Date: 09/29/11 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
Just commenting to say that I still think this is beautiful, and I'll be waiting for whenever you guys can update again :)
Date: 02/17/11 03:12 am Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
This story is amazing already. The writing style is fantastic! All these words that I don't know are fantastic! And it's just...fantastic!
Personally, I love that someone finally wrote a Titanic fic :) I watched the movie about a month or two ago, and actually thought about writing a story based off the movie myself :/ I hadn't known that there already was one :D But, I'm glad that one is in the making...because there's NO WAY I could have lived up to the amazing standards of this story! Gah, I think I'm in love :3
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix- I am so happy and flattered that you like the fic so much. I really appreciate it. I wish the likelyhood of this being updated anytime soon, or at all, was a lot higher, but I guess you never know. And don't feel as though you can't write a titanic fic as well because of this, there's actually two more fics based on it that I know of already on the site. Thank you so much for your kind words <3
Date: 01/12/11 11:53 am Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
Very interesting =)
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix- Thank you so much! <3
Date: 10/30/10 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
Hey Guys! *waves* Sorry was late for the review,; however, I had surgery on Thursday, and have been quite out of it. (I'm living up to my pen name, you see...) At any rate, why on earth do people have a problem with this story? I don't understand...*hangs head*
I am still quite out of it...*goes back to bed*
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix: No need to be sorry, the fact that you review at all is a fact that we are very happy about XD I hope the surgery went well, and I really hope it wasn't for anything too serious. I hope you are feeling better, and thank you so much for reading and reviewng the story! <3
Date: 10/30/10 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
:O uh oh!!
Author's Response: uh oh indeed! XD Thanks for reading, and we hope you will continue to stick with our story <3
Date: 10/29/10 08:23 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
*tears* if only they made the Titaninc version like this =')
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix:Yes, the only way that movie could have possibly been better is if Bill and Tom starred in it, lol. Can you imagine XD *starts daydreaming about it* Thanks for reviewing! <3
Date: 10/29/10 08:21 pm Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
OMFG i did a story so related to this! =D
except it was called Collasol
sadly it got erased...Beautiful!!
Author's Response: Thank you! ^^
Date: 10/29/10 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
Oh this chapter was most entertaining! Now I find myself talking to myself in haughty British accents like I'm one of the high society characters in this story! Quite marvellous, I must say! XD Alas, I do not think I can keep up the appearance, however! So let me regress back to the usual fangirl squeeing... :P
Well, the writing style between you and Estricnina (damn, I was hoping it would've gotten easier to write her name since I've been practising saying it...) does differ, but the differences are not glaring. You've maintained the flow and the tone of the story quite wonderfully. The narrration has similar wit and flows smoothly. The dialogue also is clever. The differences that are in the writing style in the first chapter and this one is not obvious at all and it does not feel disconnected or stilted at all. (Damn, I dunno why, but this bit of my review is more informative and better written than most of my other reviews... I guess it's the story that had made me slip into a more sophisticated mentality.... My usual mental state could'nt come up with something like that cus I'm usually too busy thinking about twinsex... *pervert*)
Anyway.... XD
>> Bill wasn’t even entirely certain all these fragments of memory were genuine anymore; perhaps it was his longing mind’s attempt to piece together a warm and whole image of the past to get him through the present.<< -------- Oh, now that was just lovely and sad! And I love the bit about the ring Bill's grandmother gave him. Looks promising.... :P
And Ho God! XDDD The part with Tom was just hilarious! Tom is such a simple, carefree, rouge! His grumpiness at being bested by Georg was just darling!
>>“Well James Tailor, I would best suggest locating the staff quarters; you’ll be wanting to get yourself settled.”<< ----- Hahaha! James Tailor! Poor Tom, you should've thought about it before you decided to steal Jame's identity!
