Date: 04/24/17 12:20 pm Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
this was a good story!
i hope there is a sequel to this!
Date: 01/24/14 08:17 pm Title: It just HAD to happen.
a thud, and Brendon looked so worried that he had hurt the other boy and his child. He screamed and reached out for the pregnant man, helping him up then hugging him gently, not wanting to hurt the child growing.
I'm sorry..but...Brendon?
Date: 01/24/14 08:03 pm Title: Nosebleeds and Gingers
1.see is little baby.
2.d to call his baby dot, but
1.That should be his.
2.Dot should be capitalized.
Date: 01/24/14 07:53 pm Title: Mr. Kaulitz and a child named Burrito.
1.bounced Andrew on his
2.RBill smiled sadly at Andrew bef
3.planted and kiss
4.d ruffled the Childs hair, be
5.himself round the chi
6. bare matress.
1.You introduced him as Andreas.
2.An accidental R placement.
3.I think that was supposed to be plan.
4.Childs does not need to be capitalized and there is no need for a comma at that point in the sentence.
5.That should be around.
6.There should be a second t in mattress.
Sorry again about the nitpicking. I really do like the story. It's rather good.
Date: 01/24/14 07:22 pm Title: Because really, this shit is serious.
1.Bill hopped so.
1.Bill hoped so.
Date: 01/24/14 07:16 pm Title: Murdering Mr. Harper and naming babies Megatron
1.had to choose Polish
2.up and tight close, but you don't seem like
1.That should be chose, not choose.
2.Clothes is the correct spelling.
Date: 01/24/14 07:05 pm Title: Assumptions about Canadian Weirdo's
1.previous angry already
1.That should be anger.
Date: 01/24/14 06:59 pm Title: My milkshakes bring the pregnant boys to the yard...
1.take the gasses off,
2.Okay, now bill was a bit creeped
1.That should be glasses.
2.Bill should be capitalized.
Date: 01/24/14 06:45 pm Title: Say what now?
You called his mother Heather if the first chapter...and Simone in this one.
he slouched in the passengers side seat, and didn't listen when he told her to fix his posture,
The pronouns in this line are out of place.
pissed off and his answers.
That should be about instead of and.
Sorry...grammar Nazi got the better of me. I really like the idea of the story though :)
Date: 02/25/12 01:17 am Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
ahhhhh giver him her daughter back!! STAY up all night readin it love it evything you had me haning of my seat
Author's Response: Maybe he will ;D I'm so happy to hear! Thanks so much for the review :)
Date: 12/27/11 04:04 am Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
what the fuck just happen here??????
Author's Response: Haha read the sequel to find out ;o)
Date: 01/29/11 06:58 am Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
ok, that epiloge was fucked up. i really liked this story, and then...and then it just..like, what? NO. not cool.
Author's Response: I'm sorry! Read the sequel and hope it gets better, yeah? ;D Thanks for the review, doll!
Date: 01/28/11 10:36 pm Title: Intro
is there a sequel? i forgot
Author's Response: Yes, lol. It'll be called "Pathfinding" And I'm planning on posting the prologue around Feb.3rd
Date: 01/26/11 11:41 pm Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
*ded*.........*but so looking out for the sequel*
Author's Response: Thanks, love! It makes me so happy to hear you'll be reading the sequel!!
Date: 01/26/11 07:47 pm Title: Intro
I really dont understand LOL
Author's Response: Haha guess you'll just have to wait and see then ;D
Date: 01/26/11 07:05 pm Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
0.0
Author's Response: O.o
Date: 01/26/11 06:02 pm Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
O_O WHAT THE FUCK TOM?!?!?!?!?!?!?! Mother fucker... :/
Author's Response: Are you sure you wanna go blaming Tom right away, hun? No matter, Thanks for the one last review, it means a lot!!
Date: 01/26/11 04:15 pm Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
Speechless
Author's Response: Hopefully a good kinda speechless? ;D Either way, thanks for one last review, love!
Date: 01/26/11 02:02 pm Title: Epilogue is just a fancy word for "the End"
uhh
what? LOL
Author's Response: That's been the general reaction ;D lol thanks for the one last review! (: