Date: 06/01/11 11:33 pm Title: Chapter 19
I thought Bill was smarter than that! I fear for his and Andreas' life!
Date: 06/01/11 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 1 *REPOST*
*shakes head at Jorg*
Date: 06/01/11 08:48 pm Title: Chapter 19
Poor Bill and Tom. :-(
Date: 06/01/11 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 19
The plot's a good idea. But it seems like you're only just skimming what could be a really good story, as in there isn't much depth to the characters and the story so far. It seems a little thin. Also, I'm finding both the story and the characters are lacking in emotion, so for the characters I don't really get a strong sense of what they're feeling and can't particularly relate to them or really get into the it.
As I said before, I think the plot's interesting, so I'm looking forward to reading more when and if you decide to post more chapters.
Hope you don't mind me giving a bit of criticism. :3
Author's Response: I hope this next chapter has more of the emotion in it that you're looking for. Hopefully my next chapters get more in depth. I guess it just seems weird to write such long chapters to me. But I will start really working on that. Thanks for the advice.rnrnI don't mind criticism at all. It's helpful!
Date: 06/01/11 07:50 am Title: Chapter 18
bill YOU IDIOT!!
Date: 06/01/11 12:17 am Title: Chapter 18
God I just want to hit Bill up side the head what a dumb boy
Date: 06/01/11 12:01 am Title: Chapter 18
well.... tomi's jealous, andreas is confused... and bill's just plain out of it... :D great job!!!!!
Date: 05/31/11 10:15 pm Title: Chapter 18
Yes Bill, yes. You are stupid!
Date: 05/31/11 09:24 pm Title: Chapter 18
He still told him XD What are best friends for right lol
Date: 05/31/11 09:19 pm Title: Chapter 18
That was really dumb bill, smh
Date: 05/31/11 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 18
Oh woah Bill, really? I mean, really?! Are you stupid or something? Gah, I really hope he knows what he's doing.
Date: 05/31/11 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 17
Bill handled that waaay better than I thought he would! I was all ready for him to completely fail :P
Date: 05/31/11 07:19 pm Title: Chapter 15
For some reason I seem to have missed the last trillion updates. -_- Anyway I've figured out where I am now. Poor Bill, he's getting himself in such a pickle :(
Date: 05/31/11 06:10 pm Title: Chapter 18
I feel bad for Tom but hopefully he won't be mad at Bill for to long. Hope Andreas stays safe.
Date: 05/31/11 05:39 pm Title: Chapter 18
Wow, Bill, you truly are stupid.
Date: 05/31/11 04:08 pm Title: Chapter 17
I'm not sure I like that Bill has gone over to the dark side. It seems too fast and out of character for him. Glad he is accepted into the family though, that makes life easier for him and Tom. Was that last line jab at Tom from Jorg?
Date: 05/31/11 12:16 pm Title: Chapter 17
Bill is a Kaulitz, yay! Wait, is that a good thing? :p
Date: 05/31/11 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 17
Bill is a Kaulitz, yay! Wait, is that a good thing? :p
Date: 05/31/11 10:56 am Title: Chapter 17
Bill seems to be a natural at this crime stuff lol. Anxious for more.
Date: 05/31/11 10:44 am Title: Chapter 17
uh oh, that was quite a burn.
Very nicely handled on Bill's part. Kinda surprised he was so smooth and cool with the whole selling people thing.
Very nice work this chapter! Ilook forward to the next update, and I am particularly interested in Tom's reaction to what his daddy said about Bill.