Life is not very perfect in my experience, but when it is, it comes in small moments that last forever.
rnOh hell yes. Not a lot of porn this chapter, possibly TOO MUCH next chapter.
Date: 09/26/11 11:53 am Title: The Teenage Dream
another excellent chapter!
Author's Response:
Dude, thanks!
Date: 09/26/11 11:00 am Title: The Teenage Dream
OH MY GOD BILL WHY ARE YOU SO STUPID
WAIT. WAIT. DO THEY NOT REALIZE THEY ARE TOGETHER. HOLD ON A MINUTE. OKAY. BOYS STAY WHERE YOU ARE, I AM ON MY WAY THERE TO BANG YOUR HEADS TOGETHER.
Author's Response:
YES, THIS, THANK YOU
rnTHEY ARE BOTH CLINICALLY STUPID. NO THEY DON'T REALIZE THEY'RE TOGETHER, BUT THEY WILL SOON. HOPEFULLY. MAYBE.
rnDammit, how do you 'like' a review...
Date: 09/26/11 10:49 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Another great chapter. A joy to read. However I do havre one question: what is a change frog??
Author's Response:
Hahaha! That one seems to have thrown everyone for a loop! It's a frog-shaped change purse - I'll post a picture with the chapter soon, and probably also on Twitter! :D The mouth of the frog is the clasp, so you open it's mouth to feed it change! We used ours for laundry quarters. :3
Date: 09/26/11 09:35 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Lol as always that was a great chapter thanks!
Author's Response:
Hahaha! You are very welcome! Thanks for stopping by to review!
Date: 09/26/11 08:09 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Had so much fun reading this chapter.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you did! I was really worried!
Date: 09/26/11 05:22 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Wassee, who the fuck told you you could write such cute funny amazing shit? Hmm? Because I sure as hell didn't? Was it that damn Kirsten :l I bet it was. Damn that girl. Oh well, I still love her.
But tell me you don't eat that shit too! I'm with Tom that's just naaaasty. :l
BTW You totally wrote the story based off of the video :l Don't lie.
Author's Response:
I DID IT ON MY OWN BECAUSE I'M A GROWN-ASS MAN no but srsly I'm glad you guys liked it, I'm not... used to writing cute, sappy, romantic shit D:
rnI do! And tofu with warm chocolate syrup <3 Mmmmmm.
rnI CANNOT TELL A LIE unlike George Washington with his fake-ass teeth
Date: 09/26/11 03:35 am Title: The Teenage Dream
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In this chapter, he transfers in for punching someone in the face :)
Heh, I realized that just a few seconds ago XD Sorry
Date: 09/26/11 03:22 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Lol, I had no idea what a change frog is and was about to come down here to the review box and ask until it explained XD I, having autism that makes me literal, thought it was a frog-shaped thing that helps one change clothes XD
Punching people in the neck with your mouth ftw!
Heh, shopping mit Bill and Tom. Sounds fun.
Meh, I'd eat eggplant.
Wait, Bill's in one of Tom's classes? I haven't reread this since it started, so if you mentioned it, I must have forgotten.
Author's Response:
Hahaha! Yes, it was meant to be a little confusing, but not that bad! My apologies!
rnBill must taste better than normal people! And also Tom is just bitey.
rnI loooove eggplant <3
rnIn this chapter, he transfers in for punching someone in the face :)
Date: 09/26/11 03:19 am Title: The Teenage Dream
This fic needs to be my boyfriend.
Author's Response:
This fic circled Y on the note you passed it asking it out.
Date: 09/26/11 03:09 am Title: The Teenage Dream
creamed corn...with bbq sauce? ick. I love creamed corn,...but mixed together? meh. But I'm not a very big fan of bbq sauce in general.
Wonderful chappie, as usual. I really liked the bits with Jessie, she seems like such a nice girl. Bll really is a retard. When he saw that Tom thought he was upset, he shoud've clarified the siuation a bit, even if he didn't tell him exactly what he was doing...Does that make sense?
I have this strange feeling that the school rumor mill is going to be going crazy after Tom;s little outburst in Lit, and the comment on the quad about 'what went down at Lola's'...and also all the stuff that went on behind the car, not a very secretive and secure place to be doing stuff after all.
