Date: 02/01/11 12:11 am Title: Chapter 9
aww, this chapter was so sweet. and to answer your questions:
1) i think it's fine the way it is, not too perfect or anything, because it's moving along nicely. this is a point where it should be perfect, so it's good to me.
2)i think Tom's good for now, cause he and Bill just met and he wants to help, but if he's like this throughout the entire story, then it'll become a problem. but since you dont plan on it being that way, it's also good ;)
3)i like 'Tomi'; in fact i love that nickname, but 'Billa' i have a problem with. it makes him seem weak, girlie and dependent on others. and there's no way that someone who survived living on the streets is any of those things. for me, i like to use 'Billie' or just plain Bill. it gives him his manliness in the stories.
4)for me, the drama will happen when it will. but just like my answer for number two, if it stays perfect, then- and only then- it becomes a boring story. but since you have things planned, i think it'll all be awesome. i have a lot of faith in this story and your writing.
Author's Response: Awh, thank you so much for this review! It has really helped me think about things! I think I will change Bills nickname now you have pointed that out, I can understand how that wouldn't really be appropriate. So I will go back and change it. And yeh I do have stuff planned so there will be drama at some point but that's only going to come when the time is right. And thank you - this review really meant a lot and was really helpful. (:
Date: 01/31/11 11:55 pm Title: Chapter 9
1.) No, I think it is great!!!
Author's Response: Ok and Thank You
Date: 01/31/11 11:51 pm Title: Chapter 9
I dont like to much drama cause when their is toi much it becomes a bit Boring... I think the story is perfect the way it is... You should keep on going with your ideas and keep suprising us :) a bit of drAma a but of fluff makes everything peeerfect ;)
Author's Response: Wesome. Thank You! (:
Date: 01/31/11 11:48 pm Title: Chapter 9
More drama!!!!!!! me gusta tu fic!! :D
Author's Response: Ill take that on board.
Date: 01/31/11 11:44 pm Title: Chapter 9
i love the characters of tom and bill in this fic and i dont beleive there "may sue like", they just both have good intentions, and i personally feel its realistic so far and a little drama along the way will help keep it up, so addicted to this story though :)
Author's Response: Yeah I was trying to focus on their good intentions but I was just scared that it was getting boring. & Thank You
Date: 01/31/11 05:13 pm Title: Chapter 8
i think your pace is good, definitely not too slow. it seems realistic. My only constr crit is that this chapter seemed to have a lot more typos and little spelling errors than I've noticed in any previous chapters.
Still, thanks for the speedy update. I loved Tom's reaction to Bill's revelations. I also liked Bill's introspective moment with the mirror.
Author's Response: Thank You - I think I will stick to this pace for now.rn
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And was there? Thank You for pointing it out! I hadn't noticed, if I have time I will go back and correct anything I spot. (:
Date: 01/31/11 02:59 pm Title: Chapter 8
I like the story and i am happy that tom is trying to help bill i can't wait for the next chappi i am so anxious! lol
Date: 01/31/11 10:26 am Title: Chapter 8
You're moving at a good pace, imo.
This is touching, and beautiful, and I am excited to see where you take it.
I think it's great. :)
Author's Response: Thank you. I think i will stay at the pace i'm going at, for now.
Date: 01/31/11 04:16 am Title: Chapter 8
I think it's perfectly good as it is right now. It is absolutely perfect!
Author's Response: Thank You.
Date: 01/31/11 01:04 am Title: Chapter 8
Well... Telling some one why you were thrown out of your home takes time. Tom needs to tell his parents the truth but be very careful about it. Bill is sweet and I love Tom for taking him in. I think his parents would understand but it will take a little time.
Author's Response: Mmm, that's what I thought, but then if I took things slowly and at a 'real life' pace, would it become boring and seem like nothing is happening?
Date: 01/30/11 11:58 pm Title: Chapter 8
i really hate Bill's parents here. kicking him out because of his life choices. everyone has a right to feel what they feel. everyonr deserves to be treated fairly.
and to answer your question...i think it's too fast in some places and too slow in others. like, wouldnt tom be a bit more hesitant in helping Bill? but i guess he's doing this b/c he's attacted to him. and their affction for each other....does Bill like tom back?
ugh, don't listen to me right now, i'm half asleep. love the chapter and i honestly think it's fine. forget my rant.
Author's Response: I think that's kinda what I'm thinking, but then I don't know where to sped things up and where to slow things down. And thank You.
Date: 01/30/11 10:10 pm Title: Chapter 8
i think the story is going at the right speed. it really enjoyable and i look foward to every update ^-^
Author's Response: Thank You - I'm glad your enjoying it
Date: 01/30/11 09:25 pm Title: Chapter 8
I'm so happy that Bill & Tom had that talk. Tom is too sweet & I hope he's able to help Bill. Great chapter! Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank You! (: next update will be tonight as usual!
Date: 01/30/11 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 8
Another great chapter! I loved it :)
Author's Response: Thank You
Date: 01/30/11 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 7
I think Bill is gonna tell Tom about his past, I'm curious myself...darn the curiosity! *Shakes fist dramatic like* Ok I'm done lol.
Author's Response: Haha, you'll just have to wait and see! :P
Date: 01/30/11 08:25 am Title: Chapter 7
Omg it is awesome!
Author's Response: Haha thanks!
Date: 01/30/11 05:06 am Title: Chapter 7
I am amazed over how fast you updated this story, great great job!!!
And lovely chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you!! What I do is, write a chapter every night check it and then submit it. I write it and submit it to the site within 3 of starting the chapter. I know how annoying it is when fics are not updates in forever!
Date: 01/30/11 04:35 am Title: Chapter 7
I cant wait to find out about the past!!!!
Author's Response: You'll find out soon! If Bill decides to tell Tom that is! :P
Date: 01/30/11 02:25 am Title: Chapter 7
Thanks for another speedy update. i love this story. =)
Author's Response: No Problem and Thank You!
Date: 01/30/11 12:04 am Title: Chapter 7
I hope he tells him! XD I can't wait for the next chapter!! :)
Author's Response: Haha, you'll just have to wait and see. And don't worry, you won't have to wait long. The next chapter will be up tomorrow night, and at an early time because I have to be up early Monday morning. (: