Date: 07/25/10 10:17 pm Title: Skin and Bones
The idea is nice, but honestly, whenever Bill was talking...I was kind giggling. Using song lyrics as dialogue didn't really work, at least not with this particular song.
However, I did think the idea was nice, and that you write well. Just didn't like the lyrics as dialogue.
Author's Response: Haha well, fair enough (; Personally I think it works in some parts of the story but not as well in others.. But thanks anyway! ;D
Date: 07/25/10 11:21 am Title: Skin and Bones
Although the song is great I don't like the way you made lyrics into dialogues, mostly they seem to be a bit off. But the idea of the rest of the story is great and I liked it.
Author's Response: Hmm I see what you mean, there are a couple of places I'm not all that pleased with. But, yeah... I appreciate your opinion (; And thanks ^^
Date: 07/25/10 10:58 am Title: Skin and Bones
This is geniously made. Like the lyrics fit so well. I've been thinking of making one of these and this was really good.
I also liked it, cause it was different, almost poety (or something :D). Very nice. And the 180 of Bill's normal reactions was also good. Like most of the time he is anorectic and all that and now he was worried of his weight in different way. That was a welcome change. Toms reactions and solution are also great.
Bill and Tom are sex on legs!
Author's Response: Well yeah, when I heard the song I could only think of the twins saying the words and it's been that way ever since. The lyrics really fit them so well, I think, and I could totally see Bill worrying both that he's too thick, but also that he's too thin. Thank you so much for all the kind words (: (:rn And YES! They most certainly are! ;D
Date: 07/25/10 10:38 am Title: Skin and Bones
Oh wow, that was absolutely adorable!Beautifully written and such a delight to read :) I love their connection, it was so potent. What a lovely lovely fic. It's always nice to know Tom's there for Bill when he needs him. Take care! xxxo
Author's Response: Uhh thank you so much :D I'm glad you like my way of writing as well as the story. And yes, I'm sure Tom'll allways be there for Bill (both in the fictional world and the real (; ) and the other way 'round. You take care too! :D
Date: 07/25/10 09:32 am Title: Skin and Bones
perfect. just perfect.
Author's Response: Oh, wow. Thanks! Really. I'm not sure if I'm totally pleased with it myself so it means a lot to me (; And thanks for taking you time to review as well :D