Date: 12/16/10 01:50 am Title: i'll be everything to you
I am having a love hate relationship with this chapter. I REALLY REALLY love it, but I wish that they had had more time together to get to know each other before Bill was turned. With that said, I truly loved EVERYTHING about this chapter. The way you described Bill's change and the feelings Tom had when he thought he had killed Bill accidentally were so great. The whole thing was great. I just don't have the words. Nice job.
PS
I didn't respond to your question in the response to my last chapter review because everything I had hoped to see would have already needed to happen but like I said, I really enjoyed this update.
Author's Response: Myself and my Bill and Tom muses all wish they could've had more time together, but they were racing against time. I'm glad you liked Bill's death. It was actually one of my fave parts in the chapter.
Date: 12/16/10 01:42 am Title: i'll be everything to you
GAH. *is speechless*
Author's Response: Oh boy....Is that a good speechless?
Date: 12/08/10 07:41 pm Title: take my hand
Uh. Completely disagree. I feel like this story is kind of winning it. So, keep writing, or face my wrath. ;3
Author's Response: O.O noted! *doesn't want to face your wrath* :3
Date: 12/06/10 03:37 am Title: take my hand
Personally I don't think the story is losing it. But maybe the reason you feel it is is because you're forcing yourself to write this. Maybe you should take a break for a bit to make sure you get this the way you want it to be. If you're almost done with this story you shouldn't be pushing to get this out fast just to keep our wait short. I promise you we'd much rather wait a while and read what you think is your best, than wait a little and know your capable of something better. So my advice is to take your time with this one, but let me emphasize on the part where I said that I don't think the story is actually losing it.
Date: 12/05/10 05:31 pm Title: take my hand
i still love this story :)
Date: 12/05/10 09:28 am Title: take my hand
HAHAHA it works right? Rambling is great for ideas...
Yeah my user name is freaking long but my name's Teagan if that makes it easier or I've also been called Besitzt to shorten my user name
So glad my rambling has helped!
Date: 12/05/10 02:27 am Title: i'll be everything to you
I've only read two chapters, and I would read more, except I'm tired.
BUT OKAY? ARE YOU NUTS!? IT'S MORE THAN OKAY, YOU CRAZY. ;3
I really like it. This is like, wonderful. *_* I will be reading more tomorroww.
Date: 12/05/10 12:22 am Title: take my hand
Haha your already at 20 reviews for this chapter and I'm just gonna keep adding to that train!
Well I'm quite proud that I made you shit yourself and don't be so modest your an amazing writer. But only 12 chps total? :(
Its totally your descision if you want to end this (although I disagree). I just can't understand how some people think that this lost it. Obviously I missed something, when the he'll did ghat happen? Because I've been loving every minute of this
Im going to spout random ideas now that my reviewers normally read that helps me brainstorm and make a fic better or add more to it.
Okay! *cough cough* like OMG this is like so greattt. I wonder if Bill is going to suffer extreme emotion trauama after being changed and is going to deny Tom sex as he is in self pity?...squeee! I'm so happy you updated! I hope Bill gets changed and then they have rapid Vampire sex! Wouldn't it be cute if Tom had to teach Bill all about bring a vamp? a.k.a. Cute scene of Tom teaching Bill how to feed....Oh snap! What if right when Bill has found happiness, an enemy of Tom comes and beats the shit out of Tom(okay this one is random but whatever)
Yeah I went there
Author's Response: OMG! We must be sisters. I totally had it planned to use one of the ideas you suggested lol No one knew about it though and here you are just spewing it off XD I won't specify which idea though lolrnrnDude, I need a name for you. Cos quite frankly you just get called Bill Blah Blah Blah cos I'm too lazy to remember your entire penname XD
Date: 12/04/10 08:27 pm Title: take my hand
oooh!!! More please! :D I like the idea about vampire stakes only working based on one's previous religion...hmm....
