Date: 10/27/10 11:42 pm Title: The Video Tape
oooooooh, that was so good! I was still a little sad... but.. you do realize this is screaming for a lil bit of Georg/Gustave right? *flails arms* such a good story!
Date: 09/23/10 01:09 am Title: Discovery
THIS.IS.SO.AMAZING.
*flails*
Date: 09/14/10 12:38 am Title: Discovery
Wow, that was kind of crazy! But in a hot naughty forbidden way! The tape was unexpected, but you made rape sound hot and that's quite an accomplishment. hehe.
However, I do have to say this story needs to be proof-read again. There were typos and other small mistakes, and there was quite a few of them.
Having said that, I really enjoyed reading this story. :) Once you suspend your disbelief to that mystery videotape, the rest of the story really hits on a lot of forbidden, kind of "dont go there" bits, things that make me feel dirty/guilty for liking it. lol. The fact that Bill was bleeding at the end is the best example. For some reason, that is AWESOME that you wrote that in. Love u for that. I think I've only read that one other place, but it's great. But then there's also all the parts with Bill being tied up, and Tom violating virgin!video!Bill. hehe. It was great.
Oh! And I have to say that the fight at the very beginning was awesome. I loved your characters and your descriptions of everything. :)
Yeah, this fic was good. Could use improvement, but I liked it a lot. :) Well done.
Author's Response: Yeah sorry my grammar sucks... like really bad. I never use beta readers so all mistakes are mine. I'll probably get around to fixing them later so thanks for the advice
Date: 09/12/10 03:08 pm Title: Discovery
I liked. I liked. Got confused about when Tom had watched the video but then understood when I read it again.
Georg! Sequel, please? With Gustav? Please?!?!
Author's Response: Maybe if get some time
Date: 09/12/10 07:06 am Title: Discovery
oh my. that was intense
Date: 09/11/10 11:30 pm Title: Discovery
I liked this. It was weird but really great. ending is funny haha
Date: 09/11/10 02:36 pm Title: Discovery
LOL I'd have put gustav in georg's video, that'd have been awesome
Date: 09/11/10 02:14 am Title: Discovery
Great story! I wish Bill's first time could have been nicer, but I'm sure his second time will be.
I'd love to see what was on the tape for Georg. :p
Date: 09/11/10 01:24 am Title: Discovery
I absolutely loved it!
The difference between the real and video versions of Tom and Bill became a bit awkward in this part, but I know that it's inevitable. I was having the same problem myself while writing the fic prompt.
This is full pur pure hot sex and smut. It's like, overloading and oozing of awesome and I almost can't take it anymore XD I managed through though, and I'm so HAPPY that I did! You have amazing writing skills in both normal narrative and smut-wise.
I just realized something though. They didn't have lube! O_O I saw 'blood' and was absolutely horrified at the thought XDD It's probably because EVERY single Slash sex scene out here all has lube and I'm just shocked that there's no lube here. Of course, they were forced into having sex with each other, so that's excused XD It's not necessarily a bad thing. Just very shocking LUL.
Hilarious ending. OMFG I wonder what Georg will see in that video. Imagine if he have sick fantasies about Tom? LMFAO.
Overall FABULOUS job. I couldn't have written it better myself and I'm extremely happy and honored that a great writer like you tackled my fic prompt. *tackleglomphugs*
--OWL
Author's Response: Haha lube does not exist in a lot of my fics! I'm so sick of how long it takes to prep guys, just shove it in already! lol Tom had the right idea! xD
I am so very glad that you liked it! It was so much fun to write and for a while I'd been wanting to write an adaption of some sort of anime (like Bleach. Etc) but felt no would read as there is no sex! Forbidden Desires was the perfect median! Hope you enjoyed all three of your smut scenes! Can't wait to see an update from you and Cherryrose on the veil story! *hugs*
Date: 09/11/10 12:54 am Title: The Video Tape
But that's not the point.
The point is: You have managed to capture the essence of the story in the most perfect of ways. I've only read Part 1 so far. I'm glad that you didn't use the exact same plotline Bill as a druggie artist makes me smile XD I can totally see that.
The motive and source of frustration and hate is very convincing and I feel like that is one of the most important things in a hate-relationship-ish fic.
I've also noticed that you used some of the original dialogues! I like that :)
Oh man, you can't believe how hard I was laughing when it got to the part where Bill was watching the videotape. I think that's awesome on it's part. Very well written and described and I don't know if this is because I've seen the anime, but it wasn't as confusing as I thought it would be.
I shall now read the second part! Huzzah!
--OWL
Author's Response: "Over the shoulder creepers" damn right! I hate when I'm in THF in public like checking on my phone or something and people are being nosy! Yes I thought using some of the original dialogue would be best and to change the plot since the entire time I WANTED TO STRANGLE YUKI!!! God she was so annoying!
Date: 09/10/10 05:36 pm Title: Discovery
this was kinda awkward, i found it a little hard to read between the video tape ones and the real ones
but to be honest i loved the story
Date: 09/10/10 03:48 pm Title: Discovery
Oh my god-love the idea that their true hidden feeling's manifest themselve's on tape, so unusaul~I absolutely love it. I would love to know who's in the tape when Georg watche's it-oh lord, what if its Bill, Tom or both, what a way to leave it to our imagination---LOL Thanks for the update
Date: 09/10/10 03:12 pm Title: Discovery
OMFG
It was amazing!!!!!!!!!!!
Sooo COOOOL I love it
Date: 09/10/10 03:06 pm Title: Discovery
eee! The second chapter already! ooh! a magic tape! (this reminds me of The Ring... except, thankfully no one dies in 7 days here...) Hahah! I love Tom's fantasy and his reactions to Bill after... Tom wants to tie Bill up and Bill wants to wear a dress and get sold to Tom at an auction! Oh, those kinky bois! XD oh, but the sex was painful (but still sex so I'm happy... XD) aww, underneath all that hate, they loved each other! how cuuute! ^_^ Now.... I wonder what Georg's fantasy is...? XD I'm laughing from just thinking about it for some reason... :P Nice story!
Date: 09/10/10 02:46 pm Title: Discovery
Omg, wow *_* This story was REALLY fucking awesome. WOW.
Date: 09/10/10 02:43 pm Title: Discovery
This is so mysterious and intresting I like it!
Date: 09/10/10 10:27 am Title: The Video Tape
oh wow! this was awesome. i can't wait for more :P:P
Date: 09/10/10 10:05 am Title: The Video Tape
Hahaha, God, I can't wait for morex'D
Date: 09/10/10 07:49 am Title: The Video Tape
Huh? Wow... I'm confused but very curious (I guess that's what you were going for, huh? :P) Ok, now I absolutely NEED to know what's going to happen... what the cassette was... did the cassette Tom found show the same thing as Bill's one??? Arrgh! So many questions and only you know the answers, oh almighty Author! Please give me the answers! (And I love Bill and Tom are fighting... and poor Georg... wonder what he'll think once/if he remembers he tried to make out with Bill... :P)
Date: 09/10/10 04:24 am Title: The Video Tape
I have to say that it is effin' evil to leave something like this >_> This is so intriguing I cannot handle it! :) Well done! :D I love how you write and I really hope you can give this a nice, smutty end, sooner than later :B