Date: 03/27/11 11:26 pm Title: Storm
Awh, the very idea of Bill wanting Tom to cuddle him, is so sweet. And it's always better when there's sex involved. So yeah, I might be late, but I loved it.
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“Bill, honey, we don’t need a storm to do this,” Tom said, smiling as he drifted off to sleep, cuddling his brother." Awwwwh. The perfect ending for this! *swoons*
Author's Response: You totally wrote this review on my birthday ^^ And thank you, I appreciate the review and I'm glad you loved it <3
Date: 12/03/10 06:07 pm Title: Storm
Ooh, very nice. :) I like how Tom is still Tom-like. I think that Bill accepts the fact that Tom is attracted to him very quickly, but then again I'd accept it pretty damn quickly too. ^.^ I really liked it overall though. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. It means a lot. I'm glad you liked it <3
Date: 07/09/10 12:25 am Title: Storm
smut was fun, bill was an innocent little devil
Author's Response: yes he was :) thanks for the review!
Date: 07/01/10 12:34 am Title: Storm
Sex in the storm, lol!
Author's Response: as opposed to fighting the storm? lol
Date: 07/01/10 12:33 am Title: Storm
It should storm more often so that maybe they'll do it again and again and you can write another part to this ;) I loved it!
Author's Response: lol since everyone seems to want a sequel i may have to.... :) thanks for the review evvie!
Date: 06/27/10 05:23 pm Title: Storm
OKAY I LOVE THIS LIKE STUPID AMOUNTS :D:D
ITS KIND OF CUTE AND SMUTTY AT THE SAME TIME AND DESERVES A REVIEW WRITTEN IN ALL CAPS. WRITE MOAR?? :D
Author's Response: lol lauri, i will write more since evryone is requesting it. :)
Date: 06/27/10 03:55 pm Title: Storm
I had shivers down my spine as I read every single word.
I loved it!
Author's Response: im glad you loved it! thank you!! and thank you for taking the time to review!
Date: 06/26/10 07:43 am Title: Storm
omg awesome :D
Author's Response: thanks :)
Date: 06/26/10 06:27 am Title: Storm
Omg, I'm really really sorry I'm going to say this, but for someone who can actually write decently well, which I think u can, I thought this was bad. *hides in fear*
My problem with this story is ALL the cliches!! Like, every other sentence, and the story itself, it all feels like I've read it all before. And the dialogue feels like it came from a hentai movie.
Again, I'm really sorry for this review. :(
I think the fact that Bill went for the crotch-grab so fast is unrealistic, you gotta keep in mind that they're brothers. Also, a little exploration the first time they're together seems ok, but please not: bj, rim, stretching, prostate, fuck-fest... that is waaay too scripted. The best advice I have to give is that you should always ask yourselfhow you would react if it was YOUR own brother getting arroused by you, or telling you he's into you sexually. I'm sure there would be more angst, or at least a little hesitation, right?
Ok, so you flunked on making this story realistic, and killed it with the cliches, but other than that, the writing structure and stuff seemed right. I think you have plenty of hope as a writer, don't worry, just really try and think of one cool, unusual, or unique aspect to add to a story or build your story around. Like, maybe Bill has funny pink gloves in the winter, or Tom is shy about his smelly socks, or anything, no matter how small or big that someone else hasn't done before. It'll make your story more unique and hopefully memorable. The idea is that it makes your characters more human and that brings life to a story.
Ok? Keep writing, I know it'll get better. If you need plot ideas, I'm here for u. :)
Author's Response: thank you for being honest!!! :) it means a lot!
Date: 06/25/10 10:02 pm Title: Storm
Cute!! :3 **Cinny is bad with reviews**
Author's Response: cinny is fine :)
Date: 06/25/10 01:57 pm Title: Storm
Orangina, this was sweet and hot! A very nice mix! :D Keep doing this, 'cause you can write! :D
Love,
Redninja
Author's Response: Thanks RedNinja! that means a lot coming from one of my favorite authors! Love, Orangina b29;b29;
Date: 06/25/10 07:54 am Title: Storm
it was a little ooc, but cute :)
Author's Response: sorry! thanks for the review!
Date: 06/25/10 02:08 am Title: Storm
Mh, even if it's just a one-shot seems to me kinda too rushed, it needs more details.
Author's Response: sorry, i will try to write more next time
Date: 06/25/10 01:19 am Title: Storm
Lmfao, I laughed at the last thing Tom said. XDDD
oh haha...
I loved it! :3 It was simple, sweet, and hot X3
Author's Response: i think that was my favorite line! im glad you loved it and thank you for the review!
Date: 06/25/10 12:09 am Title: Storm
Very hot and sexy! :D
Author's Response: thank you, i'm glad you enjoyed it!
Date: 06/24/10 11:46 pm Title: Storm
Wish I had a Tom or Bill to cuddle with during storm's! I'm pretty sure Bill forgot the main reason he came to Tom's room in the first place...or did he? ^_^
Author's Response: Lol, don't we all? i think maybe he did. ;) thank you for the review!
Date: 06/24/10 11:06 pm Title: Storm
This is such a great story!! I thoroughly enjoyed it! XD
Will you be writing a sequel? *nods hopefully*
Author's Response: um.....a sequel? I'll think about it ;) thank you for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Date: 06/24/10 10:54 pm Title: Storm
cute
the only thing is you say Bill to much
Author's Response: sorry :/
Date: 06/24/10 10:05 pm Title: Storm
I think I'm going to make it storm everyday in Germany...just in case. I decided to read it before bed ;p just for you
Author's Response: AWWW AYA! thank you baby! LOL good luck with that :) *loves on*