Author's Response: Some ideas I just didn't like. Garlic? Come on, who dies from garlic unless they're allergic? And silver...well I like Tom's lip ring so that had to stay lol! The religion thing came from either an Anne Rice novel (blegh) or a trashy vamp romance story you buy int he supermarket lmao! The stake thing was from that vampire show Moonlight
Date: 12/04/10 06:21 pm Title: take my hand
i dont think its losing it. thanks for the update, i look forward to more. =)
Author's Response: Aww thanks so much
Date: 12/04/10 05:20 pm Title: take my hand
disagree
Author's Response: Thank you :3
Date: 12/04/10 02:43 pm Title: take my hand
A little, in answer to your question, but the problem is the stakes have dropped, we know what's wrong w/ Bill, Tom now has him, and he's probably going to turn him. If Bill were to choose a human life and Tom only had two years to love him the tension would increase but we would all hate you ;)
You just need to find something to add to the tension, either that or rap it up.
Author's Response: It's nearing the end anyway. There's going to be like 12 chapters total give or take.
Date: 12/04/10 02:22 pm Title: take my hand
No it's not losing anything! I love it! it's amazing! I can't wait for the next update!!!!!!! :D :D :D
Author's Response: *yay hands* woot!
Date: 12/04/10 08:59 am Title: take my hand
Okay I'm not going to name names because I don't want go start a fight, but I was reading some reviews and understand why you may be doubting this story...let me tell you how it really is
I like that Bill and Tom's relationship is rushed. I like that it's not a classic romance and their situation is a little awkward. I love the way that Bill is conflicted (well up until this chapter but Vampire!Bill equals sex yes?) about becoming a vampire. And I plan on nominating this whenever the next round of Sechsling or THF Fiction Awards starts.
Im not pressuring you to write faster, take your time. But realize every update you has so much plot development and drama in it that it makes up for the timing and proves the story is great by bringing back readers
And on a side, since you know I'm wonkynlike this, SO HELP ME GOD! If you get bullied out of continuing this by reviewers I will unleash the entire Where Evil Lays group of Toms on such people. PrisonRape!Tom Psychopath!Tom Pervert!Tom Pedo!Tom Teacher!Tom you name it
Author's Response: This review had me shitting myself pretty much. Dude I love you and here you are reviewing my story like that *fangirls* XD And jaa Bill's confliction with it all sort of balances because he knows he can stop being a vampire. Yes, it involves death, but hey that what he's facing anyway. Nominating me? o.O really? *heartattack* And maybe I /should/ get bullied out of writing this....I DO very much enjoy those characters of yours..... XD
Date: 12/04/10 08:49 am Title: take my hand
YOU UPDATED!!! *squealing-tackle- hug-noogie-clap-hands-hoop-rahh* Im so happy you've continued this because it is amazing, I love it, and besides Beren's it's the only decent vampire story on this site!!
Are you blind? *squints* How can this be losing it when I viewed it as just starting to pick up?? Synnie you're insane darling you really are
Author's Response: *gapes like a feeshfeesh* Beren? I'm flattered! Personally, the only two vamp fics on here I like are For Charity and I Thought You Dead For Years. I just don't do vamp fics and writing one is so out of my comfort zone. It's just starting to pick up? Oh boy....Cos it's ending soon :S
Date: 12/04/10 06:52 am Title: take my hand
I sure do love it still though :D
Author's Response: YAY!
Date: 12/04/10 05:07 am Title: take my hand
I like it still, but... is this already almost over? Or is it just beginning?
Author's Response: It's nearing the end. I'm estimating 12 chapters in total, but the exact number isn't set in stone yet
Date: 12/04/10 03:16 am Title: take my hand
DISAGREE! It's wonderful and I love ever second of it! Of course, if you don't like the way it's going you should stop writing it but I personally love it :)
Author's Response: Aww I'm so glad to hear it
Date: 12/04/10 02:47 am Title: take my hand
OMG! Agree! Agree! The story's not losing it! I love it sooooo much! It's hard to find a really good vampire books ever since stupid Twilight came out. Bleah. I love your story! Please hurry and update! Go, go, go!!!!
Author's Response: *flails* I'm going! I've got a good chunk of the next chapter done actually. XD
Date: 12/04/10 02:42 am Title: take my hand
It depends on how you continue from here. Bill has made his choice now it has to revealed. What happens in that moment will be the tell tail if this story is "losing it" You said it woldn't be a long story and Bill doesn't have much time. It is better that you do not drag it out.
Author's Response: Oh boy.... No pressure or anything lol