Date: 07/02/10 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
:'(
Makes me sad for Bill. I hope Tom can help him =w=
DON'T DIE BILLA!!!!
Author's Response: aw. i'm sorry, but i really can't make any promises. ^_^
Date: 07/02/10 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
Awww poor Bill, I wanna crawl into the fic and bring him back home with me and keep him safe.
Author's Response: mm...i know..*gives Bill a hug* hopefully he'll make it, ja? *no hints*
Date: 07/02/10 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
yea
poor Bill
Cant wait for more
Date: 07/02/10 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
cute Bill!! I just wanna hug him and hold him close and and.... do stuff O_O pleasurable stuff of course XDD (perv) great chappie!
--Jilly
Author's Response: JILL YOU PERVERT. lol. that's TOMI'S job. <3
Date: 07/02/10 05:51 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
Oh dear : '( poor Bill
Date: 07/02/10 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
Aww god I don't knwo wearer to go for awsome or sad or sweet
Let's say moving
It was so .. Moving and I've only read two chappters :) can't wait for more
That is for the story
Author's Response: wow, thank you so much!
Date: 07/02/10 05:26 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
I really like Bill's character so far, and I can't wait to see what's behind his distress and suicidal behavior. I was surprised at the fast update, but then I saw your chapter note. :( I guess I'll have to wait patiently for the next one!! (But I bet I'll probably stay on edge until then...) ;D
Author's Response: i'm so happy to hear that, i worked super hard on him. aha, if my muse continues to be brilliant, and has me write a chapter a day...that'd be incredible. lol
Date: 07/02/10 04:38 pm Title: Chapter 2: “Does God make mistakes?”
I loke it, and yes poor Bill, I can't weait intil the next chapter. love :)
Date: 07/02/10 11:23 am Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
-combusts-
OH GOD I LOVE THIS
Author's Response: eep! *puts you back together* yay! <3
Date: 07/02/10 01:55 am Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
This is really interesting, I'm very curious to hear Bill's story. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: i'm glad. ^_^
Date: 07/01/10 11:43 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
wow i just wow.....i watched this episode of Law and Order Special victim unit.
and it kind of was about people who help people die. and i didn't know why u would help sumone die until i read that interview. update soon:)
Author's Response: this was an episode of SVU? ooh...i don't really follow that show..how interesting. i will, thank you!
Date: 07/01/10 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
Maksii!!! I love it! Continue this :)
Author's Response: yay Frances! thanks! <3
Date: 07/01/10 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
plz do continue :D It's a very intriguing story
Author's Response: i shall. thanks!
Date: 07/01/10 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
This story has a really interesting plot. It also seems like it will be dealing with some really serious issues, so I would suggest adding extra warnings when you post more intense chapters. Otherwise, I think this is going to be a really awesome fic and I can't wait to see what will happen!!
Author's Response: thank you. yes, some chapters may be heavier on the warnings than others. i'm so glad!
Date: 07/01/10 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
Oh wow, dude! You gotta post the next chapter soon! It's good.
Author's Response: ok! soon as i can!
Date: 07/01/10 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
You know all of us in the box will bug you forever about updating this, so you might as well plan your next update now. XD Kidding Maks, but we will bug you, I promise. :D That daughter of mine is adamant when she wants something.
This was a GREAT start! I can't wait for more. :D
Author's Response: i know you will...hehe. why i love you guys. otherwise, i'd never update! *is slacker* thaank you! <3
Date: 07/01/10 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
MAKS IMMA STAB THIS FIC WITH A SYRINGE AND INJECT PUR LOVE ON IT. XD
I really really like the plot idea! It's something that's definitely unique and would stand out from all the other fics battling for attention. You have an interesting first chapter and even though I have to suffer waiting for updates, i know it'll all be worth it. I love the fic already!! -hugs-
--Jilly
(ps, damn that's a long review by pooky O_O)
Author's Response: oh wow. o_o i hate needles...lol jk. yay! and yes...very long. lol thanx Jill! <3
Date: 07/01/10 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
this sounds like its going to be a good fic
cant wait for more
Author's Response: thanks Sie. ^_^
Date: 07/01/10 07:13 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
Alright, so straight up, I already love the concept. I love anything to do with suicide or depression or any combination of. However, I'm also a science student, so details are super important to me. This is only the first chapter, and I think you're doing great so far; the dialogue flows well with the actions, although it would be a mistake to rely soly on dialogue even though it's your strength.
Since I don't have much to constructively critique (and what there is, I can't say anything bad about), I'm going to talk perhaps about some things I hope you don't do? Because the concept is so good, I already want this story to come out as a really polished piece of work. Basically, the biggest thing - I think - is don't rush this story. I know it is so tempting, because I find that I tend to have these beautiful, moving scenes floating in my head that I put to paper right away, and it's supremely tedious to have to wait to post and update because you have to write the in-between, but the in-between is so important too; and it's the times that you have to force yourself to write that I think someone grows the most as a writer.
Whatever is pushing Bill to suicide isn't going to be something resolved in a short amount of time, or shouldn't be. I have read a LOT of the angsty stories on THF, and the big things I see are this: rushing, or "love will cure everything", or 60 000 words of the most static angst (which is fine) but then a rapid improvement in 5000 words, etc. And this is why I say details are so important to the story. The "how" and "why" is almost more important to me than -what- happens in the story. Why is Bill so messed up, how does he get better, why does he get better? Etc. I promote lots and lots of research for writing good stories.
Now, I've been a real nag with this whole review, so understand it's kind of like when a parent reminds you to clean your room and your ream is just fine. I wouldn't have written all that if I thought you were a terrible writer who would do all of that, but it's a good thing to keep in mind when writing. As of so far, I think the biggest thing to watch out for you is not getting caught up in how good your dialogue is, and tending methodically to the exposition and such.
I'm so excited I've got butterflies in my stomach. I'm loving this so far, love love love! I want to help this story along as much as possible, so if there's anything I can do (I'm really, really good with the medical aspect of things - part of my major!) please don't be afraid to ask!
Author's Response: firstly--biggest review i have ever gotten. XD and thank you for all your comments! i admit, i tend to overwork dialogue. *le sigh* i'm working on it, but... and thank you! i'm trying to work the psychology of the whole thing--i really want Bill's recovery--or not--to be as realistic as possible.
Date: 07/01/10 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 1: "I heard you can help me die..."
ooooh this is gonna be awesome i can tell :D
Author's Response: thank you!