Date: 02/10/11 04:06 pm Title: Fever
I so do like it! :D
Although I know that Bill always looks pissed off when somebody is asking him about Adam Lambert I still think they would give a cute couple :)
Author's Response: They would make the best couple! And then the most beautiful babies >.>rnrnThanks! xx
Date: 09/25/10 04:22 am Title: Fever
LMAO... Adam topping?
I bet Bill does all the work always, let's get Adam a little task of his own now xD
Author's Response: LMAO That's what I thought!! Thanks for reviewing. It means a lot XD
Date: 07/04/10 09:52 am Title: Fever
Haha awsome :) I love the blambert pairing
Thanks for the story
Author's Response: Glad you liked :) No problem about the story :D
Date: 06/23/10 06:03 pm Title: Fever
Hey, very good! I really liked it - just one little thing. Right now Adam is 28 and Bill is 20, so you got the age difference messed up when you called Bill the older one. That's the only thing :)
And god, now I've got the mental image of Adam in that outfit stuck in my head...thanx!!
Author's Response: That fact has recently been brought to my attention, but I have yet to change the story. Thank you for being kind enough to tell me. As for the outfit... no problem!! XD XD
Date: 06/22/10 10:57 pm Title: Fever
WoW... This was really cute. don't you think they should add a slot for Adam Lambert like they did Justin Beiber? I think Im giong to write them and ask.
Hot Pink pants huh? Where'd you come up with that? But it would be totally awsome! Also, if Bill did come out gay and he and Adam dated, thay'd be the hottest Gay couple in my book.
Author's Response: I totally think that they should. I mean, there is so much fiction about him now. As for the hot pink pants, I have no freaking idea. It just kinda popped up in my brain. Lightbulb Moment I suppose. And I 100% agree with your statement. They WOULD be the hottest gay couple ever! XD XD
Date: 06/22/10 12:20 pm Title: Fever
Ummm … You wrote this as though Bill was older than Adam, but that's not right, Bill is 20 and Adam is 28. You have really good potential as a writer; just watch your spelling and grammar as there were some mistakes, so getting a beta would be a good idea. Try to expand a bit more, like with back-story, etc. It will make the story a lot more interesting. Also, do your research and make sure you get the facts about the people you’re writing about (here, the age of your characters), and if you’re purposely changing things around, say so before the story.
Please don’t take anything I’ve mentioned as an insult. As I said earlier, you really do have a lot of potential as a writer. There are just some things that you need do to improve. Everyone can improve though, even professional authors.
Thanks for sharing this with us,
Apsenniel
Author's Response: Jesus. I am SOOOO sorry about that. I read somewhere that he was nineteen and took it as fact. Shit, thank you for telling me and for the constructive criticism as well. XD
Date: 06/22/10 05:44 am Title: Fever
ooh I like this :D thank you for making me smile :)
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing and making ME smile!! XD XD XD XD XD