Date: 08/01/10 07:37 am Title: Chapter Eight
:-D aye, Bill's dancing! :-D I've seen it with my own eyes at a concert in Prague, and it is crazy! :-D Bill looks like a spider man, when he "dances":-D His long legs, that's the case. I had binoculars, I saw from near his sexy ass! :-D He's so funny when he dances, I must always laugh. :-D
Fortunately, I do not know which dance you think, when I read this scene, I'd probably laugh again. :-D
Bill is happy down there, I think he will return there soon. Not be easy for him to live back in sector C, where they can't dance :-D.
Where do they go? The home of Tom? Probably not, right? This will be something more special. I wonder as a monkey! :-D J. :o)
Author's Response: Lol I love the way he dances. Sometimes it makes me laugh, but he makes it look so sexy too haha! I added a link to the end notes with a picture of him dancing like in the story lol. His dancing is so hard to describe! He does look like a spider-man! I saw a picture one time of him sitting on a couch and one of his legs was up on the couch. All I could think to myself was that he looked like a spider! lol
Date: 07/29/10 03:27 pm Title: Chapter Seven
its getting interesting... but loving someone of the same gender isnt against the ''laws'' of the community?
Author's Response: lol it is in fact against the "laws" of the community - you picked up on that quick hehe - but neither boy loves one another yet :-P I will be going over some of that stuff later and details in some of the laws and how they try to discourage and punish same sex love. Despite any laws you cannot help who you fall in love with though lol.
Date: 07/29/10 12:32 am Title: Chapter Seven
I don't blame Bill for being scared. It makes the story realistic...I mean, who wouldn't be scared by those circumstances. I love that David recognizes Bill because he looks like his parents, and is going to sell him the glove. Keep up the great work, I can't wait for the rest of the market!
Author's Response: Lol I would be scared too! :-D Ja, David did recognize Bill because of his resemblance to his parents, but also because of that one special glove. :-D
Date: 07/28/10 10:06 pm Title: Chapter Seven
Wow poor Bill he should of known Tom wasnt going to hurt him
Author's Response: lol ja, he should have, but it is hard to tell with a stranger sometimes :-D Especially since some people will con you and are so charismatic that they will dupe you within seconds lol. :-prn
Date: 07/28/10 10:04 pm Title: Chapter Six
definetly liked this one :)
Author's Response: hehe thank you! I am so glad you did :-D Especially since I was not too happy with it lol.
Date: 07/28/10 09:13 pm Title: Chapter Seven
This is getting REALLY good, I don't blame Bill for being freaked out when Tom was taking him to the hidden place behind the bathroom wall..can't wait to read more of it.
Author's Response: hehe thank you! I don't blame him either! I know I certainly would be afraid if someone was saying those things to me and being very vague! Poor Tom though, innocent and honest person being accused of being a bad person lol.
Date: 07/28/10 07:36 pm Title: Chapter Seven
o my gosh!!!! you made me scream!!! lol i swear my brother is so annoyed of me right now XD
That "Please don't hurt me" I just pictured so well in my mind that i would be eternally grateful! it was such a good mental scene!
please please please don't make this fic too short! i KNOW you could add so many things (i'm sayin 'cause your "beginning of the end" statment)
I love everything 'bout this chap. the car, the store, the people in the market... the butterflies tryn' to breake free form Tom and Bill's stomachs! (i'm sure they were there lol)
oh! btw! i've never told anything 'bout the skittles, you know, here in Mexico it's difficult to find them as "skittles" (but not impossible) but instead we have something called crack-ups, that taste fairly equal. i bought like 5 bags so i think it's time for another one lol.
well gotta go and as you know wating for your lovelies updates
Author's Response: Lol I am glad I was able to make you scream.... I think? lol I did not mean to scare you! lol... That is funny it annoyed your brother lol.rnrnI love that I have been able to give you such wonderful mental scenes :-D It means that I have been able to pull you into the story enough that you can see or feel what is going on. That is what I work hard to do.rnrnI do not intend to make it short. When I said "The beginning of the end." I meant that it will be the beginning of many things that will lead to the end results. Certainly not anytime soon. I still have a lot of ideas for this story lol.rnrnOh wow! I had no idea about the 'crack-ups' I have never heard of those before, but they sound awesome! 5 bags?! wow! I would be so sick from eating that many lol. I wish I could have a bag of those here just to see what they taste like. I love trying different things from different countries. :-D
Date: 07/28/10 07:26 pm Title: Chapter Seven
I was so sorry poor Bill, when he was afraid of Tom, that hurt him. :-) He was cute, as he feared.
I really like their transport system, the monthly supply and stellar energy, you have a great imagination, Lynn. I like sci-fi stories, I write it myself, but I never did not write something like this, so technically well conceived.
