Date: 05/01/23 12:25 am Title: 01 An Unexpected Surprise
I've mentioned this on other reviews: I came into the TH / THF fandom in Jan’22. The vast majority of fics I've read are quite old and I'm sure the authors have moved on (and probably wont even see new reviews), BUT I figure why not leave one anyway… I enjoyed this fic and wanted to say thank you for writing and sharing it!
Date: 10/05/12 12:39 am Title: 03 'Don't leave me.'
o.o DA FUCK. I THOUGHT TOM LEFT BILL..
Date: 03/11/12 08:40 am Title: Epilogue
This was amazing.
Loved the rings
And the ending was soo cute I actually awed out loud haha
Date: 02/19/12 01:16 am Title: Epilogue
Okay... Well, I'm sure you know what I think already, thanks to my other reviews, but this could have been a lot better. It had the potential to be brilliant, amazing, beautiful... any number of adjectives meaning "good/pretty." Instead, it was melodramatic and confusing. You skipped over some very important parts and made some other important parts unimportant by making them so overdramatic that it almost made me want to laugh. Sorry if this seems like a flame, but I'm not trying to make it one. I'm just saying what I feel needs to be said.
Date: 02/19/12 12:56 am Title: 09 Fight
Okay, where did that come from? With Tom and Andi, I mean. He'd gotten ANGRY at Megan for saying that, and then he went and said it to Andi. That makes no sense whatsoever. The Tom you'd been writing would have told Andi "Yeah, I'm sorry man. She'd wanted to go out on Saturday, and I told her you guys were coming, but she came over anyway," or something to that effect. SUUUUUPER OOC for your Tom, though I don't know how the real Tom would react.
Date: 02/19/12 12:50 am Title: 08 Dreams
No offense to your friend, but her grammar's terrible and she can't write smut. I understand it was her first time writing slash, but still. The first time I wrote slash, even though it wasn't GOOD, it still had a few basic facts straight. Like, for instance, that you have to prepare the uke or it'll hurt like hell. By the way, even though the story needs work, your grammar is amazing =)
Date: 02/19/12 12:30 am Title: 04 Mistakes
YOU KEEP SKIPPING ALL THE MOST IMPORTANT STUFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You can't DO that. It might be hard to write, but when you skip over the in-between stuff it makes the story confusing and it makes the "highlights" meaningless. I have no clue where this came from all of a sudden, and it really just doesn't make sense in the storyline. You also did that with Tom's phone-call to Megan. Without the backstory of their relationship - which we would have had IF you didn't skip over all the little conversations and things that go on between friends - her thing about Andi doesn't make any sense at all. And Tom's reaction to it DEFINITELY doesn't make any sense. I mean, if I heard my significant other saying that one of my best friends just wanted to get into my pants, I'd be pretty fucking pissed about that. Tom glosses over that without even acknowledging it and goes right into his "You can have a life but I can't" rant. You need to show more of the stuff before Bill comes in order for this story to really make sense.
Date: 02/19/12 12:22 am Title: 03 'Don't leave me.'
You skip a lot of important parts of the story...it can be pretty confusing. I mean, what you didn't skip is good. But you're putting all the highlights into the story without any of the in-between stuff, which is just as important as, if not more important (sometimes) than, the highlights. Remember that all the juicy back-info about the characters comes out in the in-between stuff.
Date: 02/19/12 12:14 am Title: 02 Memories
You seem to have skipped a chapter... it goes from Bill telling Tom he's a guardian angel to Tom being laughed at by Bill for believing him. If it's supposed to be the continuation of the last chapter, then it really should've been part of the last chapter. I think a better place to break it would've been after Bill walked away, when you wrote that Tom had been avoiding Bill.
Date: 02/19/12 12:09 am Title: 01 An Unexpected Surprise
Tom...must be so confused. New kid just... well, basically attacked him, and then told him he was a guardian angel... I'd be so confused. I'd be like "wait, what the fuck? Who does this guy think he is and what is he talking about? Is he a stalker or something?" XD But I can't wait to see what happens.
Date: 05/11/11 02:56 pm Title: Epilogue
Nice story was so sweet how they got together finally
Date: 02/25/11 02:56 am Title: Epilogue
OMG you need to continue! That was so abrupt! I haven't had enough of the story yet! *is sad*
Author's Response: Red Roses (the sequal) is always waiting ^-^
Date: 02/25/11 01:19 am Title: 01 An Unexpected Surprise
Lol I know what you mean! I've never read slash before December 2010 and the idea of it was too weird. Than I kinda fell into THF and well, I can't read anything else! Tom/Bill are too damn good together hmmmm... Plus all those twincest YouTube videos don't help lol. I enjoyed your first chapter! Looking forward to the rest ;-)
Author's Response: i know right! still, i cant bring myself to read Het o.o i've just gotten so addicted to the guys ;P im glad you enjoyed it ^-^
Date: 02/20/11 09:15 pm Title: Epilogue
noooooooo!!!!!!! it cant be over!!! this story was so freakin awesome. and i love the humor at the end ^_^
but it just CANT be over!!!!!!
Author's Response: awww you can read Red Roses if you want more ^-^ and hehe i had to have a little humor in the end :D
Date: 02/20/11 08:03 pm Title: 01 An Unexpected Surprise
well... its clear bill is very straight forward ^_^
this seems like such an interesting awesome story
Author's Response: hehe very straight forward :P and thank you ^_^ it gets more interesting as you go along ^_^
Date: 01/26/11 12:03 pm Title: Epilogue
ooooooohhhh that was so freakn cute i luvd this story!! gud job!!
Author's Response: hehe thank you!! ^_^
Date: 01/26/11 01:32 am Title: Epilogue
Great fic, with a great ending! Very cute XD
Author's Response: thank you ^_^ cuteness and sweetness are my specialties :3
Date: 01/25/11 11:50 pm Title: 08 Dreams
I hate that Megan, why is Tom still with the slut if he loves Bill so much? Dump her, then we'll all be happy.