Date: 02/13/11 09:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
Is Bill involved with a much older man 0_0 This was a great chapter, and it was nice to see Bill and Tom having a civil conversation...for the most part anyways. I'm looking forward to more! XD
Author's Response: Indeed he is O.O Thanks for the review! <3
Date: 02/13/11 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 3
28 O.O That's a bit too old :s What is Bill thinking >.
Author's Response: Stupid Bill thinking that Adam is the guy for him. *shakes head*
Date: 02/13/11 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 3
Hello again.
Don't get mad, this is neccecariy. > Don't get mad; this is necessary.
"Hi Mr. Staright," > "Hi, Mr. Straight,"
number 11 in the C-buliding > *building
"About what happened in the showers yesterday, Bill said > you missed the ending quotes
looked questioningly into Tom'e eyes. > *Tom's
'Maybe that's why he doesn't seem to know who I am,' Tom though to himself. > *thought
"Oh I don't know. Maybe because .." > add comma after "oh"
And cell phone is two words ;)
Author's Response: Thank you SO much! I just realized I suck at betaing my own stories, maybe I should ask someone to do it for me the next time. Thanks for helping me out, I really, really apprechiate it :D
Date: 02/13/11 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Update more soon??? pleaseeeeeeeeee??????
Author's Response: Yeah, I will! Next one will be up today :D I'm SO glad you like it.
Date: 02/13/11 07:31 pm Title: Chapter 3
i liked this chapter much more, but maybe thats because it was bill and tom time lol :3
Author's Response: Thank you! More twin time to come ^.^
Date: 02/13/11 07:18 pm Title: Chapter 3
i like the plot so far? but im like wondering who bill likes at the time adam or andy lol
Author's Response: Thank you! He's over Andreas, he doesn't wanna be with someone who can't admit to the public that he likes him. So he's with Adam now, who has no trouble doing that. Stay tuned! Lol
Date: 02/13/11 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 3
Adam? LoL Cant wait till for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! ^^ It will probably be up either today or tomorrow
Date: 02/13/11 06:20 pm Title: Chapter 3
Poor Tom. It seems he didn't have them all with him this time around.
I love Bill in here. He's almost too funny and bitchy to be true.
I'm looking forward to read what's next.
See ya.
Author's Response: I love it when Bill's acting like that :p Thanks for the review!
Date: 02/13/11 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love Bill's disinterest in Tom lol. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Haha, me too. Thank you! (:
Date: 02/13/11 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 3
Hehe, if you don't mind I'm gonna go through the chapters and scan for spelling errors. And make suggestions.
So for this one, I'd replace '28' with 'twenty-eight'. In proper writing it's best to write out numbers.
And for the phone call, instead of spacing it out, just have each line followed by pauses. Like:
"Hi.. Oh, hi, Adam! ..I'm still in school, I've been helping this guy with his homework... Sure, I'd love to. Where shall I meet you? ...Sounds good, I'll be there as soon as I can, okay? ..Bye."
Author's Response: Thank you for pointing that out, I've changed it now :) And if you see anything else you would change, please let me know! I'd really appreciate it
Date: 02/13/11 03:11 pm Title: Chapter 3
Fantastic chapter.
^-^
Author's Response: Thanks again :-D I really appreciate it
Date: 02/13/11 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like this story :) Tom's a jerk xD
update soon please :)
Author's Response: Naw, deep down he's good xD I will update soon, probably tomorrow (:
Date: 02/13/11 01:14 pm Title: Chapter 3
28?? *shakes head* Bill, Bill, Bill....
Awesome chapter!
Author's Response: I know, Adam is not the guy for him.. He just doesn't know it yet.rnThank you so much!
Date: 02/13/11 10:14 am Title: Chapter 2
thanks for the update!
Author's Response: No problem! Next one will be up today (:
Date: 02/13/11 01:30 am Title: Chapter 2
LOVE IT! I really like Bills character in this story. Thanks for updating and looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much ^^
Date: 02/12/11 11:40 pm Title: Chapter 2
Hi.
I'm really liking the story so far. Bitchy!Bill is always the best.
Anyway, I would love to read what's next.
This is getting interesting!
Author's Response: I know, it's so much fun writing about Bill when he's all diva-like :3 Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: 02/12/11 09:24 pm Title: Chapter 2
LoL Bill is a badass :D
Author's Response: Badass!Bill <3
Date: 02/12/11 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 2
i just looove bill! gah, he is awesome!
Author's Response: He is! I looove writing about him (:
Date: 02/12/11 07:07 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ooooooooh, I want more, now!
Author's Response: Aww :D:D
Date: 02/12/11 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
"Her03; then traced ar03"
and theres one more i believe like that only smaller. but thats about it.
it was good, maybe a bit dry in some parts but you did good :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I just read it over and found quite a few typos D: Oops