OMG, it makes me think that they were killed while parting from the kiss... And that's incredibly sad, but incredibly sweet too. That's why I want this story into my favorites.

Author's Response: thank you sooo much. :D

Damn Lullus.... you seemed a little umm.... idk, .....aren't an abstract human being? O.o I mean, you do seem like it.....

I liked this story. I give you an A+

Not suckish at all I promise. When I first started reading it I was thinking, "oh shit, it's going to be a death fic isn't it." When I finished it two thoughts ran through my mind- "Oh fuck it is a death fic." ...and "What the hell.... is the war over?? Yay the war is over *w*."

let me dream... just please let me dream. I always find that the last line in a story is very important. Yours is almost poetic. In a sense that that last line of yours could have any meaning. So I choose to give it the meaning of freedom and peace.

I hope you write more. Abstract writers are pretty hardcore. And this story is really good. ESPECIALLY if you wrote it at a whim.

later for now


~Ria ^-^

Author's Response: i don't know if i could be considered abstract.rnits just that a lot of thoughts go through and out my mind, and i can't really capture what i'm trying to write.rnso stories don't turn out as good as i want them too.rnand thank you so much for your compliments. :)

I'll be honest. I liked it, but I didn't get how Bill thought he could run from a war. :/ Well, I do because that's what everybody wants, but then I didn't. >.>

I also didn't understand why the people who supposedly started the war were in a sewer....while Bill and Tom were in a hole in the same sewer. o_O Just didn't get that at -all-.

I didn't get the last line either. Maybe it was a dream? O.O I dunno.

Another thing, it seemed rushed. But since it was about a war, maybe that was the point? .::Wonders::.

However, as your first I'm gonna say that this is pretty dang good. I like it because this shows you have imagination. All you need to do now is simply work out your details in the story and plot better and your set!
^.^

I hope I didn't seem harsh. :S I'm in a picky mood, but I also felt like giving out advice. XD ^^' which I find funny because I still don't like many of my own fics. D:

Author's Response: thank you so much for the constructive criticism.rni'll take your advice next time. :)