Date: 09/28/10 11:23 am Title: 1. Pancake Day
Cant wait to see how this progresses-im ready for more!
Date: 09/27/10 09:47 pm Title: 1. Pancake Day
Pancakes! ♥ Really great start! I'm usually averse to anything with religious references, but this doesn't look like it'll be all that focused on the Christian aspects, and if anything, looks light-hearted and sweet. I love all Bill's hmms and hawws about his non-existent sex life. XD Poor Andi~ I'm sure it'll be amazing to see how it all develops! (- And for sexified Tom to take the scene, ohoho.)
Just a word of caution (I'm terribly OCD and can't help myself ^^"): be aware of run-on sentences and verb tense confusion in longer ones. :D It's nothing major. ^^ Great job, keep going! (Wish my first fic was half as creative and cute. XD)
Is it just me, or do you think Bill looks like a sparkly-eyed bunny rabbit in the banner too? *flails*
Date: 09/26/10 06:51 pm Title: 1. Pancake Day
like it so far
Date: 09/26/10 06:06 pm Title: 1. Pancake Day
Haha lol
I can't wait to read more :)
Date: 09/26/10 05:57 pm Title: 1. Pancake Day
Hai :D
This was such a cute first chapter, and your writing is brilliant! :) Really, I didn't see any grammar mistakes or anything.. Plus it is written story-like. Very nice. *heart*
Bill is so sweet :p as well as Andreas. I loved the little sudden drop in Bill's joyous mood there... gave the story more emotion to dwell on. Lovely~
I like the Pankcakes. :O
Cuteness.
Can't wait to see where this will go!
:)