I love how Tom is just getting into trouble. The way you two are portraying Tom is so refreshing and absolutely entertaining! I can totally imagine the look on his face and the tone in his voice when he says, "“Afternoon Gentlemen.... M'friad I've been sent bearing a bit 'o bad news.... You sir, what’s your name then?" XDDDD I love Tom's thoughts!
And the contrast between Tom's fun, simple life and Bill's strained life full of expectations and pretence is heartbreaking! :'(
I love how you described Belgard and Anderson and their wives and children! It brings breath to the story, making it more realistic and that much more enjoyable! I actually feel like I'm there witnessing these events. The way both of you write is absolutely enchanting!
Hahaah! And when Jorg tells Bill to take Margaret on a tour of the ship and when Bill answers! Oh that was priceless! While I was reading his answer, I'm like 'oh no Bill, that's the wrong thing to say!! XDDDD' Poor Bill had no idea.
>>Thinking about tanned skin stretched over a set of defined abs, accented by that air of masculinity, made Bill’s stomach jolt in pleasure.<< ------ Mmmm! Now that's a nice mental picture! :D I really like the way you introduced Bill's sexuality, smoothly flowing from an obsevation about Margaret.
Oh no! Poor Bill! Those are some real mean boys! D: I feel so sorry for him. I mean, he's on a luxury ship, a child of a wealthy man, and all these other boys of wealthy men supposed to be gentlemen and polite, are bullying him like they are normal kids in a playground! Poor Bill, even though he tries so hard to pretend because he has no other choice, he still gets hurt.
Hmmmm.... now, who in the world would find Bill and rescue him from the closet? :)
So, I'll get off this review box now... :D Thanks for a lovely read, and looking forward to the next one!!!
Author's Response: Estricnina: Always love your monster reviews dear, they make me smile. TWINSEX IS GOOD, YOU’RE FORGIVEN. Who needs philosophy? Psh. It’s twinslash versus… Aristotle. OR… twinslash AND Aristotle. (In the words of Rue McClanahan: Oooh, that’s kinky. XD) Oh, in a way you’ve complimented me too, so I can appreciate this review as much as HF can! ^^ Some of the excerpts you chose above are of my own words (I especially love the memory and ring ones if I do say so myself), and I’m terribly happy you found them appealing! *hearts* rnOverall though, yes, HF did a good job with rounding this chapter, didn’t she. ^^ I’m super glad you enjoyed it. I’m a bit limited here, so I can't do a monster reply to your monster review today, but I shall give you monster hugs. Xxoo HollyWoodFix: I am very happy to hear that you thought the writing styles flowed together alright, this was something I was worried about, but I find my mind a bit more at ease now XD I am flattered by your words, particularily about the characterization, and I loved hearing your thoughts on specific parts. Thank you so much for the review, it definitely made my day a little brighter <3rn
Date: 10/29/10 06:00 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
Another great chapter! I'm hoping for a good ol' rescue situation here - Tom opens the door, Bill falls right into him? And in thanks, Bill gives Tom a place to sleep for the night ;) heh.
On a more concerning note, I was very unimpressed to read the review left by a certain someone and applaud the reply that was given to it. For godsake, that kind of thing just shouldn't be left in a review. There is a contact button for those types of things. The reply was so forward and strong that I felt I'D been told off and put right and I hadn't even done anything haha. Applause.
Author's Response: Estricnina: I bow to your applause, friend. XD I’m a pretty peaceful person, but I can’t stand to keep quiet about such behaviour. Someone needs to tell them how it is, further than a ‘fuck off’, anyway. You can imagine I fare well in a good argument. XD Anyways, we appreciate your kind words, and thanks for reading mate. Cheers!rnrnHollyWoodFix: I am super happy to hear you liked the chapter! <3
Date: 10/29/10 05:37 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
oh.my.god.
i freaking LOVE this story!!!!!!! i've always wanted to read a sort of forbidden love story between Bill and Tom, and here it is!!!!!
this tory is so wonderful, don't worry about the people who don't like this story. it's beautiful in every imaginable way. keep up the great work and keep updating!!!! i can't wait to read the rest.
