Date: 09/14/10 06:57 pm Title: Finale
JUSTIN BIEBER. LOL. Oh man Jared, this was awesome. :) The whole thing.
Author's Response: XD THANKS :D
Date: 09/14/10 02:02 am Title: "I am your father."
I like this much better. MUCH better!
And I see that Izzy got Raiju to make you a sexy hexy banner. It makes the story MUCH easier to see!
*waits for next chapter*
Author's Response: Why thank you :) And yeah, I like the banner too ^^
Date: 09/13/10 08:34 pm Title: "I am your father."
lol, star wars moment . . .i giggles xD
Author's Response: XD
Date: 09/13/10 08:22 pm Title: Flying V
lol, when iread flying v, i had dirty thoughts xD
lol, tom reminds me of this character i made up in middles shool, but it was called super nerd, and basically it just protected people from wedgies and stuff xD
anywhore, i cant wait to see tom in action
Date: 09/13/10 08:18 pm Title: The Fight
yay, tomi kicks ass :DDD
Date: 09/13/10 06:51 pm Title: "I am your father."
JOST JOST JOST. YES. LOL, this is so funny!! :D It really is. XD
Author's Response: NEXT CHAPTER WILL BE EVEN FUNNIER :D
Date: 09/13/10 04:24 pm Title: "I am your father."
O.o that was unexpected can't wait it's really cool :D
Date: 09/08/10 03:30 pm Title: A New Frontman/Gustav Strikes Back
WOw O.o awesome :D can't wait :D
Date: 09/08/10 03:50 am Title: Strings
Wow awesome can't wait :D it's reallt cool :)
Date: 09/08/10 01:04 am Title: Strings
Okay, I said I'd read and review, so I'm keeping my promise now.
Right. So the story idea is really, really good, it's original. HOWEVER, (this is where you start hating me) I think your style needs to be a bit more flowy, so it all comes together naturally, instead of sounding abrupt. I know it sounds like bullshit, but I think that it always helps.
Yeah, that's it ^_^ Hope to see chapter 4 up soon!
-Ice
Author's Response: I always appreciate critique ^-^ I'm new to fiction, so any advice is helpful XD Thanks!
Date: 09/07/10 09:48 am Title: Flying V
YES YES YES YES YES OH GOD JARED YOU ARE A FUCKING GENIUS.
Author's Response: AWW! THANKS IZZY :3
Date: 09/07/10 04:42 am Title: Flying V
OMG it's .... awesome :D can't wait :D
Date: 09/05/10 05:54 pm Title: The Fight
Guess who the fuck is tracking this!!! THAT'S RIGHT. ME. I love this. LOOOL
Author's Response: Lol thanks