Date: 06/25/10 09:39 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
Awww for some reason... I don't like Phy lol. He seems like an asshole :) But I love how the story is going to far, especially the coffins for getting intimate lol XD
Author's Response: Lol well think about it! Everyone goes on about vampire sex and this and that, but their beds are coffins, and coffins aren't that deep lol! I had to change things lol and I think it's something that'll reoccur if I ever write more vamp fics XD
Date: 06/24/10 09:12 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
This is better than ok. For your first time at this type of fic its actually pretty good! :D Haha love the whole sparkle theory Tom came up with!!! XP I want Bill and Tom to meet again!!! >.
Author's Response: I'm thrilled you like it so far!
Date: 06/24/10 07:50 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
The only thing that's bugging me is the coffen thing. I always did think it was cheesey. Other than that it's going quite well. Tom is interesting and I like that Bill is a DJ but I feel like there should be more about Bill meaning that he has to have a bit more mistery. There should be something more magical in his eyes. Hummm maybe it will come in the next chapter.
Author's Response: I was thinking of having where the older they are, they could sleep more and more outside of the coffins, but I dunno. I kinda forgot I was thinking that when I wrote this lol and what do you mean by something more magical in his eyes...Like what?
Date: 06/24/10 02:33 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
Tom 'sa gonna fucking ravish him yum!!! Screw 'Phy his name reminds me of fish 0_o
Author's Response: *Giggles* Well 'Phy is actually just part of the name. And ja... Tom ALWAYS wants to ravish him, so why not in this story too lol
Date: 06/24/10 02:16 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
Phy seems like a jerk :/ I wonder if he'll die or disappear even >.>
Bill being a DJ is differen though I like it :)
Author's Response: All I have to say is...You probably will hate 'Phy in the future....Dun dun dunnnnn lol
Date: 06/24/10 02:14 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
i really enjoyed this chapter
so this phy person is bill's boyfriend..brilliant chapter btw
this chapter was interesting and i liked the way you described everything..
"if Tom rolled a glue stick over his skin and dumped sparkles on himself, he could be shiny too"
^ i dunno why i lol'd at that..(i have a fucked up sense of humour..
take care (update soon) X
Author's Response: Lol it's ok, I giggled while writing that part, so it's all good XD
Date: 06/24/10 02:10 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
Yes, it's wonderful! I really like it so far :3
My favorite line, by far was:
And they expected sparkles. It was easy enough to come by - if Tom rolled a glue stick over his skin and dumped sparkles on himself, he could be shiny too.
I lol'd so hard xD
Author's Response: lol! I was totes inspired by Idiot!Tom from the Few Fries Short Of A Happy Meal story for that part XD
Date: 06/24/10 02:06 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
(i just found this story right now)and do you want my honest opinion? *enter ominous music*
DUDE! i love it!!
first chapter and im already hooked!your not getting rid of me now..lol
im not to keen on the whole vampire type fics..but since the brilliant synnie is writing it i thought i would check it out.. and i really did enjoy this..
*faves story* and *offers you the biggest cookie ever*
and dont worry im sure your gonna do great! and this story is gonna be incredible..(if you dont i'll come after you with garlic- bread lol =)
take care, love! X
Author's Response: XD I'm so thrilled you took the chance on reading this. You don't really read vamp fics and neither do I! Imagine my horror when I was asked to write one lol But I'm trying here and as for the garlic bread... I actually like that stuff lol!
Date: 06/24/10 02:05 pm Title: i'll be everything to you
Once again..a great chapter!!! Im excited for the next one!!:)
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: 06/24/10 01:59 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
Great chapter!!! im looking foward to reading more of this story!^^
Author's Response: *bounces* YAY
Date: 06/17/10 07:40 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
i like it please continue:)
Author's Response: Aww thank you! I think I will
Date: 06/17/10 02:49 am Title: prologue: take my hand
ur not horrible, i can tell already, youve put thought into this one hunni, its good so far i really like th edepth uv ALREADY given the other two characters, even if they aren't your originally you've portrayed them wonderfully
Author's Response: Sava and Sekh won't be around much. Pretty much mostly just mentioned. Thanks for your review hunny, it makes me feel a lil better about posting this.
Date: 06/17/10 12:53 am Title: prologue: take my hand
I LOVE IT SO FAR!!! I was reading the summary of this and I was like wait this sounds really familiar then I looked at the genre and saw Vampires, and I looked at the author and I saw your name!
Author's Response: XD I realized after I got off the net yesterday that I forget to email you saying it was up, so I was hoping you'd find it. I'm glad it's good so far.
Date: 06/16/10 11:37 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
*is mega fucking excited for this* I love the first bit where its Tom talking about his angel and that stuffs. Tis win lovely. I also love the last line Sekh says. If you need help with the vampires stuff let me know. I'll help you out!
Author's Response: XD That little bit from Tom's pov was fun. And thanks! I'll prolly totes come to you for vamp stuff
Date: 06/16/10 11:19 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
Actually...,I like it :) I think you are doing well really. Maybe wolves are your thing but keep this one going. You have made me interested and I love a good twin vampire story. Your detail is good and character development is on a good track keep it up :)
Author's Response: *Breathes a sigh of relief* Oh thank you! If I start screwing up anywhere, let me know ok ^^
Date: 06/16/10 10:29 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
awww im sure you wont be bad at this story its already intresting :)
Author's Response: Woot! Thanks so much
Date: 06/16/10 09:29 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
I'm so excited about this story! While I favor werewolves as well, a good vampire story (which is what this is shaping out to be) is always welcomed! I can really see myself getting into this story, and I'm excited for the next chapter!
Author's Response: *Wiggles* YAY! Another werewolfy person lol. Usually, I avoid writing vampires, but well, there's a first time for everything.
Date: 06/16/10 05:05 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
Ohh this sounds good.
:D update soon
xoxo
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to get another chapter up soon!
Date: 06/16/10 03:32 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
I like it so far ^^ *tracking*
Author's Response: Aw thank you so much!
Date: 06/16/10 03:31 pm Title: prologue: take my hand
Looking forward to reading more :) I think you'll do fine with the writing, it's good so far.
Author's Response: *sighs with relief* oh thank god! :D