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix: Thank you so much!! XD I am beyond happy to hear that you like the story, and also very flattered! We hope you continue to enjoy! <3
Date: 10/29/10 01:50 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
*chants* tomi's gonna save him Tomi's gonna save him *stops*...pretty good so far. I'd like to see more!!
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix: we will have to wait and see if Tom saves him XD *grins* We are very happy to hear that you are enjoying it so far, and hope you continue to enjoy it :) Thanks for reviewing! <3
Date: 10/29/10 01:06 pm Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
So can women have a "beard" too? XD I suppose homosexuality among women wasn't much thought of back then.
I love both your styles :) And this is fabulous; I really am getting a grasp of the entire atmosphere.
Author's Response: Estricnina: Well, as far as I know it applies to either gender, believe it or not. However, one would think it applies to men more appropriately. XD Lesbianism was definitely overlooked in centuries previous (and even takes a backseat to male gay culture today), but was not unheard of and just as prominent in secret society. (Naturally, of course. It’s after all a natural thing.) Women, with their inherent ability for libido repressing and general stealth *cough* cloaked them from the general eye. (I suppose their position in society didn’t help much, either.) Anyhoo, thanks for reading, doll! Hope you enjoy what is to come. ^^ HollyWoodFix: I am happy to hear that you are liking this so far! XD Thank you so much for the review! <3
Date: 10/29/10 08:01 am Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
Oh no, poor Bill :(
But it's Tom who's going to find him in there, right? RIGHT?! *threatens* xD
Or is it too early for them to meet? Dunno...
But I guess there's no chance for those dumb-asses (sorry) to be punished, hm?
Anyways, this was another very nice chapter :)
I'm sorry for Bill having this horrible father, but I guess that's how it was at the time... At least he's already admitted to himself that he prefers men, so that would be one less obstacle ;)
For the same reason I hope he'll manage to avoid an engagement with this Margret or any other woman. It would only cause distress.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter, but please take all the time you need!
And I did notice the difference in your writing styles, but they're both equally good, I'd say^^
Author's Response: HollyWoodFix: I can't say who is going to find him *shifty eyes* we will all find out soon enough XD And as for them being punished...they are on the Titanic, lol, this is almost punishment in itself. We are so happy to hear that you liked the chapter, and are flattered that you like our writing XD Thank you so much for the review! <3
Date: 10/29/10 07:31 am Title: Chapter 1; April 10th, 1912 - Malicious Intent
I'm sooo looking forward to next chapter! :D
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing the chapter XD We are so happy to hear that you are looking forward, and promise to try and not keep you waiting too long <3
Date: 10/23/10 10:03 pm Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
I've wanted someone to write this for so long!! :O I adore you guys!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading, and we hope you enjoy what is to come. :)
Date: 10/22/10 07:17 pm Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
Oh wow. You must be so proud of yourself now :)
I must say that I of course did read the story carefully and my words are my opinion on it. And I'm reviewing the story, not you, notice that. It’s nothing personal, because I really don't know you.
I seriously don't care if you planned the story years before the other author planned hers, I still think yours are less original. And no, not compared to hers, just not original. I'm actually aware what 'original' means, thank you :)
If you can't take that someone doesn't like your story, then it's maybe not the best idea to put it out here, where people are free to say what they mean about the story (with no offending, of course).
*For your information I know exactly when the other author got her idea. Take a look at her story notes, that's where I found it. But no matter who put their story out first, I still think yours is less original.
This is not a competition on who put their story out first and who stole who's idea. For your information, accusing someone of stealing is very serious. That's one thing. But when it's not true it's downright mean. An accusation like that could have someone banned and if it's for no reason.. Well that's just respect less.
And besides that; trashing someone else's work and another author in a public place is even worse. The least you can do is make sure you're actually right before trying to ruin another author's reputation.
