Date: 07/25/10 11:41 am Title: Chapter Five
Sadness!!
Well you know, Bill, when you've hit the most miserable rock bottom, the only way left to go is up.
Author's Response: I know! Poor Bill...but at least he will have Tom to help him get up...errr I mean...ja...lol
Date: 07/25/10 11:31 am Title: Chapter Five
Ugh. This world is "Big brother", "New world order", which I'm afraid that one day really comes. It is frightening to read about it.
Bill's dad was an amazing man. I hope that Bill's parents survived in prison. Even though you invented the world is so scary, I like to read about it. J.
Author's Response: It frightens me too :-( Sadly, I think the world is already headed in that direction. Especially with recent talks of America trying to make the Amero a universal currency between America, Canada, and Mexico..and trying to erase the borders between all three. rnrnI agree, bill's dad was an amazing man. I hated to have to do that to them, but I have to have something of a plot lol. rnrnThank you so much for reading. I am sorry to say, but the world is only going to get scarier. :-(
Date: 07/24/10 02:03 pm Title: Chapter Four
whoa amazing, poor bill though for losing his father.
Author's Response: I know :-( I am getting ready to go into detail how he lost him and his mom. :-(rnI am glad you liked the chapter though :-D
Date: 07/24/10 05:37 am Title: Chapter Four
Oh, poor Bill, so young and he is alone. Where are his parents? They still living? Dystopia is a cruel place to live, although pictures of their houses look so nice.
I hope Bill will change eventually live in this harsh place, Tom will certainly help him.
Don't thank me, AilaLynn, I like writing reviews for you, and I'm glad that you understand them. Me & GT :o)
PS: My son was sleeping after a party (is 11:30 AM in CZ), he couldn't help me :-D
Author's Response: His parents were taken to prison for life. At the end of Chapter 2 I mentioned why they were taken away lol. I will be going over it a little bit more eventually. rn I love getting your reviews and you amaze me because of how much time it would take to read and review too, but you still do it. rn I had to thank you for that because that is a lot of effort that needs to be appreciated, It is not easy when the language is not your native one.
Date: 07/24/10 02:45 am Title: Chapter Four
This was a beautiful chapter. (:
This story deserves more reviews, it's amazing!
Author's Response: aw Thank you so much! I would be happy if I only got 1 or 2 reviews for each chapter. The read count is most important to me. As long as people are reading and enjoying it, that is all that matters. Thank you for reviewing though, I do appreciate it. Thank you for taking the time to read the story as well. :-D
Date: 07/23/10 09:28 pm Title: Chapter Four
Awww, I cried at the end of this chapter, poor Bill, this makes me wanna write my own idea out now, I may give it a try and see how it goes. Anyway, this story is getting really good, I love it.
Author's Response: Awww :-( Do not feel bad, I felt horrible for Bill too. I got a bit teary eyed myself :-( Good luck with your idea! Let me know when you start it so that I can read it :-D Good luck! And thank you so much for reading.
Date: 07/23/10 12:04 pm Title: Chapter One
i think that this will be an actual city in a century or two..I loved it its unusual and ''disturbing''(in a good way.)
Author's Response: That will be interesting to see a city like this one, as long as it is not run by a tyrant dictator like Ophideus lol. Too bad we will not be around to see it :-( Not unless medicine somehow keeps people living much much longer than it does now lol. Who knows though, we do live a lot longer these days than people did 100 years ago...thanks to medicine and technology. :-D
Date: 07/23/10 11:56 am Title: Chapter Three
I like it! It's really good...I had a story idea similar to this one back when I first got into Tokio Hotel, but never could figure out how to write it, but you're doing an awesome job with this story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am really happy that you are enjoying the story so far. I have always wanted to write a Dystopian story myself, thank goodness we have the twins to provide excellent inspiration to write one lol. It would be interesting to see what you come up with. Maybe in time you will be able to figure out what you want to do with it. It took me over 6 years of having a writer's block to finally start writing again, and the 4 stories I have on here are my first ones after not writing for that time. So, no matter how long it may take you to write that story you want to do, in time it will come.
Date: 07/23/10 06:23 am Title: Chapter Three
Oh, Tom and Bill met together, they even speak, it's great! I hope they enjoy the weekend together. Learning system in the Dystopia is interesting, maybe I'd like to learn English like this :-D, metallic taste I would not mind a few days. :-D Then I wouldn't need to use Google Translator and my son to help me write this review :-D
Good job, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. J. :o)
Author's Response: It sounds like an interesting process to learn, but you might not like it after you find out what they do so they can learn that way lol. Thank you for reading :-D If it were not for the one thing I would not mind it either :-D
Date: 07/22/10 11:44 pm Title: Chapter Three
Hi!
wow i have to say that i didn't expect the encounter of Bill and Tom would be like this. you totally surprised me!
I wonder who the blonde will be... Andreas? Gustav? both will be cool, actually i like this that much that anyone will be cool!
oh btw i did a little research and found that the name of the book in english is "A Brave New World" i don't know why they translate into something different in spanish... you know in this book also are "levels" for persons alpha beta gamma and they should mostly interact with their respective co-workers... also school is a little like you'd posted here but as the story is a little old they used to "brainwash" kids wiht a tantrum (Ha-ha odd i know)
you are making this soooo interesting for me... i can't wait for your next update, but i feel i have to till you're rid of your homework, on wich i wish you luck!
till nex time!
