I wasn't sure of the exact situation, but I had a feeling it was all in his head, that the mental break happened at the car accident. This was very...twisted and odd. You did a fantastic job with it, though I am confused about how brigitte wound up at the factory, and why no one thought to look there after Bill had severe depression stemming from his brother's death and that was the catalyst for all his problems

That last bit was...kinda boggling, with the breath at Simone's neck. You mentioned in an earlier chapter that yo see edits like you would film edits, and this last scene definitely had a film feel rather than a fic one....I dunno. It was good, just...confusing, as I am sure you intended it to be.

Umm...I didn't quite understand the bit about the clocks and him trying to ground himself with the time. Could you explain that a bit?

Fantastic work. Is it sad that I'm really glad I didn't read chapter three before bed last night?

Author's Response: Please accept my apologies that I did not respond to this in a timely manner. u___u I rarely visit this site anymore.

As for the car accident, yes, you before many probably understood this. Or, partially. I encourage anyone who has read this to make up their own conclusions to almost everything I've presented due to this story's symbolic nature, however intentionally Bill was to not have escaped that car crash in reality as unscathed as he first appeared to - or as his mind had convinced him.

As for the time checking, among people who suffer from things like involuntary lucid dreaming, although sometimes even for regular dreamers too, it is a method of comforting your mind and certifying that the dream is not real. For someone like Bill who has such a disorder, it is easier to snap himself out of a dream when he can rationalise in his mind that what he is experiencing could not be reality, thus being able to wake himself up, seeing as clocks in his very realistic dreams never display realistic times. It is a very common thing to never be able to read time in dreams, lucid or normal, which is why it is good for convincing your brain that what appears to be reality is really not so.
However, in one of the final scenes in which Bill was still in the parallel... hmm, dimension (?) of the factory, in the state of reality in which it was still occupied at any rate, he finally finds a clock only to see that it displays a realistic time (in the scene with the uniformed people). This is shocking to him because he was trying to rationalise that this crazy, surreal place he ended up could not have been real, but a very vivid dream, and without the reassurance of the unrealistic time on the clockface, he believed in whole then that this situation must be real. In the epilogue though, I give hints as to what I believe is the reason he was in a situation in which had realistic and surreal factors at the same time.

Hehe, it seems I got carried away in my explanations. It is partially because these final two chapters are not of the same time and notes as the first two, it is a frankenstein story so I probably was not able to project my full intentions to the readers as I would have liked long ago. u__u I cannot be sorry enough for not posting this story fully when I had all four original chapters together, but what's done is done. Thank you very much for reading my story, I am glad you liked it despite it's flaws and cliché undertones. n__n

So he's lost his mind! Wow. Was this all a dream? Was this something paranormal going on? This was very well written and utterly horrifying! I hope you've never had to deal with hallucinations like this. I've luckily only had a few violent dreams I can remember. The mind is a wondrous thing, to alter perception and reality to this degree.

I liked that this didn't have a happy ending. I like endings that aren't happy, too.

That dream sequence with the sink and Bill being terrified and questioning reality....omg, that was so vivid and scary. ...you rock!!!

And then the second one. I'm so lost, but in a good way! I feel lost and confused like Bill. You said every detail was intended, so after I read this through I will read it again, to digest and reflect. :)

Oh my fucking god that scared the shit out of me! I really really really hate horror but this was so so good :D thank god i read it during day time and not before sleep like usually because i would've shit myself :DD i really want to know more about this story, get deeper into it see hoe now Bill is in Toms world and how it contiued. Anyway ur amaizing just so u know and id love to read more... Theories like this. Just... Pleas dont overdoit on the playing with meat stuff :D

Author's Response: I'm surprised it scared you. o.o; I didn't think it was scary enough to scare anyone, I was aiming to be just mildly disturbing at best. XD Haha, well I feel like this will be the end for the Tom and Bill of this universe, but your thoughts are appreciated! LOL "meat stuff"/ XD Thanks for reading and making me smile. I'm glad you liked it!

I liked the first two chapters, when I read them some time ago. And this sick side of my mind like this chapter, too, but it´s like omg-wtf-what-just-happened!? xD Completely insane. I´m going to read epilogue.

