Date: 11/15/11 11:45 pm Title: o3: God is a Popstar
Quite weird. Quite different. I feel like Tom died, or that something in him died. It's a little scary.
Author's Response: Hmm, died? That's an interesting theory. Even if this story is pretty much dead, thanks for reading and reviewing! :D
Date: 09/27/10 05:31 am Title: o3: God is a Popstar
This is absolutely brilliant and sooooo unique I don't even know what to make of it but you are crazy talented and I hope you decide to write more, even given your limited audience for this specific fic (which you thought might be because the story is different, and I agree, also, a lot of people tend to shy away from first person POV, but in this case you are doing it flawlessly), because this is massively awesome. Reading your stuff has made me feel excited about fic again, to be honest.
Author's Response: I haven't even blinked an eye at this fic since May, and all this time later, I too have finally come to that conclusion as well (rather, a contribution to my overall conclusion anyway) - first person narrative is not only -fucking hard- to write, but it's not generally enjoyed by the average fanfic reader. ^^" In May, I'd only been around twoish months, and didn't realise how dire a mistake it could be to try first-person, especially being someone who writes like I do, and can't help but to sound terribly unnatural in any situation, never mind taking hold of a character's entire persona at the steering wheel. I haven't quite gotten to the point of wanting to abandon this story yet (for more than the audience reason, which I shouldn't so selfishly take into account at all - I've felt increasingly intimidated by my outline as is and don't feel I could do the idea any justice), but I've had thoughts about returning to it and re-writing it completely in third-person omniscient narrative. I just have to recapture the motive to do so, is all. ^^" I've been rather caught up in stories better suited to my level of experience at the moment, I keep ignoring this poor thing, as awful as it is.
At any rate, I better catch myself before I go on into yet another endless rant (too late omg), but I appreciate every word of your thoughts, and for you to even blink an eye my way, let alone to such a clumsy story like this, is really generous of you. ^^ You flatter me with your crazy praise! Psh, really. I don't want to read too much into it, but if you mean to say you've lost your inspiration, I can only hope it finds you again once more. You are truly a fantastic writer, and, though I can't believe I could be the reason for your excitement toward fics once more, I'm supremely glad to hear you're invigorated again. Please, do keep writing, and thank you for taking the time to read, review and put a big smile on my face with a dash of hope. ;) Keep smiling, mate!
Date: 08/13/10 08:42 am Title: o3: God is a Popstar
I do believe all my bodily blood is in my face now. I can't believe you went there. I didn't see Gustav coming, damned fanfic intuition or not, I was completely in the dark there, and I LIKED it o.o I'm usually more Bill-inclined, he's so feline he attracts me in every way, but now I can't listen to that damned song without seeing Gustav sitting all regal and impassive over a nightclub like some sort of sexual deity. You've ruined my mind! *laughs* In a good way of course...
I can't think of anything to say now. It's like my words dried up in the face of sheer brilliance. I am teetering somewhere between vampires and demons as to what they actually are, but I find that I don't care what they are. They're you're creation and as such you make the rules so, I refuse to band them into a category, but I am very intrigued. I'm concerned for Georg. What did you let Eve do to him? Curiosity is killing the cat here...
I like that Tom's out of his element here, that every little thing is catching him off guard. When Tom's too self-assured, he gets cocky, and I very much enjoy seeing him confused for once.
Your lime/partial lemon scenes are fantastic. Clearly you understate yourself. You write with a slow burning heat, and the detail is marvellous. Usually people tend to just shove a little bit of smut in there as a filler, but you made it seem like every word is integral. And as for Bill taking a small bite out of Tom...just a little taste right? Hot...
Right, I gotta go, but already you've made my day. I'm only sad to see it end so soon, as I see you haven't updated in nearly three months. I don't deny I pouted. You've given me lots of pretty images of Bill pandering to your Super-pimp Gustav to get me through the day and I swear to you 'Gott ist ein Popstar' will be on repeat for some time.
Before I forget? Aural Vampire? I like your style. I prefer Darkwave Surfer to Vampire Ecstasy though. Even if it seems too light for this fic...
I do hope you consider updating soon. I'll be watching just in case...
Author's Response: Wou, I'm so glad I took you by surprise! =0 Ah to ruin a mind... It's a first for me thus far, should I be proud for it? I think so. xD
I don't know if I will be able to come up with an author's response that honours this review, I'm a little at a loss for words. I'm just, I don't know... overwhelmed you liked it, enough to review and enough to point out its good characteristics. My, I'm completely grateful. *sighs* I don't like the idea of abandoning a story, and somewhere in my mind, I plan to return to it, I just have to recapture my muse and confidence to continue. Somewhere along the lines, between disappointment and lack of esteem I stopped writing the chapters for this, but as I mentioned, the idea of leaving a story unfinished doesn't sit right with me. I promise you, I'll try and find the time to sit face to face with this fic and lay out the ground rules, demand an end and the like.
Darkwave Surfer is a fabulous song, indeed! However I prefer the previous album a little more. I'm impressed to meet someone who listens to Aural Vampire, absolutely thrilled. :D
Thanks for your awesome review, my humblest apologies for not updating and my deepest gratitude for your kind words.
