Date: 09/30/10 01:44 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
I kinda like the Boas. I'm really excited for this interaction. I wonder what Bill will be like for the whole thing. Hm...
Author's Response: Thank you for your vote :D I hope the interaction between Bill and Tom will be what your expecting, *Crosses fingers* And how Bill reacts, hm, well that's a different matter hehe. Thank you so much for your review :D
Date: 09/30/10 05:52 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
Whatever you choose, I'm fine with it.
OOH. Master Tom. ME LIKEY. I love when Tom's the more dominating one. LOL. XDDD
MORE MORE MORE! :))
Author's Response: I also love when Tom is the more dominating one, it's very sexy :D More will be up soon, I'm glad you seem excited hehe. Thank you so much for your review :D
Date: 09/30/10 05:31 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
Not sure how I feel about the names--just try not to pick something too cliche. I really like this story. I was worried a little in the first chapter, a few mistakes, but this chapter was edited well. Keep up the great work, this has the potential to be a really really good story.
Author's Response: I apologize for the mistakes in the first chapter, but I'm glad you thought this chapter was edited well :) I've left it up to the readers to vote for their favourite, because off all the suggestions that people offered I really couldn't choose :P I will try my absolute hardest to make this as good as possible, and you really think so? Wow. I will surely be aiming to make it a really good story now :D Thank you so much for your lovely review :D
Date: 09/30/10 01:46 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
i didnt really like the name choices but i would go with Faceless Assassions it could be used in their favor as in everything they did they got away with because there was no proof but not only with the police but also like other gangs couldnt do anything because they coukdnt prove anyting either know what i mean?
Author's Response: Yep I know exactly what you mean, and your right it does work in their favourite :) Thank you so much for your review :D
Date: 09/30/10 01:12 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
So, I LOVED the last line of this chapter.
Also, I know you mentioned in your response to my last review that you would be looking for a beta, but until then I have one little grammar comment: you seem to use "you're" a lot of times when you mean "your." Just remember that "you're" is replacing "you are," and "your" is the possessive. :)
Aside from a few things like that though, this was a good chapter. Really building up to what I assume will happen in the next few bits. I'm gonna repeat that I loooove this plot.
Voting for a gang name? Hmmmm. I'm gonna say Carpe Diem. I like The Anacondas too, but to be honest it just makes me think of penises, 'cause I'm a perv like that. :3
Author's Response: You loved the last line? :D Thank you.rnrnI have a major problem with you're and your, I always seem to forget which one fits where, so I apologize, thank you for defining them, that's a massive help :) rnrnrnI'm so happy that you thought this was a good chapter, that makes me really happy. I'm so happy that you love the plot also, and I was so excited when I was allowed to adopt it because it's so fun to work with. rnrnrnHehe, penises. I wonder where you got that from lol :D Thank you so much for your review and for your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 11:30 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
i really do feel bad for Andreas.. poor guy doesn't have a say in anything. :[ Georg...putting on a tough guy facade..At least Andreas has someone who is willing to show sympathy. :/
Now for Tom..umm...so far.. from these 2 chapters i don't like him. But maybe it is also a facade he wears~ lol.. and the his weapon of choice..a pocket knife!! i dunno why but i find that kind of funny. I am surprised Bill went to Tom like that. D: I thought there would be more of a struggle or some threats to persuade him to go? Well he did have a knife.. LOL.. well this is fiction. so it's ok. lol As for a gang name um..how about 'Ad Libitur'? (it is latin for 'As Desired') i feel like that fits Tom more.. but you are free to pick from ur list of names :] Keep up the great work~ i look forward to more~ :] Maybe Tom won't objectify Bill as much.. later on.
Author's Response: I also feel bad for Andreas, he really doesn't have a choice :( I think beneath Georg's facade he is a very nice guy, we'll just have to wait and see :D rnrnHe isn't a very likeable character, he's very vicious and mean, and hm, maybe he is hiding behind a facade. You'll more than likely not like him for another few chapters, but he does become somewhat nice soon. I was going to do more of a struggle on Bill's part, but then realized that in the next chapter it'd be too much.rnrnI love your suggestion of a gang name, I'm going to put it into the final voting. It does fit Tom alot better. I'm so happy that you think the work is great, and I'm so excited that your looking forward to more :) Thank you so much for your lovely review :D
Date: 09/29/10 11:16 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
"You gonna mess with a guy who licks the blades of his Chainsaws?"
I vote Chainsaws. Eminem has really gotten me into thinking about how cool chainsaws are, since he mentions them in a bunch of his songs. Also, it was my suggestion... so I'm sticking with it. :)
"I just got fucking chased off with a Chainsaw. Then he took the Chainssaw bit the fucking blades off."
