Date: 05/28/10 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 14
oh and again thanks for the beautiful chapter honeyyyy:D
Author's Response: no prob. anything for my readers. :d
Date: 05/28/10 02:34 pm Title: Chapter 13
LOVED IT!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! you really think it was that great?
again thank you
Date: 05/28/10 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 13
*shivers* wonderful!!!
Author's Response: Haha, thank you so much. :D glad you enjoyed it. :D
Date: 05/28/10 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 13
:| WOW.
That was your best chapter yet, I have to say.
Youve stepped your game up in the chapter and the whole thing flowed beautifully and the magic of the scene was shown amazingly well :) Well Done :)
Author's Response: You really htink so? Thank you so much, I am so happy that you guys like it. :D
Date: 05/28/10 11:45 am Title: Chapter 13
wait wait it was bill or i got everything wrong?it's bill?and she knows?hell i think i am a lil confused..hmmmmmm..
Date: 05/28/10 11:32 am Title: Chapter 13
oh and thanks for the story again.could you maybe give as some fancy dialogue between emily and bill?like show his powerful side a lil more?i am just asking you do what you want(don't mind me:P)i will like whatever you write anyway.i'm sure.really you're VERY talented.you coulde seel this as a sequel to the person that made the original movie.oh the twins wouls participate.i would whatc this everyday.:p.thnx again sweety.can't wait for mooooreee!!(aw and you've just let the looove grow she realised the beauty of bill she admitted it to herself aww)oh another thing?why did her apearence change?
Author's Response:
It was her dream, and bill dream combined, so in her dream she is this queen with flowing black hair, since she is seen as such a sweety in real life she kind've wanted that bad girl, mysterious look, while bill dressed he rin all white because he thinks of her as the angel from the above ground, and she is pure, and young. Hope ie help. xD
Oh thank you so much, itd be lovely if they would make a sequel. I could help pay bills. xD
Date: 05/28/10 11:27 am Title: Chapter 13
awww.this is what i was waiting for!!wwo.it was sooo good..but i like seeing bill meanie too.come on there's not a girl that can resist the mean a lil pchyco bill(even if i am a TOMgirl lol)but this romantic side is wonderful too.u mae bill so graceful elegant but a little rough and mean too sometimes.even me that my crash is tom i find hi attractive in this fic.sooo attractive.and i love emily's caracter.but sometimes i think she is a lil stupid *no offense*.how did this thing work anyway?i didn't understand how she got there.it was kind of magical right?
Author's Response:
The smoke around her began transforming everything behind her closed eyes, but she could feel things change around her, its like the smoke were ghost taking her into their place i guess if you could say, but ti was her dream the smoke took her too, or in other words Bill.
Yes emily is lil stupid, but thats how her character is written. xD she can be smart and stupid, its balances eachother out.
Date: 05/28/10 03:56 am Title: Chapter 1
the final part is soooo sweet if it is what i think it is.awww she will finally talk with bill.got i love this story.it's my favourite.please update.thnx for posting.
ps:where do you live?(i am asking to know your time zone:p)
Author's Response:
thank you. :D
I live in arizona
Date: 05/28/10 03:43 am Title: Chapter 12
simply amazing
Author's Response: thnk you :D
Date: 05/28/10 03:19 am Title: Chapter 12
Ah update!
*munches on popcorn*
Author's Response: Oh yes, you will deffy need pop corn for the next one. :D
Date: 05/28/10 02:33 am Title: Chapter 12
and thanks for posting.more pls?
Author's Response: xD yes but i am afraid you will be angry a the nxt one......
Date: 05/28/10 02:33 am Title: Chapter 12
oh!what happened?what was this thing?eas she dreaming?what did she saw?awww meanie!!
Author's Response: xD dont worry just posted another part, but i might cliff hang you
Date: 05/27/10 12:58 pm Title: Chapter 11
I like the idea that youve made a sequel to the Labyrinth movie. Your writing is quite unjointed if you know what I mean? like Emily ends up appearing in different places and you dont really explain how they got there or your surroundings. Also you dont mention some vital things and it confused me. Where did she get the sharpie? how did she instantly know bill was the goblin prince? and you dont explain how they found anyone. Also you break up some of the lines people are speaking so its confusing. I think you should take more time to write everything out, in more detail. Dont write as you have seen it but think about being the character and how they would think about using the sharpie for instance? its boring and you want to get through the story but you need to develop the characters and plot more and you can do that by taking your time. It makes it more enjoyable is you did this and I am enjoying this. But you cant also assume everyones seen the movie, because I have seen it but I have no idea what you are talking about sometimes. Also dont be afraid to add new things into it and take things out (adding in the part about Bill performing didnt make sense even though Jareth does). Im sorry to criticise you but I hope its constructive criticism. I do like the way you have written things anyway. Please keep writing :)
Author's Response: Hun, If your a writer, you need constructive critsicm to get better. :D if you don't get it, then you'll never know what to fix in the furute chapters. I appreciate this comment the most, because now for my next chapter, i'll know what to do, I need to start being the character rather than going of someone elses script. Please don't apologize, constructive critiscm is really vital for a writers health. Lol, Thank you so much, and i will keep writing. And again, keep giving me a heads up if you don't feel like its the best ive could've written, I like when my readers give me suggestions and things I should change about my writing.
Date: 05/27/10 03:29 am Title: Chapter 11
of i firgot when will she talk with bill!she never talks ith bill.only hoggle.i want her to talk with bill.that;s the only way to get more open with bill(and the love will spreeeed right?).i'm sorry i know talk tooo much sorry.don't mind meeee!!go on with you gr8 work.thnk u..byeeeeeee.WARNING:i'll come back:P
Author's Response: Haha, i think your my favorite reader. I love how you get into depth with the story and try to understand, and your so enthusiastic about my next chapter, and what will happen next. :D Thank you so muc, you keep me writing every day. I really appreciate it. I really do. I will update today, and the love will be coming up with Mrs, Emily, and Bill the goblin prince. I have the whole scene and i think you mjust might like it. :D
Date: 05/27/10 03:24 am Title: Chapter 10
dancing?she is screamig because they are dancing with her?oh bill is gorgeous in the banner and the girl is really beautiful too.and he is beautiful with the eyes in the pic don;t you think that too.aw she loves bill too.she chose the labirynth and not bill to go home..how stupid.i would coose bill.lol.i don't get why she hates her mom though.did she know the story of her mom and the labirinth?but she loves her sister that's why she wants to go back right?this story is UNIQUE in the site.i do that simetimes with the movies:pimagining sequels.lol.anyway i think that this review is a lil tooooooo long.don't wanna get you tired.love yaaaa
Date: 05/27/10 02:48 am Title: Chapter 11
oh another chapiiee..yohoooo!let's dance:p/i just love you for this.but when will you let the love spreeed a little.when i see that you've updated i become sooooo happy.i can't wait.thnx for posting!!
Date: 05/26/10 11:11 pm Title: Chapter 11
Damn, he IS just like his father.... Grr.. He's the villian you love to hate.
Author's Response: Mhmm, can u imagine if david bowie was really bill and toms dad. ha thatd be great. :D
Date: 05/26/10 11:06 pm Title: Chapter 10
Lemme guess, you used the 'gangsta' accent to represent Tom right?
And the dancers to be the rest of the boys?
Author's Response: high fives. xD
Date: 05/26/10 11:01 pm Title: Chapter 9
Oh boy, Someone doesn't think very highly of her mother. But I guess I can see where she's comming from....
Author's Response: xD ja