Date: 06/01/10 09:05 pm Title: o2: Hot Mess
well i just can't help it, its too brillian to feel any other way :D x
Author's Response: And that makes me smile. =)
Date: 06/01/10 03:28 pm Title: o3: God is a Popstar
wow, trippy. can't deny that it's sexy and freaky. aah, good luck with your move~i hope you settle in a nice place :)
Author's Response: *hides face* Omo, you're still reading this? *clasps hands* You're really kind to me. Thanks again for reading/reviewing darling, you're a treat. =)
Date: 05/31/10 06:28 pm Title: o3: God is a Popstar
well, let's say that your not as egotistical as you claim it because it really is too different. At least from everything I read (yeah, every day like a maniac xD), but trust me, it captivates (I don't think I express myself right - sorry, portuguese here o:)
and I really hope you don't put this on hiatus or I'll depress :o
now, seriously, I think you want to have some constructive criticism so here it goes: maybe try to, hmm, put more dialogue? (wow, baaaad english!) it's just my opinion, but I start seeing a fanfic as boring when it has too much text at the same time.
ahm i've said too much. so, just keep going ;)
Author's Response: Ah, the hiatus I was speaking of was actually for something else, not necessarily for this being so bad I can't continue. I recently moved towns, with no computer (let alone much else besides a sweater o_o) and so, that is what I meant.
Constructive critisism is always something I look for. Hmm, more dialogue you say? I'll consider it, and it is not that I'm not taking your suggestion seriously, however I don't know if this is the kind of fic I can stock up heavy dialogue in. (I figured it a more what's the word... physical (?) piece?)I'll try, I'll keep it in mind once I return to the drawing board.
Thanks for you kind words, suggestions and of course for reading and reviewing!
Date: 05/31/10 02:23 pm Title: o3: God is a Popstar
Of course you may call me that. And LOL, I never imagined Gustav as being that, but then again it's not the first time I'm surprised with something like that. A good friend of mine is writing an awesome BtVS story where a guy called Andrew (bit of a wimp on the show) is God and it's beyond awesome. Heehee, so yeah, I don't mind this... development at all. And now Tom is in, can't wait to find out what it'll imply for him. I'm also looking forward to finding out what's going to happen to Georg.
Hope the move goes great, honey and you don't need to put any of your stories in hiatus. *hugs*
Author's Response: I knew I was going fairly OOC with Bill, but when I originally wrote the outline for this story, Gustav was the whole reason I wrote a big OOC warning at the top of my virtual notepad in the end. Though perhaps, it's not as dramatic, seeing as 'God' is a reserved and thoughtful character, as do I find Gusti, so hmm, who knows.
Anyhoo, my own rambling thoughts aside, I was so excited to write Gusti into this, and I'm relieved you're not minding me putting into that role. I found it both comical and fun. Yay for quiet/wimps as secret Gods! As for Georg... tch, I hope he knows I still love him. xD
Thanks for reading, reviewing and all that jazz that you're always so kind to do for me! =)
Date: 05/31/10 01:34 pm Title: o3: God is a Popstar
THIS IS JUST FANTASTIC, im craving more and more each chapter that i read, plz continue with this story, because it's just...i don't even have words for it
Author's Response: .___. I'm really glad that it has captured someone the way I desired it to. I'm glad you like it so much, and it's fuels my motive to press forward with it despite my uncertainties. Thanks for reading and taking the time to review.
Date: 05/31/10 01:15 pm Title: o2: Hot Mess
OHMYGAWWD this story is just WOW. its so sexy and raunchy...I LOVE IT, no screw that IM ADDICTED. Just reading it makes me wanna droole xD absolutely fantastic
Author's Response: Haha, you made me go a bit bug-eyed, reading your comment. Thanks for reading, and thanks for your enthusiasm. O__O ♥
Date: 05/29/10 09:14 pm Title: o2: Hot Mess
i find the first person to be completely believable :) and that was some hot lust-filled content for someone reluctant. haha, okay now bill threw me for a loop. i wanna know what's going on, haha. eve...sounds like she probably knows 'god', cuz adam and eve...well just a thought. i saw a couple of your fancy words slipped in here xD
Author's Response: First person is such a risk for me, so if you say it's decent, I can only be relieved. *blushes* ;____; I
am reluctant, but I'm a perfectionist who knows not the meaning of the phrase 'half-ass'; if the plot calls for something lusty, I'm going to swallow all my pride and give it what I got. (Even if I get all shifty and have to meditate in seclusion afterward. xD)
Sharp observation! It was a bit of sloppy attempt at a religious allusion, but I settled on naming her Eve for a reason. I was thinking more along the lines of temptation, she being the one to drag the boys to Choha, and it seemed to function accordingly the more I wrote.
Fancy words. XDD I couldn't help myself - even if a regular young man does not speak with these words, reducing the quality of the vocabulary I use to fit first person narrative is something I find I still cannot live with. I hope that despite it, it all flowed decently. I think you like my 'fancy' words anyway. =P Thanks for reading and reviewing mate, truly.
