Date: 04/22/11 09:20 pm Title: Bumps and Bruises
This really wrings my heart dry. In a way, it's harder having someone who cares so much for you, right there, than it is having no one at all. It's much harder to hide away when someone's looking out for you, you know?
Author's Response:
I'm glad it effected you so deeply; in truth, I was worried it wasn't holding up to the rest.
Date: 04/22/11 08:48 pm Title: Sorry
*cries*
Author's Response:
Aw, damn, sweetheart... /hands over the box of tissue, smothering hugs
Date: 04/22/11 08:38 pm Title: When the Music Stops
I'm going to be honest. That hit a major memory switch.
Author's Response:
I'm both glad and sorry it did. I would never, ever wish anything like this on someone; if anything, I wish you didn't know the slightest thing about it.
rnBut I'm also glad that what you resonated with you, evoked something in you. It's like a back-handed compliment.
rnThank you, for being so honest with me. I really appreciate that. It means a lot to me.
Date: 04/13/11 08:37 pm Title: Bumps and Bruises
Ohhhhhk so the end of this chapter was quite serious but then when I saw the little face in the "end notes" I laughed out loud. Ahahaha what IS that face? Gooood chapter though and I'm looking forward the the next!
Author's Response:
Just what are you trying to say. ಠ_ಠ
Date: 04/11/11 10:28 pm Title: Bumps and Bruises
This is awesome. So intense! I doubt Tom would truly believe Bill's lie in real life though. Actually, I'd like to think he would have sensed Bill in danger and then arrived just in time to help Bill kick those guys' asses before they hurt him! ;)
Author's Response:
I'm glad the intensity really struck you! I personally believe they are one person and have the same thoughts and feelings and are therefor impervious to pretty much everything.
Date: 04/11/11 08:55 am Title: Bumps and Bruises
ಠ_ಠ silly face is silly. The whole Tom scene was tragic! Absolutely tragic. Made me wanna cry! Bill is so strong and I wish he would talk to people but its just so sad! So many exclaimation marks in this review! Honestly I also really appreciate your use of italics... you know... how you actually use them for the purpose they're intended and in a meaningful way that adds to your story. Not just seemingly for fun! Amazing. Also "Tom smirked, leaving their pinkies linked" made me wanna CRY! Amazing. As always.
Author's Response:
Excuse you this is serious business ಠ_ಠ
rnLOL J/K I LOVE YOU WITH ALL MY EXCLAMATION POINTS <3
rnPinky links~
rnThank you so much for your review, and all your praise! You really keep me going!
Date: 04/11/11 05:19 am Title: Bumps and Bruises
Nnnnh Poor Bill. You know I'm surprised that Tom didn't pick up on Bill's emotional stress earlier and find out something had happened. I can understand Tom being pissed, I would be too.
Author's Response:
Who wouldn't be? Hopefully things will shape up soon!
Date: 04/11/11 01:38 am Title: Bumps and Bruises
I agree with Steinsgrrl; it's a good, thick layer of believable angst.
So sad ;.; But I'm gonna keep reading
Author's Response:
Happy to have you onboard! Pull up a pretzel and have a seat!
Date: 04/11/11 12:59 am Title: Sorry
Oh man, exams were so insane I must have missed this chapter when you updated! It was really well written. I love your little details so much like the zipties. Perfect. Very hard to read but very worth it. I can't wait to find out who did it!
Author's Response:
There's another chapter, hope it clears some things up! I'm amazed to see you reviewing, and so positively! Thank you so, so much! And yes; ZIPTIESES. Thanks for noticing! :D
rnAlso, good luck on your exams! :D
Date: 04/10/11 11:26 pm Title: Bumps and Bruises
Wow, Tom played right into everything they said, without even knowing it. Which will only serve to convince Bill that he deserved it. Man, the angst is thick and so good.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for noticing! And double heartfelt thanks for enjoying and reviewing!
Date: 04/10/11 11:21 pm Title: Bumps and Bruises
Bill's gonna crack. He's so warped now, and he's bottling it up. They broke his mind. He thinks it's entirely his fault. u_u Man... This is depressing to read, but that ain't gonna stop me. I'm gonna go find some fluff now, something really sweet and fluffy.
