Date: 11/03/10 03:21 am Title: Searching for a cure and getting left behind
Great story, and a even more great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: 11/03/10 03:17 am Title: Searching for a cure and getting left behind
This is so good so far I absolutely love avatar and I love the idea you have for the story. And what jerks leaving Tom and gustav
Author's Response: Yeah, it wasn't very nice to leave Tom behind, but there were a lot of people on that ship (like, over 1000) and something on the planet was making them sick so the people in charge made an executive decision to get out of dodge, fast.
Date: 11/03/10 03:16 am Title: Searching for a cure and getting left behind
I was JUST wondering if it was Na'vi. The "skxawng" was a big clue. :3 I really love sci fi, and you're doing a great job with this. Looking forward to seeing where this is going!
Author's Response: Ha, yeah well "Skxawng" doesn't really look like how its said (prononced more like scown) so I don't know how many people will make that connection. Glad you like it so far!
Date: 11/03/10 02:44 am Title: Searching for a cure and getting left behind
Oh my goodness, I knew they were going to meet in less than preferred circumstances.
I hope we'll get to see how Bill/Baaile knows english so well. About the language, I think it's fine if we're left guessing too.
And gah!! The ship left! That's horrible
Author's Response: Yes, Bill and Tom will not be getting along right away. You WILL learn how Bill knows English so well (there's a story there). Glad you agree with the defining-the-language thing. Yes they left poor Tom behind. He must have felt like E.T. When his ship left without him. Thanks for the review!
Date: 11/03/10 02:30 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
Signed Plan'ik? As in like sign language?
Lmfao, if I were Tom I'd be pissed too. How dare Gus take a person from their planet without their permission!
"..and it has an NOH atmosphere!”
Mmm, pretty sure this is a mistake here. The only compound I've managed to find similar to that was HNO, which is nitroxyl. But that doesn't exactly have to do with our atmosphere... We do have hydrogen and nitrous oxide, but I don't think they can compound...
I'm sorry, I'm a very literal person.
Author's Response: Yes, like sign language, but obviously not Earth sign language.
Tom's especially pissed becasue he hates space and never wanted to go in it.
don't remember where I got the NOH thing from, but I researched it somewhere. It could very likely be wrong and actually kill humans, but I'm going to pretend it's right and hope noone else picks up on it.
Date: 11/02/10 06:14 pm Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
I'm liking where this is headed, though I'm not a fan of 1st person. Other than that, I really like the story line and will track this story to see where its headed:)
Author's Response: I really don't like first person that much either. It seems more... immature to me. But I started this in first person forever ago from Toms's POV, and I din't want to change it and lose the insights it gave into his character. So I figured I'd do a bit for Bill too and then change back to third person.
Date: 11/02/10 12:32 pm Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
I think I'm intrigued.
Author's Response: Good, I want you to be.
Date: 11/02/10 11:22 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
MORE!! By any chance did u get this from the Fic Prompts? I just learned bout the othr planet & sun that was discovered. THANK U FOR THE STORY!!
Author's Response: Nope I didn't get it from there, thought it up myself forever ago after seeing Avatar. But I did hear about that planet they discovered.
Date: 11/02/10 08:53 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
i really hate avatar but that sounds interesting, i will be waiting for more :)
Author's Response: Oh my, I love Avatar! I was a kickass na'vi for Halloween. Don't worry, this fic is not going to be like Avatar.
Date: 11/02/10 08:19 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
Wow, this is great. Your dialogue is really...modern, I guess? Like, realistic and believable, not like mine where everyone pretty much talks the same way. XD But yeah, and your details and description are amazing. It was really a pleasure reading this and I can't wait until the next chapter. I'm very interested about Bill and his culture and so on, and what he's going to do when he meets Tom. :)
Author's Response: I tried to talk about things without explaining them, and leave it to the reader to figure out. That's what was done a lot in A Broken Hallelujah and I really liked the effect it had. So thanks!
Don't worry, I'm going to make Bill and Tom meet in the next chapter, and you'll leaarn a lot more about Bill and his people.
Date: 11/02/10 07:52 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
I can't wait to read more!!! :D
Author's Response: Great, thanks.
Date: 11/02/10 05:49 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
Really liking this so far! Please update soon :)
Author's Response: Good to hear, updates soon.
Date: 11/02/10 05:05 am Title: Stuck in the black and going to Esid
I think its awesome so far, and I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks!