Okay so, as I promised a rain check, here it is. I hope you're not too uninspired by the low review number, and if you are, I know how it feels; not to worry, it doesn't mean your fic isn't good, I think it carries a lot of potential. I think most readers here are looking less for story and more for colour. ^^" Hokai, here we go~

As I'm reading, I'd like to point out, though your writing is far from terrible, you might want to look into employing a beta, or doing a more thorough proof-read. Correct grammar is the recipe for greatness, after all! =P Just remember that in a sentence where there is a comparison, use 'than' instead of 'then'. Try also not to start sentences with a conjunction if you can help it, this includes the word 'but'. Sometimes we can't help but throw 'and' or so into the front, I know I itch to do it so often too, but do try and look for alternatives first. It will give your fic that much more sparkle, I promise.

I love your similes, I really felt Tom's world when you were describing his connection with his guitar. The boys' entrance was random, I must say. o_o Though, Fletcher is cute. ^^ In fact, all the boys are rather cute so far. Ah, Bill and Tom's meeting seemed a bit rushed, but I still enjoyed it. Chemistry from the very beginning! I like how chatty and for the most part realistic the dialogue is. Well done~~~ =)

holy crap! Moulin Rouge! I love that movie...sniff...does he not have tuberculosis then?

Author's Response: No, he doesn't but my ending is really twisted so the tuberculosis didn't really fit.

I have only time to read half a chapter, so, please accept this as a rain check for the rest. T__T I loved the opening segment, it was written wonderfully, and yet painfully, of course. Gritty, cold, deep - fantastic. I actually love Moulin Rouge, and all its imagery, and if there is inspiration of that, then perhaps this will be something to look forward to. Though it's quite tragic, so, in light of that... T^T Continue to write; why there is no reviews thus far when this seems to be worth a read is beyond me really. *huffs and rolls eyes* I'll swallow my prejudgments and try not to be grossed out by any Mcfly references. (Which I'll likely sub consciously treat as OMCs anyway =D)... ah yes, well anyways, good job, and I think I'll be back~~ fufufu. Keep writing, keep smiling~~

Author's Response: AWWW thank you. I will take your rain check. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. I still have one more chapter to finish before it's done as well. The ending is up in the air at the moment. I was hoping to hear more from the readers and gauge how they were taking things. Oh McFly, they're awfully fun to play with actually.