Date: 05/29/10 07:38 pm Title: o1: Vampire Ecstasy
hahaha Oral Vampire xD this is trippy, thats for sure, but definitely worth reading, at least so far. Perhaps it's the summary that isnt very inviting? or maybe its just that the idea is so out there that people just pass it by, but id definitely like to read more to find out what exactly is up. lol reminds me a bit of the club i was at yesterday, but with more costumes xD
Author's Response: Do you know of Aural Vampire? Haha. I'll take your word for it and give a little bit more of a summary. It is a bit... weird. I know. There's plenty of standard club pieces, classic boy meets boy (haha), dance and fuck story plots floating around, and I get bored easily. I figured delving into something a bit atypical and strange would be good for my mind, but perhaps it's not as good for others. (.__.)
Thanks for dropping by and taking the time to give me ridiculous story a try, it means a lot to me, friend! Truly kind of you.
Date: 05/22/10 11:26 am Title: o1: Vampire Ecstasy
It's different, but I think it's really good, you're doing great. keep them coming. ;)
Author's Response: It is different, and I wonder if that's why it's not really flying. I thought maybe I've screwed up along the way, in one form or another. If you like it though, it really makes me happy. Thanks for reading and reviewing, honestly. =) ♥
Date: 05/21/10 02:14 pm Title: o2: Hot Mess
Everything was spinning and I could feel my body pulsing intensely, but I was beginning to find I didn’t mind it at all. It was nothing like any other place I’d been before; the music was literally visual, the people its canvas and the DJ’s turntable the palette, the connection from person to person radiating in passionate, colourful waves over the span of the floor in ways I’d never seen, and never felt.
Damn, that is the most visually appealing paragraph I've read in ages, I swear.
“Fuck, fuck, fuck,” I gritted out, and his nails ripped at my shoulder, his teeth tearing a mark into the skin at the base of my neck. It fucking hurt, but I couldn’t lie – as his fingers ran back over my erection again, soothing the lingering stinging with another careful pump, I never found myself more taken by a simple handjob.
He licked over the wound he’d definitely left in the crook of my neck, his hand leaving my shoulder long enough to squeeze through our tangled limbs to palm himself through his jeans.
I'm so very intrigued over that, might be reading too much into it, too, especially since I generally write vampire fics, but that sounds awfully vampiric to me; especially considering the title for the first chapter. Feel free to tell me I'm wrong, I won't mind. ;)
The chapter was trés HOT! *fans self* And the first person perspective actually added up to the experience. Reading all of Tom's thoughts, his emotions, the way the encounter affected him was awesome. The chemistry between the two of them was palpable, almost scorching the screen. I'll be looking forward to more!
And yes, I'm Latina, from Guatemala in Central America, actually, not Spaniard. Still, Spanish is my first language and English is just my language of choice while writing or on most of my online life.
Author's Response: (.___.) Thanks for always putting up with me and reading, not to mention taking the time to review! Ah - you caught me. Originally, I struggled between something demonic or vampiristic, but couldn't decide. Since it's doesn't truly matter, I, in the end wanted to keep it ambiguous and up to the imagination. I have this thing about vampires, I don't know, I like them, but always felt like the emoscene kids kind of ruined them for me. (overdone/overrated) So I shy away from vampires most days. So you're not wrong at all, really. In a way the marks were instrumental to the story (later; if there is a later, now), giving it that vampire-ish feel. It wasn't utterly fail bit of lemon? I'm not very good with smut, at least not yet, so I was kinda pushing my luck by writing this. So relived you liked it. And Oh - hello neighbour! My family lives in Honduras, some in Guatemala (I've visited there too!) and also a few in El Salvy. Oh, I would never have guessed English is your second language, not at all. Anyways thanks again love, you brighten my day!
Date: 05/18/10 10:26 am Title: o1: Vampire Ecstasy
I LOVED IT!!!! >.<
Watched Dorian Gray a few nights ago, so I'm totally game for more maddening depravity!
Please update! I'm tracking it!!! >.<
Author's Response: Haha wow~ O__O I've never seen that movie. I assume it's good then! That plotline of it is intriguing, yes? Now I wish to kind of go rent it and watch it. XD Okay, anyways thanks for your sweet review, you're great! n__n
Date: 05/17/10 11:21 pm Title: o1: Vampire Ecstasy
It's different, but different can be good, especially with a writer as gifted as you are. I'm intrigued as to where this will be going and how the first encounter between Tom and Bill will go.
Didn't know you speak Spanish (which I'm supposing for the series name), that's awesome! I don't feel so alone here now. ;)
I'll be looking forward to more.
Author's Response: It is different. At least for me to write. >.<;; Aww but thank you for your compliment. *Makes squishy happy face* Well perhaps the first encounter will be... *rolls eyes* xD Ah yeah, I'm actually Latina believe it or not. My Spanish truthfully sucks so hard for someone who should know it as well as English, actually it sucks more than that but there's no word for it, though I try an exercise it now and again. (Okay, rarely) So I assume you're also Latina? Spaniard? Hehe. Anyhoo, with that said, muchas gracias~ tu estás como la luz del sol~~~ chuu ♥ -gets shot for being a failure in every aspect of life-