Date: 05/18/13 12:15 pm Title: Tom is quite fond of escapism.
I still hope you will update it one day...
Date: 03/28/13 11:41 pm Title: Quite the decision.
this is a really good story!
i cant wait for the next chapter!!
Date: 10/17/12 09:10 pm Title: Quite the decision.
Still love this to bits *heart* I come back once in a while to indulge in rereading.
Date: 09/23/11 03:29 pm Title: Tom is quite fond of escapism.
This is a cute first chapter! Luckily I found it years after it was uploaded so I can read it all at once! I was drawn in by your banner actually, I don't know why but I just like it sooo much!
Author's Response: Thanks (:
Date: 03/11/11 05:46 pm Title: Tom is quite fond of escapism.
it's so lovely! are you planning to update it maybe?
Author's Response: I will, although I have no inspiration, I have half a chapter written.
Date: 11/04/10 10:39 pm Title: Quite the decision.
I really love this story. It's so sweet and simple, but in a good way. Very cute.
Author's Response: Thanks! I try. hehe.
Date: 11/01/10 12:51 am Title: Quite the decision.
Kk, crit first. (Sorry, it's a lot)
This chapter was kinda parentheses heavy. Maybe change some to having hyphens, or just their own normal sentences.
And change this one "Tomcat! , I said do you like breakfast food?" to "Tomcat! I said, 'Do you like breakfast food?'"
And for better flow, reformat "You know Bill; I planted Annabelle when I was 10 years old, because I wanted a friend." to "You know, Bill, I planted Annabelle when I was 10 years old... because I wanted a friend."
And connect when Bill's talking about his maple with when he says "Tomcat?" Because it's a literary rule to only start new paragraphs when it's a new speaker, or when a person is talking for a long time and it simply *must* be broken up.
You forgot the ending quotes for "I'd say 1909."
dont't > don't
Somewere > Somewhere
'days' , > 'days',
...was made by the outcasts... This sentence is broken into two different lines.
Oh, and layed his head on Toms' back should be 'lay' and 'Tom's'
Gah! Sorry! That was so technical. But I know that I'd wish my writing to be punctually sound.
Anyway, this was sweet :) And oh my goodness, running away time.
Author's Response: I usually don't make those mistakes. I didn't run it through word, like usual.rnrnThanks.
Date: 10/31/10 11:13 pm Title: Quite the dinner.
Lol I only just NOW noticed this, reading this chap again before the new one.
"If you don't but a cookie on Thursday, prepare to die!"
And while I'm at it, in the newest chapter, you spelled "embarassed" wrong ;)
Author's Response: wow. ok.
Author's Response: wow. ok.
Date: 10/31/10 03:25 am Title: Quite the decision.
i'm just glad to see an update. =) no criticisms.
Author's Response: :) I don't know where it's going! Thanks!
Date: 10/30/10 06:53 pm Title: Quite the decision.
I have ONE word: YES! ♥
Author's Response: b29; Thanks!
Date: 10/27/10 09:23 pm Title: Quite the dinner.
I know whatcha mean by all the confidence just blowing out of you when stuff gets deleted. That's happened to me a few times, the most recent being this super-long, amazing review that I tried leaving once. (I even had to put it in Notepad at first, cuz it was that thought-out)
And then my computer crashed before I sent it -.-
And there was no way I could recreate it so I settled for a tiny little summary.
But anyway, I'll be here when you do manage to get another chapter ;)
Author's Response: I know what you mean! I hate it when I write a beautiful summary, and I post it and I get the little captcha thing wrong, and it gets deleted! haharnrnand thanks dear, that means alot thet you'd be there (:rnI just submitted the new chapter. So yeah!rn
Date: 09/12/10 10:47 am Title: Quite the dinner.
This is so cute :3
It's very, very unique. I've never read anything like it before, but it's great and you make it work. I like where this is going.
You haven't updated in a while--I hope you can put chapter 9 up soon!
Author's Response: After chapter 9 was accidently deleted, I got un-inspired. again. So I'm trying hard to inspire myself. Maybe later this week?
Date: 08/04/10 09:12 pm Title: Quite the dinner.
(reply) Lol, she's not really a TH fan, but she knows about my twincest passion. She called the story 'crazy' but in a good way, and she was smiling XD
Oh, and I really liked Book Thief! But I'm about halfway done with History of Love, and idk, it's not clicking with me. It's confusing.
And yay! Coolie
Author's Response: New chapter tommorrow (finally)!rnrnI'm glad you did. (: and I didn't finish about the last 1/4 of Ths History of Love, I don't know either.rnrnI'm glad this story can be called crazy, in a good way !
Date: 08/01/10 11:06 pm Title: Quite the dinner.
Mwahaha. I read Book Thief, and am on page 26 of The History of Love.
*looks at you for approval* XD
Oh, and I read this entire story aloud to my sister when she was staying here.
Author's Response: Really? *nods head in approval: (:rnI hope you love them!rnrnOh, how did your sister like it? I'm blushing :/rnrnNow, you've inspired me to write a new chapter!
Date: 07/20/10 03:48 am Title: Quite the dinner.
:O OH! I don't know how I missed the fact that you updated TWICE! I'm such a terrible supporter D': *heart breaks like Bill's*
On the bright side, I got to read 2 chapters in one go and, as you already know, I loooovvedd them. I've said it before, and I'll say it again: Tom's awkward, and I love! it. :D He is soo adorablee &Bill ranting with his eyes closed :D heehee. &Tom's face gets fat when he smiless. eeeeeeee! Loveee.
Author's Response: Oh, It's okay(:rn:D I especially thought that making his face fat when he smiles would be adorable!rnrnThanks for the review (:
Date: 07/18/10 02:40 pm Title: Quite the dinner.
xD I loved it xD Tomi's adorable :D And Bill is crazy x) I hope you continue soon!!
xx Chi ^^
Author's Response: I think the roles will be switched soon, and Tom will open up more (:rnI most certainly will continue. Thanks for h
Date: 07/18/10 11:58 am Title: Quite the dinner.
Aww @ first part.
And what the heck is up with Bill's mommy? Either she doesn't want him around or she's happy he has a friend and is quick to acquiesce any time they want together.
Lol I think I knew the Charleston once... but that was when my 11th grade history class was simulating a 1920s speakeasy.
Author's Response: It's the latter and a tiny bit of the former :/rnrnahah, I tried to learn, but I couldn't )):
Date: 07/18/10 10:50 am Title: Quite the dinner.
I can't give constructive criticism on what is already perfect. ^^
Author's Response: Oh my heart xDrnrnThanks (:
Date: 07/18/10 07:23 am Title: Quite the dinner.
i'm not sure i have constructive criticism. i think i've said before that the format is weird and confusing at times, but, its also part of what gives the story its charm. =)
Author's Response: Thanks! :DrnI'm cutting back abit on the newsflashes, they're annoying me a bit too :/
Date: 07/15/10 07:56 pm Title: Quite the garden.
Awww I love it :D I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Soon :D