Date: 04/30/23 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Kiss.
I have left a review on other stories of yours, but wanted to say that I enjoyed this one too!
Date: 11/22/18 10:42 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
this was a good story!!
you should do a sequel to this!
Date: 01/23/13 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
this was a good story!
Date: 01/07/12 04:21 am Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
this was a good story!
Date: 10/17/10 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
Oh, oh, oh... hotness! I think my brain fried when twins fingered Bill together. So damn hot! I just love fingering and rimming and you offer it to me. Thank you!
By the way, the end was interestingly touching and beautiful. Something I didn't expect, but it still fitted there perfectly, gave a happy end and comforting feeling. I thank you for that as well.
Denial, surrendering, fingering, rimming and all the lust from the unconditional love. Loving it. Very nice :).
Date: 10/14/10 01:07 am Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
That was like woahh !
Date: 10/12/10 11:35 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
*fangirl down*...! Loved this from start to finish. Thank you for sharing!
Date: 10/12/10 11:26 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
Good God--- O__O hell, i'm turned on after that ^_^ How hot! No coherent thoughts left in brain...
Date: 10/12/10 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
Hi
Yep short but the intensity of it made it up for everything! And the ending, oh woman, the final part was so, so hot and full of trust and other amazing feelings.
Great great great!!! This is going to be one of my favorites!!!!
Thank you for taking the time and capitalizing your inspiration into this.
Hugs!!!
Date: 10/12/10 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
I really enjoyed this journey! Thank you for sharing! The ending was perfect and the chapter was so hot ! Really good story, can't wait to read other fics from you :D
Author's Response: yay! *flutterclaps* I'm so happy that you liked it and thought the chapter was hot and the ending was good. I promise I'll try to keep with the awesomeness for my future fics!
Date: 10/12/10 08:01 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
HOLY MOTHERFUCKER.
Breathe. Remember to breathe.
Wow, dude. I seriously did not expect this story to be so deadly intense. There's energy and passion and desperation in the way you write. Every word was a shock to the senses. Every time I thought it couldn't get better, that there could be nothing hotter and sexier than that, you out-did yourself... like, again and again and again.
Half-way through I thought that this was definitely one of the best, most sexy and erotic stories I've read on this site, and now I'm pretty sure I havn't read any fic hotter than this one.
Just, holy shit.
SO MANY #@##@#%#$^%^%%gdgfdgfh&! hot parts. The way Tom pins Bill to the wall after fighting and kisses him... the way Bill slides down his door after every time he leaves Tom... the fact that Tom was practically raping Bill WHILE TALKING ON THE PHONE W THEIR MOTHER --that was killer! Fuck!... Tom teasing Bill's nipple piercing... Tom's rich vocabulary when describing what he wants to do to Bill over the phone, holy shit!!... when he walks into Bill's room and keeps talking, he says the most amazing naughty VIVID shit EVER.... "Touch yourself." "Not like that.", I swear you were going for murder with those lines. I didnt think it could POSSIBLY get hotter, but no, you out-did yourself again when they both have their fingers inside Bill. (!!!!!!!)
I have no idea how you managed to put 99.9% of everything that is hot and sexy about twincest in one fic. This was unreal. If I was a boy, I would have jizzed in my pants.
I only have one complaint: you have a million typos. Oddly enough, I barely noticed them cuz the story was so vivid and had crazy suction-reader-inside powers, but do fix your typos. There are way too many for a fic of this caliber.
Crazy amazing. I didn't expect this. I'm totally about to read this again. XD
Author's Response: *gives you air* *shrugs* I don't know that I expected for this to be so intense either. I had initially started this story with the intent to make each chapter a oneshot that I updated one in a while (remember this story - the first chapter - was written for a coworker), but it took a life of its own, and became something that I'm immensely proud of.
The entire fic is a bit out of my comfort zone, just because I don't write sex so frequently, and I am really really happy that you think I managed to top myself with each chapter, because writing so much smut (this is a lot for me) with so much tension with my work schedule (nevermind just my life schedule) was a daunting task. Thank you for reading and reviewing this though. ^_^
And as for the mistakes, I just went through the chapters again and fixed everything that I could. The thing that sucks with my writing schedule is that most of my betas aren't online when I am, and I can't be arsed to edit my work sometimes (especially when I know I've got 15 minutes to finish a chapter and post it -- otherwise it won't be posted until my next day off that I'm not called into work or dragged out of the house and away from my laptop xD). But I do try, like today, to go back and edit chapters (or entire fics) when I can. I'm just happy that the mistakes didn't kill you off from reading it.
thanks again for reading and reviewing love. ^_^
Date: 10/12/10 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
NGH! SO Hot! Loved this chapter and the ending. :D
Author's Response: lol. I think that for all of my future smut stories, I'm just going to require 'NHG' as a response if the reader things it's sexy. xD Seeing that always makes me grin and laugh and blush. xD
anyways, I'm happy that you loved the chapter AND the ending (especially seeing as I made Rose and captainhanzy read it since I was all afraid for it xD). thanks for reading and reviewing Mel ^_^
Date: 10/12/10 06:23 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Fuck.