Thanks for calling me a fool for saying what I mean, by the way :)
Author's Response: I see now, you -are- looking for confrontation. Brilliant. I would ignore this completely and let it go because petty arguments on our story is something I'd rather not have sprawled across our reviews, but you're really a something, you know that? To fathom just how illogical you are on all of this... really gets under my skin, and I hate to admit that, but I suppose that's your goal. In addition yes, I'll always be proud of myself as a rational individual who works hard, thank you. *rolls eyes*
FIRST, you were not reviewing our story, you were telling us it cannot possibly be successful based on coming after another's work. You, with a silly delusion seem to think that is constructive criticism, but that is absolutely not. That is rude. We have no problem if you don't like it! I've stated that before! If you're going to have a negative option, you have to have some grounds for it, and time of posting is not one of them. If that's the only reason you dislike something, don't bother at all. I for one, can take criticism, I'm an advocate for free thinking and it's one of the reasons I bother posting at all. You however, seem misguided on a number of things, now I've found. If your opinion is it is unoriginal, than so be it - you've still supplied no solid reasoning, but I never denied you your right to claim it. If you say something like as you have, of course it's going to be taken offensively! Your 'review' is not aid for improvement, it is not a backed up opinion of the pros and cons of the story content itself, it is nothing but poorly disguised, simple slander based on our posting and theme, and -that- is not welcome here.
SECOND, I do believe you were the one -accusing- us! I have not, and will not -ever- accuse anyone falsely of stealing. I never used the word steal, I never implied the words steal, and I made it clear that while we weren't happy with the situation, we're both free to post our stories, as the idea was neither ours nor hers in the beginning anyway. *shakes head* By the way, 'respectless' isn't a word, and yes, while false accusations are -disrespectful-, the only finger pointing being done is by you. No one is trashing anyone's story, except you. I have stated no opinion on another's story, no words for it, and have described nothing but the situation at hand, and I'm beginning to think I'm fighting with someone likely 12 years of age, angered by something that isn't even truly any of her business. Is that what it is?
Well, I want to hear no more of this. If you have a proper opinion and advice on writing (but judging from the way you handle yourself here and now, I doubt you have anything constructive for me), than I welcome you to provide that for us. If you only want to argue over non-existent lashing under a basis that is entirely subjective and juvenile, I ask you don't respond to this further. We will continue with our story, work hard on it, and take whatever reception comes our way. Good day to you m'am, and I do mean it, even if you've wronged us so.
Date: 10/21/10 03:46 pm Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
You guys.
Let me tell you something. Yes yes, this story is written very well, but! Yes, there's a but.
I like the other Titanic fic better. You know which one I'm talking about, ja?
I mean, that's so much more original. It came out before this, so this is more like a shadow of the other one, trying to shine through the sucess of it. But it really can't x')
Anyways, credits to you for trying.
Author's Response: Estricnina: Oh, how deliciously confrontational! :D Your words are accusing, and to maybe any other disconcerting, but I see the ignorance in it.
I appreciate your opinion wholeheartedly, what little is recognisable opinion, and mildly resent what other is simply tasteless finger-pointing. It is not for us to say which you like better, and if you genuinely like the other better, more power to you! However, it seems your opinion is based on time of posting, which, in -my- humble opinion, is making use of an unfortunate bias.
I thought we'd made it as clear as crystal, several times over, that this has been in the works for months, but obviously you've seen right past it. (Perhaps you wanted to?) We were choosing to play it off, let it go that we had a few hard feelings about the recently posted other slash Titanic fic, but you've brought it to our attention again, and it only brings forth those preferred buried (albeit human) feelings; the truth of the matter is myself and my co-author were the first to claim this prompt after seeing it in the prompt section. (She before I!) I became second to respond, and polite as we both were, we discussed who should take it, neither stepping over the other as courteous authors should; in the end we chose to work together. (May I make it clear -yet again- this was a long time ago, and since the time of the prompt, we've been working back and forth to forge a plot/organise a means of writing and the like.) Someone else then took it upon herself to post her own take on the prompt, without regards to us, and while it has broken our hearts (temporarily), and while we personally feel it's rather impolite to have done that, it -is- a free world and we have no right to restrict her or her creative freedom, uncouth behaviour or not. Our stories, in the end, are and will be different, even if the inspiration is of similar source.
