Date: 01/16/15 06:45 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
MORE! FINISH IT!!
*coughs* Ok, I'm better now. This is a perfect story and I wish to see it finished. *Waves hand dramatically* That is all!
Date: 06/20/11 02:11 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
YOU"VE GOT TO CONTINUE! I really want to know what happens next!
Date: 06/20/11 01:32 pm Title: Death.
This is so sad! I hope Bill comes to learn to love life again.
Date: 12/13/10 01:57 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
I can help with Betaing. I've been waiting for this chapter to be updated for a while now. I am so nervous as to what is to happen. I like how you have Tom slowly fading into the picture within your banner. There is so much that could go wrong. Do you realize how much Tom differs in looks to Bill? Their bones structures are very different. Yes they are both lean and thin but Tom's upper body is wider where Bill's is not. Bill's hips are wider then Tom's. That is one of the main reasons why Bill looks so androgynous. Tom has a very square face to Bill's triangle/heart shaped face. Tom's lips are fuller then Bill's, and Tom's ears are pointer then Bill's. Don't forget that Tom seems to have two atoms apples.
Okay on another note. It creeps me out that they are saying they are going to have Tom's soul within the body. What are they doing to get that!? Some form of alchemy, dark magic. That is something that is not normally messed with. Then again Twins do have a very strong connection. Tom's soul might as well just stay around for Bill's sake. It is known to happen often. Even when a twin lose their twin at birth. Most develop schizophrenia, developing another personality. Other that have lost their twin at infancy can not be alone for long. They cling on to people. Or need to always be around other siblings or friends to fill the emptiness. Twins are a very special beings. I should know I have twin brothers. They are fraternal but they are very close. They are a true ying and yang.
I do hope to see another chapter soon. Let me know if I can help with anything. Art, banner, or betaing, or just someone to bounce ideas off of.
Author's Response:
:D this clone will be about as identical to bill as he will be to tom, as the boys were identical at birth, so this clone will be identical to how they were at birth. the biggest difference I notice with Tom and Bill is thier noses, and height, I honestly think thier bone structure is identical, you just can't tell because the different ways they dress, Tom's shoulders aren't much wider than Bill's they just seem so because he has more muscle, same with chest, legs ect.
rnI like to think identical twins, while no longer perfectly identical because of circumstantial growth (one healthier, more muscular, broken bones ect.), are for the most part identical. If you put the twins faces side by side (making the same expression) you will notice their bone structure is just about identical, apart from skin texture and things like nose and ears which grow at each person's own set pace.
rnAlso as to the soul, yes! very dangerous! but that is one of the reasons they are using twins. in this universe souls do not go on to heaven or hell, they just sleep eternally, so basically the scientists are simply waking a soul, which it then will fly to the nearest identical body, (a twin, or a clone that conveiniantly enough has no soul yet) and since a body empty of a soul is easier to 'possess' (move into) they are hoping to have tom's soul inhabit the clone's body. of course there is room for error.
rnLastly, I THINK I mentioned (i may have deleted that bit) that the clone's body will undergo plastic surgery to make it resemble Tom as much as possible.
rnThank you SO MUCH! for the wonderful review, i love it when people get enough into the story to comment on things that are confusing, or bothering them. i hope i was able to clear things up. :D
Date: 11/30/10 02:32 am Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
i love this. i really hope you continue this storyline (:
Date: 11/28/10 03:01 am Title: Death.
WHOA O.O
THIS IS AWSOME ^_^
please please update sooner this time?
I have been thinking about this fic alot, the first chapter got me hooked lol
Date: 11/27/10 07:04 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
omg this sounds amaizing! i cant wait till next ch.! :D
Author's Response:
the next chapter is slowly forming it'self, so it shouldn't be...tooo long before the next update :D thank you for the review hun!
Date: 11/25/10 09:45 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
First thought: WOW!
Second thought: I would have been willing to beta. All you had to do was zip it in an email or leave it in a window on skype, and I'd have looked it over. I did find a few things, but nothing major.
