Date: 03/16/11 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hahaha! That was cute and funny. I enjoyed the light, "boyish" atmosphere here. And Tom jerking off - even with his brother's lip gloss - is damn HOT. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Oh, I didn't know it had come across "boyish" but I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Date: 03/13/11 11:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is great! Tom is so horny, it's rediculous, but Bill should have helped him out! I fully support Tom's decision to get himself off masterfully with Bill's lipgloss :D
Author's Response: Hehe thanks :) And true, Tom's actions are absolutely justified due to Bill's behavior xD
Date: 03/13/11 12:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Is English your first language? I get the sense that it's not. But the funny thing is, rather than the whole fic completely sucking, I also got the sense that you're a really, really good writer. It's just there were some awkward word and word order choices. Still, what a great idea for a story!
Author's Response: Nop, it isn't. And thanks? Yeah, in a way. I umm think I'll take THAT as a compliment :)
Date: 03/11/11 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
The sick thing is that I have thought about this before. Tom and his sparkly dick..besides talking honestly Bill does have good bj lips. Nice and full on the bottom, you can't blame poor Tom
Author's Response: Definitely can't blame Tom for that ;)
Date: 03/11/11 06:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hahah! I loved this and it was far more than 'readable'. Bill's reaction was just priceless :')
Author's Response: Thanks a lot! He's such a diva, I know xD
Date: 03/11/11 04:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
*is slumped over desk laughing* oh god. i think that just turned me into a Tom girl bwahahahaha! Oh this was awesome!
Author's Response: Really glad you enjoyed Tom's raunchiness here lol
Date: 03/11/11 12:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hahaha, that was awesome! And you KNOW Tom using his lip gloss made Bill hot. ;)
Something I noticed, you used "purse" instead of like "man purse" or "murse" and you get kudos for that! *highfive!* 8D Because, seriously... it's a purse. xD
Author's Response: Thanks! :) AND totally agree there; Whether it's a man or woman the one wearing it, it's still a purse! xD *highfives back*
Date: 03/11/11 09:06 am Title: Chapter 1
Lol. Tom was sick and twisted, but that was funny. Using bill's lip gloss.
Author's Response: Agree, he really is sick in here lol