Date: 11/21/10 10:43 pm Title: Pulse
I, personally, LOVED the humor in this.
I found is funny, and very creative.
Though, I would have been more careful in posting this.
Hopefully, you meant nothing more than to add your own twist to the oh so amazing original plot.
But some people tend to take that differently.
All in all though, I enjoyed this(:
Date: 11/05/10 05:51 pm Title: Pulse
I enjoyed this immensely. It was like the personality was someone new, someone different that was living inside of him, and I had to keep reminding myself to think of it as Bill, because it was essentially him. But in Devil form. I thought you did a fantastic job; I loved how he ate away at everything the real Bill did, how he made fun of him and hoped he would stay away so he'd keep his body. Marvelous! Annalas would be proud [:
Date: 11/04/10 08:11 pm Title: Pulse
O.M.G........im like speechless......I absolutely love it....at first I didnt get it, having not read the original story, but after a while I got in the story...Im still freakin speechless, the way the voice speaks to Bill makes it sound literally like a puppeteer and his puppet. Its as if Bill is not able to control himself, yet he is.....it intrigues me.
Date: 11/04/10 05:29 pm Title: Pulse
I've not read the original, but to be quite honest this story rather reads like an MST more than anything else, which is why I couldn't finish it. I don't mean to offend you, but it just bored me and I stopped in the middle somewhere.
I do think it'd read better if it wasn't composed of just the running (angry) commentary but would also include more of, well, a story.
Date: 11/04/10 03:45 pm Title: Pulse
Wow, that was so differet from anything I've ever read! I was a little confused at first but I think I picked it up once I'd read on a bit :) It was written in such a unique style, I admit it took a bit of getting used to, but once I had I saw how cleverly written this was. Although I spent most of the time feeling bad for Bill, it was very well written. You're definitely a talented author :)
Date: 11/04/10 06:16 am Title: Pulse
Wow, this was good! I loved how it offered an alternate to Flatline - there was such a sarcastic but bluntly honest to this, calling all the characters out on their actions. Absolutely hilarious as well, I loved the references to Twilight and Jason!
Very brave to be so contraversial too. Every great romance and well-intention can be completely ripped to shreads when you stop looking at the emotions behind them and just look at the actions and consiquences. I loved how this said "look, you might have been in LOVE but what you were doing IS a crime." It doesn't detract from the emotions in the original fic but it offers a more cynical and realistic point of view to consider.
And the ending was so chilling. Wow, just... wow!
I loved both this and the original fic, I'm such a sucker for alternative interpritations!!
Date: 11/04/10 02:39 am Title: Pulse
So...I've read the original. And liked it fairly well. And when I heard that this might be remixed I was extremely excited.
And now, having read through this, I think I partially want to barf. I hate writing rude reviews. Hell, I even hate writing reviews where I have to say something not entirely...nice, but I had to sit here and say something about your portrayal of Flatline.
It sucks, truly sucks when I read a remix story where it seems like you seriously got your jollies off insulting the entirety of a fic that someone put hard effort into writing. It sucks that you could, perhaps, be a really decent author, but I would never know it because of the utterly appalling way you tore this fic to shreds.
Let's not even get into the fact that you giving Bill a MPD here was completely and totally inappropriate. It's almost as if you didn't even bother to look up the disease, or to see if Bill in "Flatline" even had signs of having MPD.
Sighs, I really hate having to leave this review, and I REALLY don't feel like being accused of flaming, but I had to say that I feel like this entire remix is a flame against the original author's fic, and that's just sad.
Maybe I just didn't get what you were aiming for. Maybe this fic completely went over my head in terms of your goals for it, and maybe I'm just a bit...confused about all of the ripping to shreds going on.
Or maybe it's just because the MPD thing doesn't make a whit of sense to me. (probably because it's the wrong diagnosis for someone like your version of Bill, because usually MPD (or DID) requires that at least two personalities routinely take control of the individual's behavior with an associated memory loss that goes beyond normal forgetfulness; it generally doesn't involve someone living inside someone else's head spewing vitrolic comments).
Anyways, I'm extremely sorry if this review upset you. I just...I had to I guess, stand up for the original story, the original characters, and in a sense the original author.
Date: 11/04/10 02:17 am Title: Pulse
You know, it's not every day that one gets to read something like this. I consider myself fortunate.
Because, honestly, a psycho alter!Bill who is slowly plotting his revenge is excellent. Truly, truly excellent.
I have read the original (multiple times). I have to say though, at the risk of possibly offending the author, I loved this... so much more.
And you know what? Who cares if it doesn't really make sense? Why should everything have to? (I'm pretty sure that the original didn't either)
Also, I am definitely planning my next vacation in the land of Passive-Agressia. It should be quite an interesting week ;D
Date: 11/04/10 01:26 am Title: Pulse
In a weird way, I actually kind of liked this story. Like the others, I found it a bit hard to follow plot-wise. I probably would have understood more had I have read the original piece. But, I liked Bill's inner dialogue. As crazy as it was, it was pretty funny. I really liked the idea that there's this entire dark side living inside of him, biding its time until it can take over.
Date: 11/03/10 11:23 pm Title: Pulse
I must say that I was a bit confused while reading this. The fact that I haven’t read the original must not help tho. But this remix definitely intrigued me! I like your idea of writing this from the point of view of Bill’s personalities. It makes the fic very original and interesting! I think the title you chose is very cool, kind of a contradiction to the original one, I love it!
I don’t think I ever read a fic with a character like your Bill in this! He’s funny in a mean and weird way and I enjoyed reading about what he thought of what was going on. There was a lot of hilarious moment in this, really funny fic!
Good job on this remix! Even if I was very confused at first, I end up l enjoying it cause it was different from what I’m used to read :)
Date: 11/03/10 10:37 pm Title: Pulse
It's so nice to hear what others think of my fic ^^;
Date: 11/03/10 08:10 pm Title: Pulse
I think I really need to read the original, I was slightly confused by this...it might have just been me though XD