Author's Response: Hahaha, well sick side or not, any side liking the story is good enough for me. :)

O.o speechless. wow.

Author's Response: I hope in a good way! (?)

omg. I love it!!! The story is sooo surreal and I don't even know how to describe it. it's amazing and crazy and have I said crazy? I'm not really familiar with sleep paralysis and stuff but this is just awesome.

but i have a problem.. I'z scared nao. -hides behind Tom-

Shudder

Hi, i've been following this story all the way through (tho not when you first wrote it)I liked it i did but now i feel really confused and i've got the shivers (thats good, means you've written a good, creepy story)

All i want to shout at you is THAT CAN'T BE, THAT CAN'T POSSIBLY BE! and not in a bad way, its just, wow Bill is crazy! :'( and i still don't get it and i know you wrote it without an ending so that readers can make up their own minds, but can i ask anyway, i don't like feeling confused.

So was Tom actually the mentally-unstable part of Bill, is everything he says how Bill really feels? like when he said "she took you away from me"?

Does he have a condition or not? or maybe his "going to sleep" was just another way of saying hoing insane.

Is it all because of Tom's death? Is Tom really dead?

Don't know how or why but i'm starting to think Bill was in that hospital the whole time.

And whats going on in the room with their Mum? it really creeped me out (its still creeping me out,)

I know it ruins the whole point of an open-ended story but please could you tell me if anything i've said is how you wrote this? i don't like feeling confused.

On the other hand i also think that the fact you've confused me means you've done a great job with your story.

Author's Response: Ahaha, is that so. I understand this can be a bit confusing story, I apologise. Your questions are most welcome and I'll try to answer as best I can.

Honestly, I find your idea that Tom is actually a part of Bill's concious, the mad, raw part of him interesting. I suppose you can see it that way, I think it is plausible, but that was not something I considered when writing. I think that Tom's ability to understand and 'hear' Bill's feelings before he can vocalise him does support that theory, and I would say that it is definitely probable that Tom's words and thoughts were echoes of Bill's own. So summary: in a generic way, absolutely.

Yes, Bill had a condition. The condition, you can argue is actually a result of his feelings and need for escaping reality, rather than the twisted dream like events a result of the condition.

Tom's death and anything in regards to that is ambiguous purposely. Being a paranormal story, I wanted to leave that up to your interpretation and beliefs. The only thing I certified was that Tom was missing, he suffered a great deal, and that he was never found, though the police presumed him dead. Perhaps he is dead, as others who have read have theorised that Tom is actually a spirit, rather than completely confined to Bill's mind.

You would not be totally wrong to think Bill was at the hospital the entire time. In fact, in the original-original version fo this story (the very first notes I drew up), Bill was in a coma almost the entire way through the story, but no one would have known that until the end. In this version, I imply that Bill had fallen into a comatose state once after the car crash that happens at the end of the first chapter, and from thereon the reality and events Bill sees is in fact all in his head. In actuality, he suffers a great deal of injury from that crash and ends up disappearing days later, and thereafter, we know nothing about what happens until he is found again.

Haha, as for the room situation at the end, again, I'd like to leave that to your imagination. It could go a number of ways, from Bill actually being insane, to Tom's presence becoming tangible to more than Bill by the end. Perhaps even, Simone becomes subject to her own dose of temporary insanity, thanks to Bill's convincing actions. The question is really, is Simone falling prey to her own mind next, or is Tom realer than we first thought? It's up to you darling.

At any rate I hope I helped some. Thanks so much for reading! Your review and thoughts are much appreciated, and I enjoyed reading them! :)

SEQUEL!! omg i loved this. ive been craving a story like this for so long. i hope its not weird to say that this made me feel better,since i was in a bad mood prior to reading tis. omg i loved it. i wish their was more. |_|

Author's Response: Awww, thanks! I am so very glad you loved it! Makes me smile~~ ♥ Thanks for such an enthusiastic and sweet review! You made my night! ♥

He´s schizophrenic... Or he is in denial and his mind took him bak to the past where Tom was still alive... I just keep wodering, how did Tom die??

Author's Response: That is left open to your own, personal interpretation. It is implied Tom dies at the hands of an extreme cult. It's interesting to hear you think he is schizophrenic! Thanks for reading! :)