Date: 10/23/10 08:20 am Title: the right to claim
Awww. This was like a porn fairytale. lmao. This is very well written and especially very unique. I have to say though, that suspending my disbelief of medieval times being so erotic was... not hard, but a bit funny actually- I don't mean it as a negative critique, cuz I'm sure a part of you also thinks so, but it just popped into my head at random times that this would NEVER actually happen, and it just made me chuckle.
However, having said that, I think this was also gutsy, crazy, and somehow you pulled it off. The little motifs, like the way you describe colors being dull or vibrant, and the way Tom is demanding but gentle, and Bill is... haha, probably scared shitness but horny and shy... oh boy, it worked so well. You paint the "medieval" picture SO well. My fav is your dialogue, phrased somewhere between olden times and now which makes it alluring and even sexy, and then there's their clothing (or should i say garb, lol), and you even substituted words in your narration for more "medieval"-sounding words. lol. You're so good at this kind of fairytale fic.
I guess this is another little masterpiece from you. One day you'll be the Hans Christian Andersen of the porn community, I'm sure of it. lol. :)
Date: 10/22/10 10:32 pm Title: the right to claim
Aww, what a sweet ending! I love that Tom gave Bill his life back - it seems to me that Bill would have been miserable with Nathalie, and he'd never even have realized it, really. I also love Tom as the kind king/master.
Definitely going into my favorites.
Date: 10/22/10 12:05 pm Title: the right to claim
*dreamy eyes*
This is just so perfect.
I think they whole 'Droit de seigneur' is kinda kinky. But I love shy virgin bill and tom his king.
And umetnica's art is of course incredible.
Date: 10/22/10 06:07 am Title: the right to claim
That was such a treat. I am sorry it took me so long to start reading your work, but after this one I wonīt be able to stop. Historical setting of your story make it so super sexy and thrilling. I had to go and check your profile because I thought immediately you must be somehow drawing your inspiration from myths and fairy tales, and I was right.
Great story and great writing. Symbolism of colors in Billīs life was really nice.
Any hope of getting a sequel .-)
Date: 10/22/10 05:49 am Title: the right to claim
Aww, beautiful :') I loved the color theme, and the lovely sexmaking, and the fact that tom and bill have obviously held their memories of each other precious within so it makes it...less of a sudden event and more of a...coming home? I dont know...
Date: 10/22/10 04:16 am Title: the right to claim
Dawwwwwwwww I almost cried at the end. Bill got his colour back in his world, all because of Tom. They are so in love
Date: 10/21/10 11:01 pm Title: the right to claim
Bill is always so fortunate. Wonderful story, as usual xxx. I had to lol at the 'fornicating under consent of the king' implications. Tom is law!
Date: 10/21/10 09:08 pm Title: the right to claim
awwwwwww so sweet!
i have a new name for Bill "my nightingale"
Date: 10/21/10 05:50 pm Title: the right to claim
Mmmm :) I'd take my right with either of them, given I was a king. Very sexy, and charming indeed in a fairytale sort of way (well fairytale for adults but all the better ;).
Date: 10/21/10 03:48 pm Title: the right to claim
As soon as I saw this I knew it was gonna be amazing - and it didn't disapppoint! This is so adorable and sweet. I love how you managed to make Tom dominant and in control, but still tender and caring at the same time.
From the moment Tom arrived to claim Bill, I started hoping that he would keep him and not return him to be married. So for me, the ending was perfect *__*
Date: 10/21/10 02:49 pm Title: the right to claim
I loved this! So sweet and romantic. I have a soft spot for shy twins no matter which one gets to play the part :)
Date: 10/21/10 02:39 pm Title: the right to claim
Ok. I'm just saying this now. You are officially undoubtedly my FAVORITE author EVER on this site of fandomness. I love every single thing you have written, though I never like... actually... review them. So yea. I'm a little avid fan always waiting for updates and cheering you on from the sidelines. ^-^
Date: 10/21/10 02:28 pm Title: the right to claim
Saw the banner, saw the author's name. HAD TO READ. Omg. So original, so brilliant. It was really well written, also write in such a formel and fantastic way. I actually had to google some words because I didn't understand them. *Blush* Not a native speaker. Anyway. This was. WOOOAAAH! Very hot and I like the thought of Tom being a king. :o Well, I guess he is a king in his own little world. XD Very nice!!
Date: 10/21/10 02:06 pm Title: the right to claim
Such an amazing story *____* ahhh.
Date: 10/21/10 01:28 pm Title: the right to claim
Just... *_*
Date: 10/21/10 12:53 pm Title: the right to claim
This could have been than a one-shot. Good as is tho. Nicely done.
Date: 10/21/10 12:04 pm Title: the right to claim
wow, this story is amazing. very well-written and the emotion is evident. i love it, great job.
Date: 10/21/10 11:02 am Title: the right to claim
This was wonderful! It's a one-shot, but I'd love to see more of it!
LOVED this!
XD
Date: 10/21/10 10:48 am Title: the right to claim
Oh damn. This was just about the sweetest thing in the world.
I don't know why but the whole first half of when they were together I was feeling sorry for Bill. Mostly because he kept saying no because he didn't think he deserved it, but I think my mind kind of mistook it as him not consenting to it. XD But obviously he did at the end. I think he just felt he didn't deserve to be with Tom that way and Tom was trying to get him to see that he did, but it didn't work out until the end. It was a pretty sweet transformation into acceptance. :)
I love your writing. You come up with the most beautiful words and you can just take something that sounds boring and make it this amazing story that everyone wants to read. You pretty much never repeat wording like I do all the time and I'm so jealous of that. Like, it seems every story I do has the same wording but then there's you and you make every story almost as if it's from a different, talented author every time. I don't know how you do it, but I admire it like crazy.
I really loved reading this. I don't know what else to say. ♥
Date: 10/21/10 08:42 am Title: the right to claim
I KNEW IT WAS YOU.
It just smacked of "you," haha. Anyway, like I said on the kinkmeme, this was great. Thanks so much for sharing!