Date: 08/30/10 04:33 pm Title: ACT III - Part 4
hmmmm...very good chapter. Even as he and Anis get closer, and even as thats a good thing for Bill, I still can't help but want this to end with Bill doing better (and that can be because of Anis) and reuniting with his brother and it just being Bill and Tom again. Can't help it. I know I will follow this to the end and love it no matter what you do though.
Author's Response: They'll reunite, don't worry! But you won't see the ending coming. Not by a long shot! *evil cackle*
Date: 08/30/10 03:16 pm Title: ACT III - Part 4
To sick for giving reviews but this is good. Please give me more soon.
Date: 08/28/10 06:38 pm Title: ACT III - Part 3
Oh, how sad, even when they were together it wasn't happy and a good thing. Well, together sexually. Being together is still bet for them in every other way. Thank you so much for the update!!
Date: 08/28/10 04:11 pm Title: ACT III - Part 3
Onh.....
*heart*
Date: 08/27/10 05:49 am Title: ACT III - Part 2
another fabulous chapter. I don't think I like Bill killing people though. I don't think Tom would like it either. keep up the great work!
Date: 08/26/10 10:40 pm Title: ACT III - Part 2
I am running out of words to describe how amazing this is but I still want to review.
The description in this chapter was absolutely beautiful and I liked the way you made Bill become the predator and avenge his past self. I particularly liked the metaphor of Bill being locked away safely while Renn guarded the gate - that was perfect.
Date: 08/26/10 10:28 pm Title: ACT III - Part 2
wow!!!! q fuerte capi... pero tú sí q sabes escribir!!! =)
en espera del sgte.
Saluditos!!
Date: 08/26/10 09:48 pm Title: ACT III - Part 2
I absolutely love your story it's amazing and entrancing. Thank you
Date: 08/26/10 01:30 pm Title: ACT III - Part 2
onhhh..... *heart*
Date: 08/26/10 02:02 am Title: ACT III - Part 1
Oooo suspense!!! Kind of :) this story is pretty awesome :) I like the whole sort of drug dealer thing u got goin on here :) great Idea :D
Date: 08/25/10 12:56 pm Title: ACT III - Part 1
Damn Bill! You've got some balls!
Date: 08/25/10 04:13 am Title: ACT III - Part 1
wow. This is absolutely incredible. As usual your story is gripping with characters that are amazingly real. I think part of the reason I like this one is because despite all of the trauma, Bill is still looking for his happy ending with Tom...which I am looking for too. Keep up the great work! Thanks so much for continually blessing us with such good literature!!
Date: 08/25/10 03:33 am Title: ACT I - Part 5
wow. this is amazing. I don't know how you manage to consistently write such powerful stuff.
Date: 08/25/10 03:25 am Title: ACT I - Part 3
Good lord. It doesn't get much more desperate than that for anyone, let alone someone who fell from so high.
Date: 08/25/10 03:14 am Title: ACT I - Part 1
wow. fascinating. you have me hooked. you have to ability to make me want to read stories that normal I would have no interest in. But anything you write, i want to read. I don't know how I missed this being posted, but I plan on catching up tonight.
Date: 08/24/10 09:04 pm Title: ACT III - Part 1
Ohhh I love Renn! Bill in that frame of mind and being playful with the job is very sexy indeed :)
I also absolutely fell in love with the description in this chapter - it was like I could smell and taste that club.
Date: 08/24/10 03:33 pm Title: ACT I - Part 4
I'm going to review as I read/browse along..
This is random but every time I read over 'Saad' I cringe, it feels so strange lol. My uncle is named Saad, [yah exactly what you think.] and he's super kind and I can't picture a face.. I just keeping seeing my uncles. It's so eghh. xD Baba Saad... Eff... Daddy Saad. Is the rapper Saad a father or is this another little funny name? :p
^ enough of my rambling your story is what I'm taking up my time to review for....
So....
When Bushido wrapped his arms around Bill's neck and tried putting him put [wut... my explanations, horrible!] was very interesting but I really enjoyed it. It shows Bushido can be a generous and real man, but also being involved with.. gangs won't keep always like that. [pfft what am I saying...] Though I really did like that scene, it stood out to me.
Tom oh Tom. D: Those flashbacks are so heartbreaking.. seriously. Picturing him like that makes me DIE. So poor. :( I'd love to see it get better.. Happy endings are usually eh, but for some reason for the first time I want to see a fic end happily. xD Lol.
The end.. where Bill has inner conflicts and thinks about Tom was amazing. Really was.
such a fic and original idea.
So lovely. :)
*presses Next*
Author's Response: He's always referred to as "Saad" (by that I mean whenever Kay One, Bushido, BILD, Bravo, etc. says his name) but also goes by "Baba Saad" I think. I ONCE saw him with a baby in a REALLY TINY myspace photo on a page claiming to be his, but I couldn't tell you for sure if he's a daddy because it's the only one I've ever seen and looked like a manip. (Here, at 0:20 is Saad in all his awkwardness and being harassed by Bu and Kay: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RgO1NPBjZ7c )
Date: 08/24/10 03:22 pm Title: ACT I - Part 3
Every time Bill talks how his career is over and stuff, I die a bit. Especially when he said "this is going to be my food and money tomorrow" [something along those lines] was like oh my Lord. D:
So sweet of Bu to give him some money.. the tears of happiness from Bill once he received that was beautiful. Really. :)
Bill's home... Really made me cry I'll tell you that. :p And Bushido appears like that, wow. Poor Bill. This line "I'd rather then let someone fuck me for money" Firstly, 'than' not 'then' but that's not the point. It's that it touched me, I have no idea how. I just stopped and stared at the screen, picturing this scene.
The slang makes me die. :p But at least you can keep up with it...
This chapter was like hope. :) I loved it.
Author's Response: Hodamn really? I never caught that typo O_O *rushes to fix it*
Date: 08/24/10 03:16 pm Title: ACT I - Part 2
This chapter was wow. The killing... I loved how Bill spared the children, and the guilt after killing the mother. I think this fic is pretty in character, unlike most.
The flashback made my heart die and expression soften, it was so sad and every mention of Tom is a yes to me. :p I don't remember how far I got into this fic.. maybe to ch. 6 then stopped and just came back now...
Lovely chapter. :)
*presses Next*
Date: 08/24/10 03:11 pm Title: ACT I - Part 1
Gah, I've been lurking this story for a while and lack of my reviews makes me feel super icky. Whenever I don't review a good fic I die a little. :p And I'm now trying to catch up to where I last left off and I cannot remember b/c I never reviewed. D: Gah. So I'm going to browse/reread the chapters and leave a review for each one. :)
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So, this first chapter actually really caught my attention. I actually liked how you portrayed the characters, it was a bit a confusing first chapter, but all good. :) I love these Billshido fics, we need more Bushido love. :p
Your descriptions within your stories are amazing, I really love how you start with an adjective without a conjunction word before. .[er.. like "Brown eyes made their way to..." instead of "his brown eyes" or something. /shot
*clicks next*