Date: 05/21/10 03:19 pm Title: Tainted Love by Soft Cell
Mh, it's kinda too short and things seemed a very rushed.
Date: 05/21/10 09:34 am Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
Everything? What has Bill done? I want another chapter. :)
Date: 05/21/10 07:57 am Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
yay for tom ^^
stupid luka can go fuck himself >.< even if bill might not be the perfect dad, what makes him think HE'LL be any better? if he thinks it alright to hit bill, who says he won't think it's alright to hit daniela?
update soon? (A)
Date: 05/20/10 08:49 pm Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
keep going dammit keep going
Date: 05/20/10 08:49 pm Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
Luka is cute but hes a jackass! Im happy that Tom is going to help him out. Excellent work. I love how you update quickly! Thats always a plus and please update soon!
Also thanks for the comment about my fics. It means a lot. :)
Date: 05/20/10 07:31 pm Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
This story is so amazing!
Damn Luka, making Bill cry.
Tom put those lawyer skills to good work!
Date: 05/20/10 06:02 pm Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
"I'm a big ball of fucked up." LOL that's my new favorite saying. I love it.
Date: 05/20/10 05:44 pm Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
i hate him and i love bills attitude =D
but why did he hit bill tho
Date: 05/20/10 05:23 pm Title: The Fear by Lily Allen
to me, luka is a d-bag.
anyway, i must say i'm addicted to this series
good job! :D
Date: 05/19/10 09:44 pm Title: Blow My Away by Breaking Benjamin
Bill's daughter is gorgeous from the banner picture, is she mixed? She looks so exotic.
Date: 05/19/10 09:16 pm Title: Blow My Away by Breaking Benjamin
Awww I LOVE these kinds of stories they're so cute and I love how you switched the clichéd story of Tom having the kid to bill having the kid. I can tell I'm going to lkethis story a lot. Oh and do t let people get you down about grammar mistakes, I'm sure if they wrote stories they'd see how hard it is to keep good grammar and spelling all the time, just don't let their comments bother you :) can't wait for the next chapter
Date: 05/19/10 08:58 pm Title: Blow My Away by Breaking Benjamin
Relax about the grammar. I know that you might recieve some reviews pointing something out but look at it in the positive way they are gonna make you write better :)
I like the story so far, and I hope to see another chap soon
-Loves
Date: 05/19/10 08:51 pm Title: Pretty Visitors by Artic Monkeys
I don´t think his braids go weelll with lawyers, I wish they would though. ANyway I like it so far :)
Date: 05/19/10 06:29 pm Title: Blow My Away by Breaking Benjamin
I love this story and look forward to it unfolding.
Please don't get mad at people pointing out your errors. They're just trying to help. ALL of us on here are here to support our fellow authors and help them improve their writing. Some are more critical than others, but they don't do it to be mean.
It is true that this site is in English and ficcies are in English. Many of our authors are from other countries and English is NOT their first language. We get that. Many of us are older and have gone through much higher education, so we understand the nature of mistakes, but those mistakes are more obvious to us as well. We as readers take that into consideration when we read each other's works. Their goal is constructive, NOT destructive. Everyone is human and things can and do get missed.
Don't feel insecure about your work. It's good. But you DO need a beta. A beta's job is to catch all grammatical and spellling errors and help you with ideas to improve the story. The author and the beta are a team. Their goal together is to help you publish your great works of fiction with confidence.
IF you need a beta, I'll gladly volunteer to help you. Just drop me a line and we can discuss it.
Don't get discouraged or upset. People on here only have good intentions. Honest!
Date: 05/19/10 06:23 pm Title: Blow My Away by Breaking Benjamin
I think you did a good job. Im liking this and how you explained the mpreg situation was different from what I read before. Cant wait for more!
Author's Response: that means so much coming from you. i love your fics.
Date: 05/19/10 04:11 pm Title: Pretty Visitors by Artic Monkeys
The premise is really interesting, and the plot so far is nice. I hope you won't mind a bit of constructive criticism, though. There were a lot of gramatical and spelling errors ("Did you here..." instead of "Did you hear...") , which could easily be avoided with a quick spell-check. And another piece of advice is that for writing a story, when using numbers, ("All 4 guys..."), spell them out. Don't use the actual number. Use "All four..." instead of "All 4...". It makes it look better, and will make the writing look a bit more serious.
All in all, this is a nice job, but I'd recommend that you find a beta to help you clean it up a bit. =) 7hearts;
Date: 05/19/10 03:38 pm Title: Pretty Visitors by Artic Monkeys
OMG I fell in love with the summary and now that I've read the first chapter, I think I fell in love all over again :D
I really loving how this fic is panning out and I totally can't wait to read more.
P.S. If that little kid on the banner is Bill's kid, he's absoulutely adorable looking :D I think Tom is such a romantic softy :P
Date: 05/19/10 02:38 pm Title: Pretty Visitors by Artic Monkeys
teehee ^_^
i like the idea =D
can't wait to see how this develops ^^
Date: 05/19/10 01:43 pm Title: Pretty Visitors by Artic Monkeys
Good start! I like this on already!
Date: 05/19/10 01:43 pm Title: Pretty Visitors by Artic Monkeys
I'M hooked! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: thanX