Third thought: I love the way you write. I can't remember how many times I've told you, but there's just something about your words and the way you weave them together that makes me love it.
Fourth thought: I can't really remember where I was going with this one, but I love you.
Author's Response:
1. AWWW a review from lady!!!
rn2. i will remember this and keep this precious knowledge for future reference! thank you lovie
rn3. awwwww laaadyyyyy -snuggles- and i must say the same about ur writing, it always draws me in, even if nothing is happening, just having you describe ANYTHING is worth reading.
rn4 i love you too! ich liebe dich auch, wo ai ni.... t'amore....or something like that, my French sucks more than my German
Date: 11/25/10 06:28 am Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
This is interesting. Is it that his real soul will be put into the clone? If so that's damn interesting, I'll like to read about that :)
Author's Response:
yes, Tom's actual soul will be placed in the clone, and the reason the need to have a clone, is because the soul is drawn to the body it used to inhabit,m but Tom was cremated.
Date: 11/24/10 11:16 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
This is so awesome! More! More!
Author's Response:
lol! i will write more as soon as i can :)
Date: 11/24/10 10:57 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
Yay! I really like this, and hope it gets updated sooner than last time. :P This was marvelous, even sans beta. ;) I'm very excited to see how "clone" Tom turns out. :)
Author's Response:
I have the next chapter planned and HALF written, the next chapter SHOULD cover up till Tom's awakening....but not that actual part, lol, i know too much filler, but it's Bill's journey thats important too. :D
rnthank you so much for the review :D
Date: 11/24/10 10:46 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
You still need a beta?
Author's Response:
-nervously- is it obvious? I honestly find myself skimming over things that are blatantly wrong, so I know i still need a beta, mostly for typos and content. interested?
Date: 11/24/10 10:36 pm Title: D.N.A. "Just A Little Bit Longer"
Hmmm, wierd....
I like it! Good job!
Hope to see more soon, maybe Tom really will come back...
Author's Response:
I AM planning on it... but who knows my stories tend to take a life of their own, no matter how i plan them
Date: 09/02/10 12:08 am Title: Death.
I adore this so far, honestly, and definitely tracking it
Date: 08/31/10 08:08 pm Title: Death.
How are you going to bring Tomi back? In the Summery it said that Tom was cremated, and in the story he was buried. You could get D.N.A from Bill but that would be making a clone of Bill and not Tom. I guess if you still had D.N.A of Tom somewhere then it would be possible. Here is another issue D.N.A does not hold memories. If Bill were to bring his brother back, it would no where be near the same as the Tomi that had died that night. It would be a different person in a way. A person that he never knew a stranger. Well I guess Bill is already dead in this so what does he have to lose but only to gain.
Author's Response:
I don't want to give away the whole story, but basically the company that is essentailly cloning Bill, to reproduce Tom, not only specializes in cloning but in resurecting souls. I won't explain it any further, basically it's impossible, but i'm gonna do my best to make it believable. Psycho-Kinetic and Bio-Cloning Department of Science is the name of the company
rnpsyche means literally "mind, soul, heart, or breath" and Kinetic, means movement, often dealing with things that have life. i think bio-cloning explains itself.
Date: 08/31/10 02:03 pm Title: Death.
:@
Poor Bill! All the pain he has to go through is awful :( And poor Tom too! Will we find out who killed him?
Date: 08/31/10 01:50 pm Title: Death.
Just as good as that first time you let me read it in Skype.
Date: 08/31/10 11:44 am Title: Death.
Got me crying right out the box! I need more! Update soon...
Date: 08/31/10 10:42 am Title: Death.
love this story, please keep going!!!!!
Date: 08/31/10 02:04 am Title: Death.
im speechless.
or not entirely speechless, but what im trying to say, is that this is one of the most amazing beginnings i've ever read! my skin got goosebumps all over it! please post another chapter, soon ;D
Author's Response:
WOW! thank you so much! i am slowly but surely working on the rest of this story :D