Date: 02/07/12 09:41 am Title: Curious Georg
I love the way this is written. It's really casual and the way you jump through Georg's thought process is hilarious. I especially loved this bit: "And, believe him, there is absolutely no way in this universe or any other that Georg is getting off on watching his two best friends together like this. That would be so beyond wrong, and he knows it. Therefore, he is not, got it? No way, at all, nope, not, negative, okay? Impossible.
Except for the part where he really, really is.
Georg is hard, achingly so. Realizing this brings him to a whole new, off the carts, record breaking, brand spanking new level of uncomfortable"
and his moment of realisation when Tom was being fingered. Priceless.
Just a couple of grammatical mistakes to point out.
'Knowing this, though, doesn’t unstuck his feet from the floor' unstuck should be unstick. Unstuck would be past tense, as in his feet are already unstuck. Also 'off the carts', I think you mean 'off the charts'. And at the very end when you say Bill is leaking on his stomach, I may have never seen a real penis before but unless I've got gravity all wrong I'm pretty sure it wouldn't be leaking upwards. It'd be more likely to be dripping down his leg or on the floor.
Once again, I absolutely love this style of writing and think you did a great job :)
Date: 02/06/12 10:04 pm Title: Curious Georg
Oh wait, I already reviewed this one! NO MATTER. I shall just read it again.
Date: 02/04/12 09:26 am Title: Curious Georg
HAHAHAHAHAAHAHAH!!! I don't think I've ever read a fic where the author has made this type of horrifying (for Georg) scene hilarious!! Very funny. I esp loved the line "Except for the part where he really, really is." which had me LOL'ing for real.
You're a good writer, don't doubt yourself. And this was funny and sexy and very witty. I love how u describe Georg's feelings and his internal struggles. Well done. :)
Date: 03/24/11 12:20 pm Title: Curious Georg
oh goodness, this is amazing!!!!! i love your writing style, not many people can pull off the realistic-type of writing. it's really funny and soooooo epic!!!! *adding you to favorites* (and i'm being 100% honest, here) ^__^
Date: 03/24/11 11:59 am Title: Curious Georg
Whoo-hoo! Who in their right mind wouldn't run on in? I loved the funny narrative style in which you've written this.
Date: 03/24/11 06:09 am Title: Curious Georg
I really enjoyed this. There were a few witty lines that me laugh out loud, and the scenes you described were HOT. Oh, if only Georg had stayed~
Date: 03/24/11 04:17 am Title: Curious Georg
You know, I liked it! I honestly don't have any concrit to offer up at the moment, but that's because--and I'll e honest--it's 4:15 in the morning, and I'm too tired to write a whole lot. BUT I WILL BE BACK. Believe you me e_e But really, I think it's good. ♥
... Part two? :3 ...It was worth a shot. XD