Please do a sequel

HOLY SH-
BRAV FUCKIN 0!
*dies*

HOLY SHIT! 0_0

I mean I was expecting this story to go out with a bang, but I some how wasn't picturing this ending!

I had a feeling that Bushido wasn't dead, so that wasn't a surprise...but I had thought things would be different when the reunited, i don't know why. I guess this ending makes a lot of sense though. You have developed these characters so well over these 111 chapters, that I feel like I know them, and I would have expected anything else from Bushido.

The realistic part of me thinks that the story truly ends with Bushido pulling the trigger, but that would simply depress me to much, so instead I'm choosing to picture it ending in a happier way. Like Bushido putting the gun down, or settling for roughing Bill up a bit instead. And eventually some trust would build back up and they could be together. Yes, I'm cheesy and romantic like that XD

Anyway, you mentioned a sequel, I don't want to get my hopes up, but I would most definitely read that :)

This has been a great adventure and I'm glad I joined you on it. Amazing story, so well thought out and written. All hail Raiju! XD

TT3TT you madam..are an evil genius. an evil horrible malicious devil that i worship and loathe equally. you are the Bushido to my Renn,
and for that, i thank you. *sweeping bow*

Amazing chapter. Amazing story. Job well done. Although your ending frustrated the hell out of me! Did he or didn't he....argghhh!!!

I have never been so affected or awed by a story before. I started reading this when it was a mere 51 chapters long, back in November. Since then, I have always been waiting for the next chapter, on the edge of my seat waiting for whatever came next. Renn and Bushido became a part of my life, in a way, because when I was upset or just having trouble, I would read the whole thing over again. It became my reward during finals week, and it became my saving grace when I needed to get away. Thank you, so much, for an amazing piece of work, something that very few people ever accomplish. Something I personally could never manage. If I could, I would print all 111 chapters out and lock it in my memory box so I will always have it. Thank you, again, for such a thrilling tale that has made my freshman year of college much, much better. Many many kudos to you and all who helped you. It is truly amazing.

you gotta be kidding me O_o hahhahahahaha xD it's so cool xD I could kill him as well :P but in the other hand it's such a shame =( they could end up together =/ I claim that they could :P love can forgive everything =) anyway I was in love with this story and I still am I just never posted a comment =/ I don't know why =/ maybe I was always speechless after reading every single part =)

Aww noo you cant do that lol. that just mean cliffhanger lol but its kinda of sad that it ended. i remember when first came out. and i've stuck to it until now even know i never really review any of it until the end. but i am really happy their will be a Sequel or i would have cried lol but now its finish. i do want to re-read it all again. then give it overall review. soon. after my final exams. ^_^.

AND THEN THEY HAD PASSIONATE SEX AND LIVED HAPPILY EVER AFTER. ;)

I've been debating the ending, because whether or not Bushido would actually kill Bill is a tough question. Even though Bill, the one person Bushido could count on over Kay One, ultimately betrayed him, I don't think Bushido would be able to kill him. At other parts in the story when Bushido is dead set on punishing Bill (I'm thinking of when Bill returns with from disappearing over night to Gina's and when he runs away with Tom then returns), Bushido’s emotions get the better of him and he only roughs Bill up when he really wants to beat the shit out of him. Because Bushido both loves and is possessive over Bill, I think he’d always want Bill as his friend, partner in crime, lover, and arm candy. Bill’s too beautiful to see the end of a bullet. Perhaps Bushido’s seeming inability to be able to punish Bill as much as he wants will dim down the urge to kill Bill for his betrayal; perhaps Bushido will toss aside the gun and simply beat Bill until he’s been put in his place. Even in his anger and rage, I don’t think Bushido would rape Bill either because that would be too damaging to their relationship and Bushido would never be able to live with the guilt if he did that. And I think that Bushido knows he’s won and that Bill will always be his, just from the knowledge that Bill visited his grave so much, obviously unable to let the other man go; Bushido knows that he will always have Bill, in mind and heart, and so Bushido will keep him in both, not to mention get his body.