The bit about the purple shirt was so amazingly sweet and adorable, I'm surprised Bill didn't spotaneously combust. Its still very sad that he doesn't feel like he can go up to Tom and hug and snuggle him though.
Keep up the great work sweetness, I can't wait to see more! *huggles*
Author's Response:
It's one of my favorite snacks! That and tofu + warm chocolate sauce, mmmm. <3
rnThank you! I don't want people to hate on Jessica just by virtue of having a wagina. :( She's a cool gal, in my head at least, and hopefully in this story! And yes, Bill is dumb as a box of rocks. :/ So is Tom, but Bill especially. He's also stubborn, so even if he knows he should do something different, he won't. WHAT DOES TOM SEE IN HIM oh right his diq lewl
rnRight you are! Bill and Tom are already relatively well-known, having a beef over a girl just means more grit for the mill. THERE IS A LOT TO WORK WITH. I can't wait to have fun with it :D
rnI'm glad you enjoyed that part! I was worried it was too much. :D
rnMe too! Thank you for sticking this out, chapter by chapter - I love you for it, and just... thank you, so much, for everything. <3
Date: 09/26/11 02:44 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Bill in a shopping cart is the most adorable thing to imagine. How can he fit, though? He's all legs. He must fold over himself like some odd origami! Well, what do you know! Not long after, you have Tom fold Bill a paper crane! I can make those too, as it were~ Stop charming your way into my heart. There's this idea mulling around in my head, you'll be pleasantly surprised when it comes to fruition. ;)
Your sentences are so so long yet completely unacceptable. I don't know how you do it.
Bill, baby! He's all unconfident and unsure. But we readers know that yes-- Bill is the best for Tom! Not Jessica. Bill's a good guy, I think. I see his twisted logic, somehow. But he's so hard on himself, the poor Bibi....
Ouch. Their separation hurt to read. Ouch! Stop it, guise! Go back to jerking off together, please! Reading the fighty parts is like rubbing your eyeballs against sandpaper (or maybe I'm just really tired cuz it's so late).
Muahaha! Tom figures out the problem! Thanks, Jessica! Although I want to pet her hair and apologize. Go find another man, Jessica!
Their angry kiss and punching and stuff was oddly hot. So manly and shit. That whole scene was amazing.
And then you make me chuckle at the canned food bits. Ugh. Bill, so crass and unrefined and sweet and wibbly and look at what you reduce me to, Dreggs.
Author's Response:
His legs go outside the cart! I had to test this theory, despite being about a foot shorter than His Highness, much to my father's chagrin. I kept knocking things off shelves, but it was worth it. I HEART RESEARCH.
rn/hyperventilates/ :DDDDDDD DOES IT INVOLVE ORIGAMI BECAUSE I FUCKING LOVE ORIGAMI I used to be really good at making tiny cranes, like... squares of straw wrapper tiny. Not anymore :D Probably because I touch myself at night. ;_;
rnTHEY ARE RUN-ON SENTENCES AND ENTIRELY INAPPROPRIATE I AM SO SORRY
rnHis heart's in the right place! But not so much his stupid head. I'm glad it hurt to read! Because I'm an asshole, but mostly because I like to know it made an impact!
rnAnd yes! JESSICA IS A GOOD GIRL, SHE CAN DO BETTER THAN SOME DUMB GAY THUGBABY.
rnI am a sucker for sexual violence. Sometimes wrestling is fun! In the pants.
rnReduction of Melone~ perfect for everything~
Date: 09/26/11 02:32 am Title: The Teenage Dream
Another brilliant chapter keeping me from my meeting at the gym. thank you very much for being such a wonderful influence on me:) Pure love as always.
Author's Response:
It's not me if I'm not inconveniencing someone or mooching food! :D
Date: 09/26/11 01:11 am Title: The Teenage Dream
hey, just a minute ago I was looking here for updates and this chapter wasnīt here :))) So once again I am going to read it in work :D
I promise proper review will be here later :)
Author's Response:
I'M SNEAKY LIKE THAT
rnThat is also why you seem to run out of peanuts so quickly
rnI am sorry.