Date: 04/06/11 11:48 pm Title: Just Trust Me
OH, COME ON, A CLIFFHANGER, REALLY?????? dude, this is remarkably good.... only comments would be: vary your sentence structure and when you have dialogue, write it as one would naturally speak.... so instead of having someone saying "i am...." or some such, "i'm" and other contractions sound like more natural speech patterns... :D but, still, this is really good!!
Author's Response: I'll remember that, thank you :) rnrnAnd yes cliffhanger! I can't give you everything can I?
Date: 04/06/11 08:41 pm Title: Your Trust and Your Belief
Loved it! Can't wait to see what will happen next!
Date: 04/06/11 08:37 pm Title: Don't You Lose
Loved it! Poor McKenna!
Date: 04/06/11 08:31 pm Title: Back to Us
Loved it! What is wrong with her twin and why does he hate and blame her for everything?
Date: 04/06/11 08:25 pm Title: Your Trust and Your Belief
*gasp* ohh dear getting so good!! Wonde what type of crap is gonna happen next. Now why in the world would they appear all of the sudden? Bet they are trying to break her stubborn walls to make her weaker than she is. But in my opinion she is so strong in the circumstances that she is in!
Date: 04/06/11 08:19 pm Title: Don't You Lose
Oh thank goodness he got taken away! I cannot believe he actually wanted her to die! But wait...if her father is back does that mean he brought Mackey too? Gotta read on >>
Date: 04/06/11 08:11 pm Title: Back to Us
He threw her out the freakin window??!!!! *clicks next chapter button* O_O
Author's Response: I am really glad you like this XD I love writing it just as much
Date: 04/06/11 08:04 pm Title: Over 1000 Seas
I wonder what made makey react thar way I mean her own twin turning against her how sad. Better read the next one to find out >>
Date: 04/04/11 06:16 pm Title: Over 1000 Seas
Loved it! Can't wait to see what will happen next!
Date: 04/04/11 10:32 am Title: Back to You
Urgh! Hurl at first sight...this Amanda chick is bile building up! Georg seems like the ultimate sweetheart. Gustav I don get why he would not stand up and help. But them again he can't cuss a girl and he is a new student, and trouble on first day lives on forever. Haha, oh I almost forgot to say how I absolutely LOVE how u name the chapter headings! Leading it through the lyrics of 1000 oceans. NICE! It fits perfectly :)
Author's Response: I am glad you are loving it! AND finally someone picks up on it :) It took me forever before I was writing this what I wanted to name the chapters, and let me tell you, this song did fit perfectly and I am so glad you agree :) More soon love :)
Date: 04/04/11 08:25 am Title: Back to You
Loved it! Can't wait to see what will happen next!
Date: 04/03/11 07:18 pm Title: Deep in Me
Loved it! Can't wait to see what will happen next!
Author's Response: I am glad :) I will have more posted soon :)
Date: 04/03/11 07:13 pm Title: I Carry Your Picture
Loved it! Poor McKenna!
Date: 04/03/11 07:06 pm Title: The World has Lost its Light
Loved it!
Date: 04/03/11 07:01 pm Title: The Sun is Frozen
Loved it!
Date: 04/03/11 06:42 pm Title: I Follow Every Breath
Loved it!
Date: 04/03/11 11:35 am Title: Deep in Me
How can u expect a six yr old to understand? It is not possible for a mind of innocence to corrupt such confusion and hatred at a young age. No wonder she is screwed up! The poor child did not know better. Her mum sounds just as bad, not understanding in the least so sad =[