It is interesting to look at the character developments as they progressed through the story. For some reason, I find Bushido’s development even greater than Bill’s (although the narration cleverly only seems to focus on Bill so that we identify with him and support his opinions of Bushido). In the beginning, Bushido was trying to help Bill, show him how to live again. I can’t help but recall when he would simply touch Bill with a warm hand to help him learn not to flinch at human contact. That Bushido comes along way to the Bushido that will tear Bill’s clothes apart, bite him, fuck him at gunpoint, and pull his hair to bend him into a submissive stance. But, it’s still important to note how Bushido continues to retain that same care for Bill even as he hurts him, like when he beds him and cries because he was so afraid of losing Bill when he didn’t come home one night, whispers his love for Bill in a foreign tongue, and lets the boy cry his eyes out when he thinks he’s sick.

I could write a novel character analysis of Bill/Renn, but for the sake of time, I’ll spare you. The way you portrayed Bill’s mental illness was accurate, inspiring, and absolutely incredible. I could tell early on that Bill had some kind of personality disorder, because dissociative identity disorder is presumably common amongst those with eating disorders, like myself. I really like how you distinguished that Bill was both doing and not doing things because of his mental illness; Renn was doing them, Bill was watching. That’s exactly how it is. My eating disorder makes me do things that I can’t explain or reason, and it feels like I’m two people a lot of the time (I have a healthy voice (me) telling me to try and get help and my eating disorder voice (anorexia) telling me that I don’t need it and this is what I have to do so that everything will be okay), but the extent goes far beyond just that. While reading this stories I could make so many parallels between myself and Renn, and it scared me to think that I could have more than one mental illness (a personality disorder along with my eating disorder), as really understand the seeing through a fog, not remembering how you got somewhere or what you did thing, in addition to other symptoms. I was so happy when Tom assured Bill that he would get him help, because when you have a mental illness, it’s difficult to get help for yourself without the support and encouragement of others. But at the end when “All the therapy and medication in the world couldn’t save Bill from himself,” I felt a bit hopeless, because it’s a reminder that you can never fully get over a mental illness, and right now I’m relapsing really bad after having gotten to a reasonably manageable state.

On your writing style, I only have a few notes (not actual thought out notes—I don’t want to make you think I sit here summarizing your work!—just overall things I noticed). Great chunks of the story are written in flashback and they all weaved well into the storyline so that the reader would learn something pertinent to the present without it seeming off topic or too much back-story. I tended to notice that whenever you’d leave us with a big, titanic cliffhanger, the next chapter would start out with or be an entire flashback. Way to keep us hanging! That was a brilliant way to make your readers hungry for more. Whatever dialect, slang, or phrases you had the rappers (particularly Bushido) use was perfect, because with their normal accents, I’d say you’ve given the decent equivalency in English. Your scene descriptions were incredible, and I especially like the range of style between Bushido’s apartment and Gustav’s home; they demonstrate your ability to create a broad alternate universe, not just a universe of similar place settings with no depth.

I’ll have you know that this response is longer than any of the responses I have written in my English class all year long, but this story has obviously taken so much work, planning, and dedication that it deserves the best response I can give. Not to mention, it makes up for all the chapters that I was too lazy to review on earlier but will probably comment on eventually.

*Favorites*

Thank you for sharing such an amazing story with us, you’ve fully out-deserved the feature, and I can’t wait to see what you have in store for us next.

-Kris

*sneaks off to go write crazy necrophilia Scheiße* That was so heartwrenching, I could barely breathe while reading it... Even knowing what was going to happen, I'm not sure whether it made it easier or harder to handle. But, the worse part is that it's completed D: Although, the story will be taking over my brain for a LONG time to come. Can't wait for more from you, meine Liebe~