I'm terribly concerned for what it is you view as 'original', and should my work (and soon to be our work, as my co-author has dibs on the next chapter) is completely ripped off of someone's previous work, do let me know! My, my! I'll be shocked to find our as yet to be released ideas, once only confined in our heads, to be a word for word rip of another's work, particular the source in question (Titanic (1997)) - I didn't realise that my opening had any such relation to the blockbuster hit, but perhaps another's work was much more closely tied with that movie (not to peak down upon it, but it is an easily seen fact of neutral standing), and maybe you should re-evaluate your choice of words, friend. You must be confusing the meaning of 'original'.
It is fine if you'd like to state a negative opinion, and/or in company of constructive criticism, but this seems to be a rather personal strike against us. You sound much too affronted for someone who isn't the author of the co-existing Titanic fic... how odd. At any rate, just because ours came out later, means not that we're attempting to shine in anyone's shadow, you fool. It took us months to come forward with our work, and it will take many more to progress with this story, and we will not be rushed. our business is only of our own work, and we will continue to do our best to not see this as a competition.
I thank you for your review, though laced with poor judgement - next time, read more carefully, think more thoroughly, and leave your condescending tone and quick, unknowing conclusions to yourself. Good day! :)
Date: 10/21/10 12:00 pm Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
Oh I am loving this! When I saw the other Titanic based fic that was up some time ago, I was feeling a bit upset cus it had BotTom warning, and yeah, I'm so not a fan of that... So I've been hoping for a Titanic!fic that I could read, plus I also saw the prompt and remembered that u guys wanted to write it as well... So thank you for putting this up!
The foreshadowing parts are a bit confusing right now, but I'm sure we'll understand what's happening when the time comes. And oh! the first foreshadowy thing in this chapter made me pause for a while. It is so sweet, and suddenly it made me crave someone to love me like that and someone I could love back....I've never felt that before.... But that bit was so bittersweet and beautiful! <3
And I love how you characterize Tom! He's so young and mischevious! The whole sequence with poor James Tailor had me laughing. I loved the way you began this fic.
Bill's character doesn't seem as developed as Tom's yet, possibly because he's more complex...? I mean, Tom seems like a very simple guy, but Bill, cus he's in the upper class and not really liking it but having to pretend.... he's a bit more complex I guess....
So Tom met Bill already! Ok, so maybe not met exactly, but saw from a distance... it's getting me all excited... XD
And I love the dialogue! I love it when there are accents and language typical of the era the story is in or typical of the class of people within the story; it spices up the story I think! And I just overall love the way you write!
And ok, I haven't seen that headline of Paris Hilton topping the Billboards, but that's some scary news.... .___.