Author's Response: Hehehe Ja I figured it would be a good idea to bring someone in by now; Bill by himself all the time gets a bit boring. I cannot tell you who the blond is, but all answers in due time :-D Ohhh Thank you for telling me the English title! I heard of that book in the English title, but have never read it. I want to though, but I have to wait until I finish this story so that it does not influence my writing. That does sound odd to brainwash a kid with a tantrum lol.rnThank you so much for the good wishes, and thank you for reading.
Date: 07/22/10 09:54 pm Title: Chapter Three
holy very good totally liked it
Author's Response: Thank you so much Nicole :-D *hugs*
Date: 07/19/10 09:09 am Title: Chapter Two
"Equilibrium" was a movie that starred Christian Bale and Sean Bean. Check it out.
Author's Response: lol I thought it was a book! Thank you for informing me that it is actually a movie. :-D I will check it out. I may have to wait until Dystopia is finished though so that my writing does not get influenced by the movie.
Date: 07/16/10 04:50 pm Title: Chapter Two
Tracking. Reminds me vaguely of "Equilibrium".
Author's Response: I have never heard of that. Who writes it? Is it any good? I may need to check it out :-DrnThank you so much for reading and tracking this, I hope you will enjoy the rest of the story,and I appreciate the time you took to leave a review. :-D
Date: 07/15/10 01:01 am Title: Chapter Two
wow it's such a good reading! it remainds me of this book... "mundo feliz" i really don't know its name in english but i don't think it's "happy world" Ha-ha (sorry =P) but is by Aldous Huxley, i remember i had to read it when i was at high school... anyway... you got me stucked!
i'll be expecting your next update!!! i just love the postapocaliptic stories they are one of my favourites!
well till next see ya!
Author's Response: lol I have never heard of that book :-D and with the title I would certainly never be able to read it. lol. I am so glad you are pulled into this story. I too love to read post-apocalyptic (dystopian) stories. I have wanted to write one for a while and finally decided 'to hell with it' and quit stalling, and finally started it lol. rnI look forward to reading more opinions from you. :-D
Date: 07/14/10 04:50 pm Title: Chapter Two
Oh, damn! Dystopia is incredibly cruel society! But I think Bill is one of those who try to change it. I hope to never live to see such a future. :o) J.
Author's Response: I hope never to see such a future either :-( Yes, Dystopia is indeed a cruel place, and it gets worse.rnYes,Bill is one that wants to change it, but it would be hard to change such a powerful thing.
Date: 07/14/10 03:58 pm Title: Chapter Two
Whoa that poor guy feel bad :( good chapter though :)
Author's Response: I know :-( I felt bad for him when I wrote it like that. If you think you feel bad now, just wait until you see what the prison is like lol.
Date: 07/14/10 01:57 pm Title: Chapter Two
If this is my future,I refuse to enjoy it :P
But seriously, I like what I'm reading so far. Keep it up ^_^
Author's Response: lmfao...good point! Gott I sure hope the future turns out that way! If it does, I hope I am not around to see it lol. rnrnThank you very much for taking the time to read and review this.
Date: 07/13/10 09:10 am Title: Chapter One
I like sci-fi and your banner gave me so much that I decided to read the first chapter. And I don't regret. My imagination works, and I see Bill and his strange world in which they live, and I love that idea. Unfortunately, my English is not so good, I wrote more but I will read more and watch your amazing imagination. Thank you for writing this, I and my helper Google Translator. J.: o)
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I am very happy that you do not regret reading this. I hope the rest of the story and chapters will be satisfying for you to read also. Thank you for taking the time to write this even when you say your English is not so good. To tell you a secret, I had to use the translator to come up with the prison name. :-D Again, thank you very much!rn
Date: 07/12/10 10:07 pm Title: Chapter One
I have to start out by saying that if I were ever to write something similar to what you wrote for that first stanza {I think there were three sentences, not counting the semi-colons xD} my english teacher's jaw would have dropped :D
Right off the bat, it was like diving into words of great description.
i . l i k e . t h a t (:
& I know you said this is a work-in-progress, and you're not even sure of how things will work out, but I'm definitely looking foward to reading some more.
I have a few questions already {& I know they will be answered as the story progresses, I mean this is only the first chapter *hehe*} So I think i'll save them for now (:
& the 'single black fingerless glove'
THAT IS SO BILL. always stepping out of the ordinary ^-^
*will be keeping a lookout for updates on this*
- S a m a n t h a (:
Author's Response: aw thank you so much! :-D I hope my tendency to sometimes overly describe details will not be too much, and I hope that sometimes I will not slack off on details as I sometimes do lol. I try to maintain a medium between too much and too little, but sometimes I tend to forget and go to one extreme or the other. Despite that, we cannot become better writers unless we strive to work on weak spots, right? lolrn I will do my utmost best to provide enough details and answers in the story for some things, if there is ever anything that I forget to cover, then please feel free to ask me. :-)rnHahaha ja I HAD to put that glove in there. It is the only thing he can get away with since it is the same color of his mandatory clothing and not that much of a noticeable thing. I look forward to hearing more opinions you may have. :-D Thank you so very much for taking the time to read and review! *gives you a cupcake*
Date: 07/12/10 10:03 pm Title: Chapter One
Holy I like this :) Should be very interesting to read much later as it progress's
Author's Response: Thank you so very much! I am so glad that you faithfully follow everything I write. It means so much to me. I hope this story will be to your liking as it goes further into things. :-D *gives you cookies*