*fans self* That was soooo hot! Well worth the wait, most definitely. :D Loved that Bill finally gave into this, even if he's still unsure what this is. ;)
Author's Response: *plugs in minifan that I don't use anymore cause it's too cold here by the water* xD I'm glad you thought this chapter was worth the wait. ^_^ I felt SO BAD the last two days, but I was being stretched thin between work and being a bit depressed, and I couldn't do ANYTHING remotely sexy. xD but thankfully this chapter came out and you loved it. THANK YOU for reading and reviewing love ^_^
Date: 10/10/10 11:20 am Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
Gah! Damn girl, that was insanely hot!*blushes*
I'm not a big fan of phone sex, but you wrote it just right and so hot. Denial is so damn hot when it's overpowered by lust coming from some primal source. I loved it how Tom kept pushing Bill over the edge and from the very beginnig, when Tom started, I just knew that Bill couldn't stop...
And climaxing for rimming talk? vuhlbuhjvboluyhvu, seriously. Love you for that!
It was against somehow heavy with lust and reminded me of many of your other fics where the sex is lingering in the air and making it hard to breathe, waiting for everything to pillow over you uncontrollable in the end. I like it, it's extremely hot.Your way to write smut is very enjoyable.
Waiting for more, but don't exhaust yourself, okay? :)
Author's Response: lmfao. *fans you*. Good, I was aiming for insanely hot. xD
and haha, I'm not a big fan of real life phone sex, but if I was to ever have phone sex, THIS would be how. xD
and Bill's denial will NEVER stand a chance with Tom. Tom is just too much for Bill to handle. xD
And YES, climaxing from rimming talk. It had to happen. I was writing this and laughing like an insane person cause I was so excited for Bill. xD
And you know, I think that this writing style was almost accidental. I haven't been writing much lately (because of work sucking majorly), and I wrote this for another coworker of mine, and somehow their need and want for each other became this almost suffocating feeling (one that I never intended for, but am glad that it showed itself). I'm happy that you liked it though ^_^
Date: 10/05/10 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
Oh my! What a Sexy chapter you've given us!!!
I am at work and definitely I shouldn't be reading this at the office... >_< My mind goes to imagine all this twin action and renderes me useless to work afterwards.
I'm totally dying to know/read what is coming Bill's way.
Big hugs!!
Author's Response: lol. YAY FOR SEXY. xD
and naughty you! but it's okay cause one doesn't REALLY need their brain to work. LOLOL. And don't die! you need to read the rest. xD
Date: 10/03/10 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
ohhh SEXY TIME GET HIM TOMI! >.< XD
Author's Response: lolol oh trust me dear, Tom is definitely gonna get him. xD
Date: 10/03/10 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
Ooooh, you're more of a tease than Tom is! *fans self* Gah, that was so good, I could just see it happening in my head as I read, and God, Tom saying all those naughty things to Bill? *dies*
Author's Response: LOL. My roommate keeps telling me that, not surprisingly. ALSO! funny thing, a coworker of mine asked me to describe the story I was working on during one of my lunch breaks (this story being the one), but I didn't wanna tell him it was about the twins cause...he's a twin. xD but anyways, I was like....in how many words? and he said one, so I replied with: FOREPLAY. He threw a towel at me and called me a tease as well. xD But anyways, I'm SUPER happy that you loved it and found it sexy, and YES Tom is a very naughty boy. xD
Date: 10/03/10 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Taste
Wow, that was so so hot! I really like how Tom knows exactly how to bring Bill right where he wants him... You can't stop here! I wanna know what happens next... This story is really good, I adore the way you write it, the tension and the need is beautifully described. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
Author's Response: *grins uncontrollably*. I'm really glad you thought it was hot. I was worried about this chapter, cause a friend of mine and I already have a fic that specifies in phonesex, and I wanted to make this different than that, but still sexy in a way. ^_^ I'm glad that you like the writing style and the air of tension I added to it. thanks lovie ^_^
Date: 09/29/10 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 2: A Touch
That was so unfair from Tom, attacking Bill like that while he's on the phone with their mother! Bill seems to enjoy it tho... Can't wait for the next chapter :D
Author's Response: LOL. It was unfair, but totally warranted, at least that's what my inner Tom keeps telling my inner Bill. xD thanks for reading and reviewing ^_^
Date: 09/29/10 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Kiss.
This is a very interesting first chapter! The kiss was so hot, they won't be able to resit each other for too long (at least that's what I hope) :P
Author's Response: *grins* I'm glad you thought this chapter was interesting. ^_^ I loved writing it, especially their push and pull relationship. thanks for reading and reviewing! ^_^