Also, Estricnina (damn, your name is hard to say), I saw you had aother chapter of 14 up.... I saw it but didn't get a chance to review yet cus my keyboard started getting retarded, but now I got it all fixed! But now I'm bogged down with other fics that I've yet to review, so it'll take me a while to get to 14! But I shall get to it eventually! :D
Ok, so coming to the end of my review... :P I'm so looking forward to the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: Estricnina: Hello again! :D Glad you're loving it mate! That's the intention, or rather, our greatest hope. *nods* I can't speak for my co-author, but I too am not all that fond of a bottoming Tom. XD I suppose I'm open to the idea under certain circumstances, but I prefer our naïve, sweet and gentle Bill to be taken care of. XD *pervert* You're very welcome, at any rate; it's simply our pleasure. ^___^
I'm sorry, for the foreshadowed bits - I hope they weren't -too- troublesome. ;___; I'm so stubborn, I was adamant about putting them in, but perhaps they hurt the prologue more than ameliorated it. D: Gee~ Someone will love you like that one day! There's someone for everyone, I sometime dream in passing. It might be a fool's dream, but one has the right to fantasise. (Not to mix fantasy with beliefs. *guilty of cynicism*
Mmhm! Tom is a much simpler character, that you are correct for. Bill will be revealed in upcoming chapters, right now he is a ghost of a boy, so to speak. Tom knows who he is and where he's going, as opposed to Bill who's just wide eyes and embodied confusion. As for language... I want to soak in all the credit, but I have a bit of an old-fashioned approach to writing as is. XD Though, I always try to keep my dialogue distinctive and in character as much as possible, especially to contrast my narrative. I'm glad you felt it appropriate! You're always too kind~ It's such a joy to hear that people enjoy my writing style, when I always fear it's over-the-top and strange. *hugs* Oh - and not to worry, you reviewed, so her single is like #876 right now. We're saved! XD
Haha! My name~ it's the Spanish word (hmm, what could my heritage be? XD) for 'strychnine', and my originally username is 'Strychnyne', so I think it'd be difficult any way spelt! XD (I've been thinking of changing it back to 'Strychnyne', what do you think? D:) No worries about '14.' - gosh, I'm so angry with that fic right now. ^^" Take your time love, seeing as it won't see an update for a little while. I hope you like the most recent chapter either way, even if I'm not content with it. x) I look forward to your thoughts on that!
Anyway, I thank you for your beastly review! :D We both look forward to updating, and we hope you like what is to come. Thanks for reviewing and reading! xxoo
Date: 10/21/10 09:40 am Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
Haha, I didn't even notice that I have the same name as the company xD
I hope it's not an omen^^
And I'm pretty sure I will stick with you and your story ;-)
Author's Response: Estricnina: It is! I had a good laugh. I too, hope it's no omen. D: Haha~ Our story will sink deeper than the Titanic. :O
We appreciate your review, thank you. I hope you will like our future chapters, as well. Cheers! :D
Date: 10/21/10 03:26 am Title: Prologue; April 10th, 1912 - Ship of Dreams
*goes to jump into the nearest lake*
Nein! Come back!
*rubs hands together* Now I'm all excited too XD And I never thought - let alone 'expected' - that it would be a remake of the movie, so no worries there. I simply love works about the Titanic, even though 80% of the time I cry :(
I have a book, that I got when I was a kid, called "Voyage on the Great Titanic: The Diary of Margaret Ann Brady" (fictional).
*actually reads chapter*
Hehe, I'm picturing the absolutely awesome Edwardian fashion.
The italicized time lapses are a little confusing and jarring :/ (trying to say that in a nice way) Though I do understand the first and second are close to the sinking, the middle has me puzzled.
Lol, room 483. I love how authors sneak that in, like a hidden Mickey.
Haha, and the cockney terms were slightly confusing, but I figured out 'loaf' by myself XD It's alright.
Author's Response: Estricnina: *Comes back covered in seaweed* Are you now? Excited that is, friend? XD Fantastisch, I should say. XDDD *heart*
~Oh~ *sighs heavily* I too, love Titanic works... they've intrigued me since I was a little girl, and I always got so worked up about them. You know, my interest was not in Jack and Rose's tragic love and his subsequent death, time and time again during the famous 1997 movie, I cried more for the Italian friend, the mother tucking her little ones in while it sank, and the old people cuddling in bed as their room flooded! The tragedy outside their love was far more successful in ripping at my heart, maybe because it was more real for me. Ah... I've never read that book, but I trust it's amazing~ XD
As always, appreciating your honestly, dear. The italicised bits were my own fault, I all but begged my coauthor to allow me to use them. I really wanted them in there, to provide some kind of layered effect, but maybe I didn't think them out well enough. (Though, they were intended to be mysterious and ambiguous from the start.) Hopefully they weren't too, too jarring! D:
Ah yeah, you know... I always avoid using '483' when I can, but I just gave in this time! Psh~ XD Anyway, I hope you're on board with us, and I appreciate your review! Hope you like what is to come~ :D