Chainsaws
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your suggestion, I absolutely loved it. Hehe, I absolutely love Eminem and now you've got be into thinking how Chainsaws actually are. rnrnThank you so much for your review :D
Date: 09/29/10 08:52 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
I vote for Carpe Diem. It's so sophisticated sounding, almost like if it wasn't a gang name.
Author's Response: It does sound very sophisticated now that I think about it. Thank you so much for your review and your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 07:32 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
I like Faceless Assassians.
i love this story
Author's Response: You love it? Thank you so much, I never in a million years thought it'd be loved so soon :)rnrnThank you so much for your vote and your review :D
Date: 09/29/10 07:22 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
CARPE DIEM!
Author's Response: Thank you for your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 06:07 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
The Anacondas! haha, just to keep w/ the snake theme :P
Author's Response: Hehe, good suggestion. I didn't even know when I choose Andreas gang name that it was a snake time, because I'm sometimes dumb >.< I just put the words together and it formed and I liked it hehe. Thank you so much for your review and your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 04:41 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
well, obviously, I'm still loving the jets.. *innocent eyes* as well as the cookies.. -noms-
but I love this story more! I love the contrast of Diva!Bill in an old worn appartment and the scene where he and Andi are (litteraly!) ripped apart was amazing, I absolutely adore your writing style!
And honestly, I'm really hoping Andi's promise is not going to be fulfilled for a LOOOOONG time. I know, it's evil, but Bill and Tom (hot, ganleader, tough!tom. le sigh) are just yummy.
More horses next time? Can't wait to see what you make of the house!
~Dawn
Author's Response: I'm honestly still speechless that so many people are loving this story :) I was so desperate to put Diva!Bill in a scrummy apartment, because well it's quite funny really. You thought it was amazing? Wow. And you adore my writing style? *Cuddles* That's the nicest thing I have ever heard from anyone.rnrnDon't worry, Andi's promise isn't going to be furfilled for a very LONG time :D I agree that it's evil, but it is very sexy having Tom and Bill together :D And in chapter four, there will be more gambling and horses. I'm so sorry if the house isn't very descriptive, but I hope the next chapter is okay. Thank you so much for your lovely review :D
Date: 09/29/10 03:19 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
The Jets!
Thisisamazing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much :D
Date: 09/29/10 03:00 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
Hmmmm, The Anacondas or The Untouchables. Poor Bill, he's just a pawn in this whole game between gangs and I have the feeling he's right and Andi won't keep his promise and even if he does, Bill might not want to be won back then after this. This is really good, I'll be looking forward to more. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your vote :) And I agree, poor Bill. I don't want to give anything away as of yet, but your on the right track :D I can't believe you think it's really good, but I'm so happy you think so *Cuddles* Thank you so much for your lovely review :D
Date: 09/29/10 01:49 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
O wow! I was pretty much jumping in my chair when I saw that u'd updated lol. I know I was grinning like an idiot =D I love this & can hardly wait until ur next post. I suck when it comes to decision making but.....The Untouchables maybe? Ugh! I don't know! Anything u choose is fine with me =)
Author's Response: You where jumping in your chair? Wow. I never ever thought I'd recieve that kind of a response, but now you've got me grinning like an idiot :D The next post will be up very shortly, I actually can't believe you love it *Cuddles* But I'm so happy that you do.rnrnThank you so much for your lovely review and for your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 01:46 pm Title: Two: Built For Sin.
hey!
thanks for the update
awww this chapter made me so sad...when bill got taken away!
i vote...Carpe Diem...just because i like it
i honestly can't wait for more xxxx
Author's Response: It was my absolute honour to update for you lovely readers :)rnrn*Cuddles* Sorry that it made you sad.rnrnThank you for your review and for your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 11:03 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
I go for chainsaws. I think the other snake names are just a bit too... typical :p Chainsaws sound tough and cool at the same time ^^
Author's Response: Chainsaws does sound very tough and cool :D Thank you so much for your review and for your review :D
Date: 09/29/10 10:36 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
I loved this chapter ! You're really good at writing and I can't wait to read the next chapter =D
By the way, my favourite gang name is The Untouchables =)
Author's Response: Wow, you really think I'm good at writing? I never in a million years expected someone to say that *Cuddles* I'm so happy you loved this chapter. And I also love the name The Untouchables, thank you so much for your lovely review and for your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 10:11 am Title: One: Never Had A Choice.
God , I love this.
N Carpe Diem ^^
Author's Response: I'm so happy you love it :) Thank you for your review and your vote :D
Date: 09/29/10 10:07 am Title: Two: Built For Sin.
JK!!
Author's Response: Thank you for your vote :D