Date: 01/21/13 06:16 pm Title: Storm
YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES!!!
Date: 01/21/13 05:38 pm Title: Secrets
"“Oh God, Bill…Bill…” Tom hissed again, his eyes closing even tighter. Bill stopped breathing and backed away as fast as he could. His name… It really had been his name, falling from Tom’s lips. Oh God, the world really was spinning now." ------ OH MY GOD YES FINALLY SOMETHING IS GONNA HAPPEN, I CAN FEEL IT!!! Oh yes, I even felt turned on by reading that last part about Tom jerking off thinking about Bill... OH MY I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT *clicks on to next chapter*
Date: 01/21/13 05:12 pm Title: Look
Oooh that was such an emotional chapter for me to read... when Bill got so angry that he told Tom to get out and fuck off, I could imagine the scene unfolding in my head and I got all emotional there... And it was so awesome how Tom didn't leave Bill, he stayed with him and they made up and Tom is still worrying like hell and it's so cute.
Date: 01/21/13 04:43 pm Title: Interruptions
"“I never said anything, because I figured you had your reasons…”" Gustav is such an awesome friend too! -- Tom and Bill are really fighting now... uhhh, I hope things get better. I'm feeling sad for them now :'(
Date: 01/21/13 04:37 pm Title: Soccer
Wow, I didn't expect Tom to be this mean to Bill... I feel sorry for Bill :'( *on to next chapter!*
Date: 01/21/13 03:59 pm Title: Basketball
When Andreas asked Bill if he was dating Ace, he seemed all worried. I repeat; it's like Andreas is worried over something regarding Bill and Tom, like Andi KNOWS something... about Tom's feelings, perhaps? :P or maybe he's sensed it without Tom saying anything... sometimes a person's feelings can be obvious to anyone but themselves and the person the feelings are for.
Date: 01/21/13 03:55 pm Title: Rain
"When Tom looked at him, Bill smiled and took his other hand in his. Tom squeezed his hand and stared confused, until Bill started spinning the both of them and giggling like crazy. Tom went along, the two ignoring the weird looks they were receiving." --- THAT SERIOUSLY MADE ME SMILE SO MUCH! Are they not the most adorable couple ever!!?!! Yes they are! My heart is all warm with love for them. And when Tom said: "Anything for you, Bill... anything" I was just like; oh my god!! And Tom kissed Bill's forehead briefly, but that's not something guy friends do to each other so THERE IS SERIOUSLY SOMETHING GOING ON IN TOM'S HEAD TOO JUST LIKE IN BILL'S... I think they're both in love with one another or I might be completely wrong on this and there's a twist in the end and I'll be super shocked, but so far I really love the story and I do think they have feelings for one another - more than friendly feelings. OH AND TOM SAID HE'D RATHER DATE BILL THAN ZIZI and that Bill comes before anything else and... WOW, I'm reeling here. Oh and Tom said Bill's beautiful without makeup... I'm commenting on every little thing that I love as I read the chapter :D Can't help it.
Date: 01/21/13 03:44 pm Title: Tension
I THINK THAT TOM CREATED THE LOVE SONG ABOUT BILL... And I love the moment where Tom is staring intently into Bill's eyes and he's playing with his lip ring, holy macaroly!!! :S ah-mazing!
Date: 01/21/13 03:31 pm Title: Sleepover
"Tom never let anyone touch his hair, aside from Bill... only trusted Bill... Bill was the only one who got to hear him and only because he had been there when Tom bought his first guitar... They knew almost everything about the other" --- IT REALLY SOUNDS LIKE LOVE TO ME... Bill is probably Tom's favorite person in the whole world!!! ohh and when Tom discovered Bill's shoulder, the way it looked and Tom got all worried again - awww it's so cute... I love how Tom is so concerned about Bill and always wants to take care of him... oh God this story is just wonderful, I'm feeling all warm and fuzzy... I hope to find someone like Tom, someone who cares about me so much too! *hugs self with glee and squeals* :D
Date: 01/21/13 03:14 pm Title: Friends
"usually hanging out at Tom’s place turned into a full-on sleepover. Not that he was complaining about it" -- that sounds like so much fun!! YAY :P I'm sorry I have to quote all these funny things but seriously, I LOVE this story so far already... "Tom didn’t reply, but the sound of a towel hitting skin and a yelp were heard." --- I just think Tom is so awesome and he seems super caring like he really loves Bill... this is like reading an amazing book about two people falling in love but they don't know that they both like one another the same way... ooohhh I hope it's like that, I really hope Tom likes Bill back - anyway, I love their friendship so much. Wow, IT SOUNDS LIKE ANDI KNOWS SOMETHING... When he said: "“You know Tom really cares about you, right? “I swear, he’d probably give his arm for you, maybe even a leg." --- and then Bill says that he likes Tom too and that they're FRIENDS, Andi sighs and says nothing else... so it's like Andi KNOWS something about Tom that Bill doesn't. And then when Tom is skating and he sees Bill, his face lights up and Bill smiles at him and Tom rolls over to Bill on his skateboard... it just totally seems like love to me! OMG this is so good!!! Even if this story doesn't end the way I want, it's still managed to make me all excited like this so I like this story very much! :3
Date: 01/21/13 02:58 pm Title: High School
“Yeah,” Bill smirked. “I dreamed about your ugly face. Can you imagine the horror?” --- LOL, Bill is awesome. And I couldn't help but laugh at the "It's the Creepy Duo" comment :D I wish I had a friendship like Bill and Tom's. I love how Bill in secrecy is in love with Tom and Tom is such a good friend towards Bill, noticing when something is wrong and insists on figuring out what's going on and wanting to help Bill as much as he can... it's so adorable. Bill doesn't think that Tom likes him back in that way Bill does, but I'm hoping Tom actually does have feelings for Bill... :P Going on to next chapter!
Date: 10/10/12 09:44 pm Title: Rochester Extremes
It was good. It was compelling and a good story and had good grammar. I do have some criticisms, though (and though I might write more about those, don't think too much of it - it's only 'cause I can't wait to see you get better XD). Mostly, they have to do with the arc of the story. I know that Bill's double-life was a huge part of the story (the MAIN part of the story), but it completely overshadowed the love story aspect. Until the double life was dealt with, the love story was almost like an "Oh, it's there. It doesn't REALLY matter, but it's there." I think it could have been even more interesting if the double life and the love story were dealt with at the same time. Also, I think Ace getting injured like that was a bit much. I think Tom hitting Ace was a bit much, and Ace getting beaten up by other people after the game was a bit much. Also, I see what you did there with Lelouch XD "Little Prince" and having Lelouch be French and rich with an aura of royalty XD Was his last name Lamperouge in your head??? After all, he even had black hair, and was attractive and skinny XD Anyway, well done ^-^
Date: 08/25/12 04:06 am Title: Muddling through
Babylon..... I see what you did there...
Date: 08/25/12 03:40 am Title: Awakening
Everytime I imagine "Cain" I think WWE KANE xD
Date: 08/24/12 11:13 am Title: Interruptions
Dx!!!!!
Author's Response: xD
Date: 08/24/12 11:02 am Title: Plans
ERMAHGERD!!!!!
Author's Response: I don't always get comments, but when I do, they're memes
Date: 08/15/12 09:11 pm Title: Rochester Extremes
I don't get the ending, what kind of ending is that? But great story, though i am pretty pissed about having to wait 14 chapter before getting to the good stuff :-)