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Reviewer: fyredancer Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/14/10 03:24 am Title: Shutout

I would feel sorry for Bill if I weren't laughing so hard.

You take the time you need! This is such a delightful story, even when Bill's getting socked in the jaw, poor boy. Um, at least she's a sound sleeper? *coff*

Reviewer: Nia Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 09:56 pm Title: Shutout

I lol'd at the end xD I would have freaked out if that had happened to me, too ^_^ And to find out she was sleepwalking? Nice...very nice ;)

Can't wait for the next one!!

Reviewer: EmilyExorsist Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 05:57 pm Title: Shutout

Haha oh my goodness xD I loved this chapter! Wonderfully excecuted! Poor Bill, kinda wish Tom was there to kiss him better xD

Reviewer: MAD Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 04:26 pm Title: Shutout

Love it! xD

Reviewer: Maria Dane-Edwards Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 01:16 pm Title: Shutout

I am so intrigued by Lucy. She's a cool character. Bill is spooked, and his encounter with his intimidating mother in law is really funny *g* A shame Bill and Tom's erotic encounter was interrupted, but I'm sure they'll have a rain check :) Love the mention of Bill's pretty man purse :D

Reviewer: frkostad Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 12:04 pm Title: Shutout

ah what an awesome chapter

Reviewer: Jejje Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 12:03 pm Title: Shutout

Aw, loved it! Poor Bill, that Lucy really scared him XD

Can't wait to read more... I'm really curious to find out what present Tom is talking about (:

Reviewer: kittyskull Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 11:53 am Title: Shutout

This is such an interesting chapter.
Bill gets punched, Tom's mother walks in on them while they're on webcam, and she's a sleepwalker.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: spilled milk Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 11:31 am Title: Shutout

LOL

Reviewer: InsertWittyNameHere Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 10:20 am Title: Shutout

... BAHAHAHAHAHHAHHAHAHHHAHAHAHAHAAA!!

Oh my god, OH MY GOD!

That would be SO embarrasing!

JEEEBUZZ THAT WAS HILARIOUS!

 

Thanks soooo much for posting!

Can't wait for another chapter!!

Please, update soon!!

Reviewer: PrivatePersonality Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 08:57 am Title: Laws of the Game

Dear Lord! I was mortified at first, then found myself laughing hysterically! Poor Bill! Poor Bill! HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA!

Reviewer: PoorMedea Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 07:59 am Title: Shutout

And thus Bill learns the importance of locking the door, LOL! Great chapter...I'm definitely looking forward to more!

Reviewer: BrokenMirror Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 07:48 am Title: Shutout

Hahaha oh Bill. He didn't want to do anything dirty, but all Tom had to do was dangle some fancy bag in his face and Bill was all his. Lmfao, lovely.

:'D

Lucy is creepy indeed. I'm half expecting her to jump Bill o.O that is not a good mental image I tell you!

Reviewer: Mechas2000 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 06:08 am Title: Shutout

ha ha that is halarious!!!

Reviewer: ohthewhorror Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 03:50 am Title: Shutout

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha. God, I hope that nevers happens to me.

Reviewer: HollyWoodFix Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 03:27 am Title: Shutout

Lol, this was great! I feel bad for Bill...I would be scared shitless of someone sleep walking, especially if they were to walk into my room (let alone walk into the room while doing naughty things on camera lol) I'm definitely looking forward to more!! :)

Reviewer: shimmery Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 01:06 am Title: Shutout

This is crazy. A sleep walking mother in law? Bill sure suffers hell.

Reviewer: viina Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 12:41 am Title: Shutout

YAY TOMI!!!!!!

Reviewer: viina Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 12:37 am Title: Obstruction

:O The mother dun dun dun....

Reviewer: viina Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 12:28 am Title: Laws of the Game

SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

IT'S A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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