Date: 09/29/10 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 10
uuuh this is so great !!! :'D i cant wait for bill to hurt tom xD
Author's Response:
Haha thank you! Oh yeah, it's coming! Very very soon.
Date: 09/29/10 01:52 pm Title: Chapter 10
One word for Tom-KARMA! Tom really is an egotistical jerk...cant wait to see what else Bill has up his sleeve.
Author's Response:
Indeed he is. Hpefully he'll get what he deserves ;)
Date: 09/29/10 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 10
Tom needs to filter his mouth. I was wondering if we could have a few flashback of when there were together and a heartbroken Bill. I'm interested in see that. Anyways this is one of my favorite stories and I'm happy you updated!
Author's Response:
Actually that's a really good idea. The flashback about being together it won't be necessary in my opinion, since we'll get to see how nice is Tom when he likes sombebody ;) About the heartbroken Bill, I think I can make some of that, though, we'll get to see it a few chapters ahead. :D Thank you for following the story!
Date: 09/22/10 07:56 am Title: Chapter 9
:O
Go Bill!!!
:DDDD
Author's Response:
Yes Go! :DDD
Date: 09/22/10 12:43 am Title: Chapter 9
Wait, okay maybe I'm just a total blonde but is bill purposefully trying to get customers to leave their contracts? Because when you said strike one it sounded like bill had been the one to strike out by losing the contract. But at the same time he didn't seem bothered by it. Oh, and toms girlfriend being underage and him not knowing it seems pretty pathetic. So, are you gonna tell us what the pictures were about soon? Cause I'm still dying to know what they were about. Anyway amazing chapter I thought it was epic and I can't wait for more. So update asafp okay?
Author's Response:
Haha, no no, that's exactly the reaction I want to receive. The story will reveal all the doubts you have now, including the photos and everything, eventually you will know. And about the girlfriend's age, it can happen you know, it can. But at the end this is all fiction, with an air of reality ;)
Date: 09/22/10 12:25 am Title: Chapter 9
Aw, I thought Bill was timing it so Tom would come in while they were fucking.
And "I rather to fuck you." should be "I'd rather fuck you."
Author's Response:
He has better plans ;) Yeah, I guess it sounds better with would! Thank you. :)
Date: 09/22/10 12:00 am Title: Chapter 5
In the lyrics it's supposed to be "I'd've" (I would have).
"I'd of" doesn't grammatically exist.
Author's Response:
Haha, yeah, tell that to Lil' Wayne, lol, jk. I thought on changing them, because it is indeed wrong.
Date: 09/21/10 11:58 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh my fuck O.O
Kill him now!! XD
Author's Response:
Yes! :D
Date: 09/21/10 11:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Where it says "trusted" should be "thrust" (since oddly enough that's the past tense also)
A few sentences had commas where there should have been semicolons or separated into a new sentence, but it's not too bad.
Author's Response:
Oh yeah, thank you, the first chapters happen to be unbetaed, I'll check them out.
Date: 09/21/10 11:09 pm Title: Chapter 9
O-M-G, i'm in total shock by Bill's action's. My eye's were wide open during this whole chapter, i'm loving it! Revenge is sweet~
Author's Response:
Im glad you liked it! And oh yes it is. :D
Date: 09/21/10 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 9
Haha welcome love, now I'm off to beta the next one hehe I is excited x3
Author's Response:
:DD
Date: 09/21/10 10:14 pm Title: Chapter 9
Oh, God, Bill's such a bastard! XDDDD I love him! I hope he'll make Tom suffer! XD
Author's Response:
I know right! lol
Date: 09/13/10 02:57 am Title: Chapter 8
i continue to enjoy this, keep up the great work! I can't wait to learn more about the pictures...
Author's Response:
Thank you! You will!
Date: 09/12/10 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 8
The Tom in this story is really nasty to everybody, I really hope he does not get Bill at the end...Luv your story!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! :D
Date: 09/12/10 03:11 pm Title: Chapter 8
Boo x.x I read this and I get to beta the next chapter soon but I still can't help but feel uber excited DX
And welcome :DD
Author's Response:
Haha, im excited too, and I already know what will happen, lol.
Date: 09/12/10 02:55 pm Title: Chapter 8
What an egotistical asshole Tom is! Im ready to see what Bill has in his arsenal now and ready for Tom to get what's due him! Thanks for updating quickly-appreciate it
Author's Response:
Haha you'll see pretty soon.
rnAnd you're welcome!
Date: 09/12/10 01:47 pm Title: Chapter 8
OOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHHHHHH more plzzzzzzzzzz
Author's Response:
You'll have more. :D
Date: 09/12/10 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 8
Ooooo you're evil. I really wanna know what those pictures are about. Like really really really bad. I cant wait for the next chapter... so please update soon.
Author's Response:
Next chapter will be up tomorrow :D
Date: 09/07/10 06:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
I had the exact same problem when I wanted a beta a while back! Thankful I've gotten a lot better XD But um Ja :D you can send it either to my yahoo (sira_myth@yahoo.com) or you can send it to my Hotmail (sira_raine@hotmail.com)feel free so send it when ever you want to :D And more than welcome :D
Date: 09/07/10 01:10 am Title: Chapter 7
XD Yay for Georg :D But I wonder what Tom means by fixing it soon :O
By the way, not to be rude either, if you want some one to beta your chapters I'd be happy to help :D This one had a lot more typos than normal. But I can't wait to see what you have planned for next chapter ;]
Author's Response:
Oh hi! Actually, I was going to ask for a beta on the next chapter because seems Im getting worst u.u. I tried to contact one, well, actually two betas, one replied me once and never get back to me after i sent her the first chapter. I'd love if you could help me out! Seems Im blind or too tired cause Ive read this chapter, many many times now and seen nothing. When do you want me to send you the next chapter? Do I send you to your email? :D Thank you soo much!