Author's Response:
You have the right of it. There is a fracture on the horizon.
rnThis is both flattering and disturbing, JUST HOW I LIKE IT. I'm glad I can string you along - and I did write a happy thing :D Once :D
Date: 04/10/11 11:12 pm Title: Sorry
Dang. ..Dang. It's gotta get better from here on, right? Bill's thinking is convoluted with trauma.
Author's Response:
MMMMMMMMMMMMMMAYBE
Date: 04/10/11 10:58 pm Title: When the Music Stops
I'm not even sure what is going on at this point. I must be missing something, so I'mma keep reading. It's fascinating.
Author's Response:
I know I fascinate you, you... fascinator.
Date: 04/04/11 09:30 pm Title: Sorry
Ooooh, I liked it.
Author's Response:
Right on!
Date: 04/01/11 12:48 am Title: Sorry
*sobs* I'm at a loss of words here, on one hand I'm incredibly proud of Bill for being so brave and on the other I just want him to break, to cry and weep. The biggest question is who? Who did this and what gave them the right to think that it was their place, or warranted that behaviour. I'm seriously upset and pissed off so I guess that means you did exceptionally well hon. *clings*
Author's Response:
The next chapter should answer some of these things. It's so great to hear you so riled up on his behalf!
Date: 03/31/11 11:50 pm Title: When the Music Stops
oh hell, as much as there maybe some semblance of truth in what his assailants said, their actions are never going to be excused. The fact that Bill believes he is to blame saddens me terribly. *sobs*
Author's Response:
Ahaha, I like that someone acknowledged that, yes. I also like how much you review! MY MUSE~
Date: 03/31/11 11:25 pm Title: The One Hour War
This is going to make me cry isn't it? I just want to hold him and hopefully take the pain away. The process of telling someone and being checked out and interviewed is just as demeaning and invasive as the incident itself so I don't blame Bill for his indecision of not telling anyone yet. This is harsh, but perfect in that you captured Bill's emotions or lack of brilliantly. *huggles*
Author's Response:
To be totally honest, a sadistic part of me hopes it does. BECAUSE YOUR TEARS KEEP ME YOUNG Because it means I've achieved what I set out to. :D
rnI wish you didn't know that; but yes, it's absolutely true. For some people it can be empowering, it can bring a sense of closure; for others, it's like being forced to relive every detail.
rnHuggles, Hell to the yeah brah
Date: 03/31/11 10:26 am Title: Sorry
This chapter hurt so much, I don't even know what to say. Bill's thinking is so wrong, and yet I know how easy it is to fall into that trap, especially after something so traumatic. I want to know what he did in specific that he thinks he deserved something like that. His attackers wanted him to repent for something. It really worries me that Bill doesn't want to tell anyone, because that will just give his attackers more control over his life. It especially worries me that he doesn't want to tell Tom. That can not go well.
Some of my questions were answered, but now I just have new ones. What mistake did Bill make [or think he made]? Who are his attackers and how are they involved? Are they going to return? Will the pictures and tapes get out?
Unrelatedly, you slip tenses toward the end. The last few paragraphs are in present tense while the rest is past tense.
Author's Response:
I love hearing what questions you have, and where you see the story going! It's super insightful - sometimes I get so deep in a story I forget I'm not part of a collective consciousness, haha!
rnShould be fixed now, thank you so much!
Date: 03/31/11 12:08 am Title: Sorry
In every word, you can feel Bill's horror and how tightly strung and closed off he is now. Amazing writing. I'm just in awe. And BALLS, indeed!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I don't have words to express how happy I am to hear how much you're enjoying this! Ironically enough. Wait, ironically? Yes. No? WHATEVER.
rnYOUR REWARD http://bit.ly/hTkZQT
Date: 03/30/11 07:48 pm Title: Sorry
This was heartbreaking to read, truly. Bill in silence and pain and solitude and confusion just breaks my heart.
So he was attacked by strangers who just wanted to demean him and exploit him in the worse way! And the incident was recorded, and that's his only concern at the moment? This type of thinking scares me really. Its almost as though he hasn't really acknowledged that this has happened to him. Its almost hypothetical. Prognosis bad so far.
Again great writing and I enjoyed reading it however heartbreaking it was.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I love how in-depth you've been with your reviews, I love hearing your thoughts! That's precisely what I wanted to convey, that distortion of thought. Things will change soon!