Date: 09/01/07 09:07 am Title: Fear
OMG!!
..OMG..
Dont stop.. dont stop.. keep going!!!
Date: 08/31/07 07:23 pm Title: The start of something bad
i hope u update soon, cuz this is one of my favorite stories! :)
Date: 08/28/07 11:09 pm Title: The start of something bad
I really don't know what to say about this fic. It's completely out of character. For instance, if Bill was honestly getting stalked, I doubt he'd wait 3 months--especially since the person is getting into his hotel rooms--before saying anything. Secondly, Tom would not be so blase about Bill being in danger. He'd probably tie Bill to himself in order to keep an eye on him at all times. And while Angel is a very hot Mary Sue character, she's not a very good bodyguard if she's left her charge to go dance with her husband at a club. And last, but not least, I'm sure that if Bill left the club, Tom would follow b/c the door CAN still be opened. It seemed so final in the story. You know, as if once Bill closed it, it couldn't be opened again. Tom SHOULD--if he was written in character--have followed Bill and dragged him back inside. NO matter how upset Bill was.
I'm sorry. I tried to get into this with an open mind. However, while the plot could be good, it is so OOC and bizarre that it takes a reader out of the story. I would suggest that you get a beta, re-think the plot, write it more realistically (come on, how bad is the security in these hotels that this person is getting into all of Bill's hotel rooms--repeatedly?). If you take more time to consider the plot, I think this could be really good. But right now, it's all over the place, it's unrealistic, Tom is an asshole who is really written in an unfavourable light...there's just too many things that I can list here.
Date: 08/28/07 08:46 am Title: Pain
that was realy gd when will the next chapter be finished? got to no wat happens 2 bill lol!
Date: 08/27/07 03:29 pm Title: Pain
OMFG. The stalker cutted him up?! He hit him whith a knife?! Shit O.O gosh I hope someone'll save him O.O 2 questions: when will you update and is this going to end soon? I love this story and you're such a great writer you know! Kiss
Author's Response: thank you. I think there will be about four chapters left. And I will be updating either tonight or tomorrow.
Date: 08/27/07 02:02 pm Title: Pain
OMFG!!!! aaaaaaaagh!poor Bill!!! I can't wait to know what happens!!
Date: 08/27/07 12:48 pm Title: Pain
Argh! Can't wait for the next part! If only Tom hadn't been so silly. And why did Angel's husband show up? *on tenderhooks* :D
Date: 08/27/07 06:40 am Title: Pain
i don't knoe why but stories where bill gets hurt are THE BEST! lol...and i love urs..lol
Date: 08/27/07 01:48 am Title: Pain
OH GOD!!!TOM...TOM where the hell is he !!! TTOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Date: 08/27/07 01:27 am Title: Pain
O.O
What happens next?
Poor BIll :(
i wanna kill that stalker!!!!
Date: 08/27/07 12:13 am Title: Pain
omg
hope he will be oki ç_ç
tom move!-_-"
love it anyway!
post more soon ç_ç
Date: 08/26/07 10:53 pm Title: Pain
Dont kill bill!! i really like this story. update soon plz.
Date: 08/26/07 09:41 pm Title: The start of something bad
this is the best friend of the account owner, she just had a nervous breakdown and i ask you to please continue this so we can get to work on time tommorow. also the swimmers we will be coaching tommorow ask you to write faster; the more annoyed she gets, the more work we give them to do. ^_^ p.s. i love the story too!
Author's Response: I will try my hardest to update soon. promise.
Date: 08/26/07 09:40 pm Title: The start of something bad
Gah!!! I MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!!! You left us hanging! XD
Date: 08/22/07 05:56 am Title: Questions and Answers
Oh no!!! you're just gonna leave me hanging... WHAT HAPPENDS !!!!!! oh gosh, please continue
Date: 08/22/07 05:54 am Title: Questions and Answers
OMG!!!
..Dont stop.. never stop!!
.. im on the edge of my seat.. keep going Argh
LOVE IT :D
Date: 08/22/07 04:17 am Title: Questions and Answers
love this story!!! cant wait for more!!!!
Date: 08/16/07 02:38 am Title: The start of something bad
when are u gonna post more
i'm hooked on it
Date: 08/14/07 05:40 pm Title: Angel's Tale
Ooooh good one! But I want to know more ç_ç anyway, I doubt about Angel too...
Anyway.. Sorry, I didn't get what Georg found in Bill's bathroom o.ò
Author's Response: You will find out what Georg found in the next chapter. And I promise that Angel has an important role coming up.