Date: 06/22/10 05:34 am Title: their game.
wow omg would sooo not have figured Tom to be the one to fess up to "having a boyfriend"
Author's Response: yeah I like to let things go the way nobody expects them to :p
Date: 06/21/10 10:14 pm Title: their game.
You have a very interesting writing style. I like it a lot. I can't really point it, but there is something nice and captivating on those little glimpses of their lives. Maybe a few lines, couple sentences. Those paint the picture and oh, how much I always love little twisted, fucked up behind the scenes twins! This could have been lighthearted fic, but you choose to write it a sick, love hunger game and I think it was the right choise. At least I enjoyed it very much. Good job!
Author's Response: waaw haha, that review made my day, thank you xD. rnit's indeed a little different and I don't even know how it came to that, I just had the idea in my head, started writing, and that's what came out..xp rnrni'm very glad that you could enjoy it! rnx
Date: 06/21/10 12:59 pm Title: their game.
LMFAO @ the last line! I loooove this story! :))
Author's Response: Thanks youu :D i'm happy you enjoyed it!
Date: 06/21/10 12:15 pm Title: their game.
woahhh!! awesome story and unbelieveable ending!!!! excellent
Author's Response: Thanks youuu haha i'm happy you like it :D
Date: 06/21/10 03:20 am Title: their game.
I like it :)
Author's Response: I'm happy ;D
Date: 06/21/10 01:45 am Title: their game.
So it was Tom that said he has a boyfriend at the end? Very cute! I'm glad they're together at the end. :) I got afraid when Tom brought that girl home. That was so mean, Tom was such a jerk. :(
I really love the idea for this story though, with the dares, it's very sexy.
I wasn't such a big fan of the fact that they got really fucked up on drugs though, it doesn't seem like them.
Also, I think it's very necessary that you read over your work again. There were lots of distracting grammar errors and typos, and other mistakes that would be simple to avoid if you use a spellchecker. Or if Engish isnt your first language, ask someone to beta read your work, it'll make a big difference. Ok? :)
The story was ok, but it has lots of potential with a little editing.
Author's Response: yes it was Tom saying that ^^ rnand yes, I know ;p I always try to correct as many mistakes as possible but English is not my first language so I don't notice anything. I'll ask someone to beta it, thanks for the tip, and i'm glad you liked it anyway ^^
Date: 06/20/10 09:24 pm Title: their game.
AMAZING!!!
I dare you to... write another great one shot.
Author's Response: I will certainly take that dare ;p
Date: 06/20/10 08:11 pm Title: their game.
I loved the ending: "I have a boyfriend." LMAO! Great one shot! You done good ;) (or in proper English I should say "You did very well", lol)
Author's Response: hehe, thanks i'm happy you like it :D rnWell I don't speak proper english also (you should see how long it takes me sometimes to get a sentence right in stories :')) so don't bother xD
Date: 06/20/10 06:37 pm Title: their game.
“I have a boyfriend." loooooooooool i almost fell on the floor laughing. i cant even imagine their faces x'D
Author's Response: hahahah i'm glad it amused you! ;p
Date: 06/20/10 06:33 pm Title: their game.
I loved this, hehe. This was very creative hehe. New look on truth or dare and I absolutly loved it. XOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXOXO
Author's Response: hehe, thank you! I'm happy you liked reading it :)rnrnxx
Date: 06/20/10 04:43 pm Title: their game.
oh my, the last part just cracked me up.. 'I have a boyfriend' -spoondrops- and then the end. I LOVE it, gawd.. I'm silently shaking with giggles here.
I really loved this story of yours, the smut was amazing as were the feelings underneath, very vividly written and certainly pleasant to read. It's like you squeezed one massive story into these 3000 words. Bill's emotions were a little hidden here and there, while clear at other parts and some things left us guessing but that only added to it.
lovely job, kudos
Author's Response: thank you so much for your review, it makes me happy haha ;D rnyes I was pretty surprised when I ended up with less than 3000 words because like you said, I felt like I had written a whole story xD with just the main happenings of course, but still. rnrnthank you again! ^^
Date: 06/20/10 04:08 pm Title: their game.
yay! I loved the end... the whole story actually XD
Author's Response: Thank you! ^-^
Date: 06/20/10 03:54 pm Title: their game.
i loved it! Tom just shocked the fuck outta everyone, good job Tomi. I love Bill in this, too...
Author's Response: haha indeed xDrnthank you for the review, i'm glad you like it!
Date: 06/20/10 03:15 pm Title: their game.
That was amusing to read xD Loved the ending.
Author's Response: Thank you! ^^
Date: 06/20/10 02:02 pm Title: their game.
Haha,I loved the ending.It was so funny as Tom actually said it as it was something perfectly normal.
Author's Response: hehe, thanks for the review i'm glad you like it ^^
Date: 06/20/10 01:47 pm Title: their game.
i loved this! so hot and erotic and loving!!
Author's Response: thank youuu i'm glad you like it ^-^