Okay, so now we're on the black market, (I pity the boys, to go back upstairs :-D) that looks like a real underground :-) colored people there, talking together without difficulty, and I look forward to hear Bill something about his parents. I hope that David will be friendly to him. His voice was amazing detail, anyway. ;-D
So... Perhaps that's all you understand my thoughts, and I look forward very much to the next chapter. Bye, J. :o)
Author's Response: Yeah, poor tom , it did hurt his feelings.It is a good thing that he understands. Lol Bill is indeed cute when he is afraid. rnThank you so much! I am glad you liked my inventions for the cars and the capturing of solar/stellar energy. Actually I had ideas to invent a car like this about 5 or 6 years ago. I have been having a hard time trying to figure out how to create the car, So instead I just put it into my story lol. rn Do not worry, Bill will hear about his parents and David will be nice to him. I promise. :-D Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Date: 07/28/10 06:12 pm Title: Chapter Seven
this is a really fascinating story
I love it
Author's Response: hehe Thank you! I am glad you like it :-D
Date: 07/28/10 05:52 pm Title: Chapter Seven
(:
Author's Response: :-D I hope you enjoyed it :-D Judging by that smile, I assume you did :-P
Date: 07/28/10 01:53 pm Title: Chapter Six
ooo, I can't wait to read about the underground (:
Author's Response: hehe that will be coming up for the next two chapters..well, for what I have planned it will be lol. I am glad you are taking the time to read and review. Thank you so much. Chapter 7 will be up soon; it just needs to finish being edited, tweaked, and gone over with a fine toothed comb lol.
Date: 07/28/10 09:02 am Title: Chapter Six
i like it.. you should not feel bad about it. your writting is breathtaking
Author's Response: aw thank you so very much :-D I think sometimes it is because an artist/writer is their own worse critic. Thank you so much for the kind words, and thank you for reading. :-D
Date: 07/28/10 02:46 am Title: Chapter Six
ooh, underground black market. very very cool! I look forward to it, and the ideas that it will put in Bill's head. =)
Author's Response: hehe oh it will put several... :-D It shall be the first small step to a long journey ;-)
Date: 07/27/10 11:20 pm Title: Chapter Six
I love this story
cant wait for more
Author's Response: Aww thank you! I am so glad you are liking the story so far. I already have the next chapter finished (just got done actually). I just need to go over it, edit it more, tweak a few things, and then I will post it lol. Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Date: 07/27/10 07:46 pm Title: Chapter Six
Skittles!!! i just love them! i think i'll go and purchase some right after this XD
it was such a good chapter, you don't have to worry, and I totally agree with you, it can't be pushed... rushed... it has to be natural or other way it won't seem... you know... fluent, do i make any sense? lol
ohhhh i have so much in mind 'bout that black market it will be such a change and a very exciting thing to Bill, and I bet it would bring more of his dad to his memory... will be awesome!!!
ok. so that's all 4 now, bye!
Author's Response: Aw thank you! I feel better now about the chapter :-D Yes, you do make sense :-D I feel the same way. Hehe skittles are awesome :-D I like the sour ones they have now...ohh speaking of skittles! Have you tried skittle twizzlers? or am I remembering that wrong? Maybe it is star-burst twizzlers? anyways, I still call them skittle twizzlers lol. Lecker Lecker!rnrnlol I hope what I will write for the black market will measure up to what you have in mind :-D You are right though, it will be a change for Bill. Especially since he has never been and Gordon never told him anything about it.
Date: 07/27/10 07:02 pm Title: Chapter Six
Thank you for some Skittles, although I have no idea what they have taste :-D I recently I found something about them on Wikipedia and find that they are fruit, so I think I would have liked it :-D For me it was interesting information that they are not suitable for vegetarians, because they are made from animal products. I wonder if the twins know about it. :-D
All the time that I read about their breakfast, I like simpering ninny, that they both met again and they will even make a trip together this weekend. This is awesome, I'm happy for them both! I can not wait for the next chapter. J. :o)
PS: I regret that I can't write all what I wanted for my broken English, but you can not do anything, yet. :o)
Author's Response: LOL I am happy that you might like skittles. :-) That is okay that your English is broken. I think you are doing a beautiful job with your effort. I always look forward to reading your reviews :-D I cannot wait for them to take their trip either. A nice surprise awaits them there. I just hope Bill will learn soon that he can trust Tom, but I do understand it is hard to trust people in their world. Poor Bill.
Date: 07/25/10 04:52 pm Title: Chapter Five
This is very interesting. keep up the good work, I look forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :-D
Date: 07/25/10 01:49 pm Title: Chapter Five
oh dear god, as much as that was sad, it was good too.
Author's Response: aww thank you :-D Did you actually need that tissue after all? lol
Date: 07/25/10 01:29 pm Title: Chapter Five
OMG! it was amazing!!! the memory was just at the right time to add that special sentimental burst to the story.
and the way Bill's dad sweared in german to those guys... priceless... and the fact that Bill's first thought when he found 'bout the pregnancy was that he was going to be a big brother...? wow, that was so good for setting Bill's personality
I only have 1 complain... its too short! XD oh well guess i've to wait 'till you update. see ya
p.s. that book i've been talkin' about? there's a movie too, the end changes but well...
Author's Response: Hehe thanks! Ja, I was hoping it would be the right time to really let you see inside Bill's head for a bit. Get more of a feel of who he is..kind of makes you become more attached to him as a character, doesn't it? lol rnrnHaha ja I laughed at Gordon doing that too...kind of like having his last say hehehe..a rebel to the end :-D rnrnAwww I am sorry it was so short, but I really had to cut it off where it was...for good reason :-D Makes it more emotionally impacting..you know? Nah, I just had a feeling to cut it off where I did.rnrnOhhhh geil! I will need to read the book then watch the movie..Although, most times movies do disappoint and are not known for really sticking to the book that well. lolrnrnrnThank you for still reading this :-D
Date: 07/25/10 12:04 pm Title: Chapter Five
Oh wow, that was good, that was REAL good, with each chapter your getting me more and more hooked! Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much :-D