i think you need some crackers to go with it but i liked it.

glad to see this back!

I like this very, very much.

that was sick and twisted but so fucking hot!! i feel like a psycho for loving this story this much

i knew Bill was a kinky bastard, i knew it

oooh Bill is gonna find out Tom's the Phantom!!

amazing chapter

Well done. I like.

Lol.. Bill's most likely gonna find out the truth now :

Awww! :D My fics really aren't that great though, all of them have HUGE, GLARING flaws, way worse than this fic does. XD

(Speaking of, I have to say I was hoping Tom would rub his budding relationship with Bill into Becca's face, but oh well. XD Maybe he's just too nice. :P)

Author's Response: well, the "huge glaring flaws" that you speak of are rarely apparent to me XD and as for Tom, perhaps i could work in a little "rubbing in" :)

Finally got WiFi again so I can review this. XD I have to say I L.O.V.E. this story. I love the plot and the writing and the character interactions. There's just one weeny thing niggling at me, and that's Becca. (who isn't important now anyway, but eh. XD) What bothers me is that she comes out and says she has an affair going on, seems pleased about it, and makes a point of saying she was only with Tom for the money and that she hated his personality.

However, in earlier chapters, Becca is possessive and controlling, and she always seems to want Tom around. She constantly picks at him about Bill because she's jealous Tom may like Bill, she calls him all the time and demands he come home on time and not stay out. If she doesn't like him and is only in it for the money, why does she do these things? Why does she care about seeing him and talking to him? Why does she care if Tom likes Bill? She's just a gold-digger, not in it for hanging around Tom.

The whole affair thing seems a little too convenient here. The timing is too perfect and it seems like an easy fix to get her out of the picture so we can have more Tom/Bill action. Which is fine, if you want to go that way. But it doesn't match up with her earlier actions. She seems like a completely different person here, and it doesn't ring true.

The way I see it, there's two ways to write her character. Either you stick with the affair thing (which gives you an easy out when you need it) and change her earlier personality, or you stick with her original actions and find some other reason for them to break up. If you go with the first one, I'd suggest that you make her seem a bit more secretive, and more selfish. Maybe she only calls Tom when she needs money. Maybe whenever he tries to call her, he can't get ahold of her. Things like that. Make her seem a little suspicious so the affair thing doesn't come out of the blue and seem a bit off-key with the rest of her character. If you go the other way, maybe you can make Tom realize she's a leech and dump her. XD (An easy way to do this would be to give her a gambling problem)

I think you tried to make her have as many annoying characteristics as possible (which is common in slashfic, not a big deal) but they ultimately clashed and made her seem a little fake and overdone. It's fine to have a character designed to be hated, but make sure their nasty little flaws all line up nicely. :3

That's the only thing that bothers me, and it's in a minor character anyway. XD Something to think about if you ever chose to re-write this. :D Over-all, great job so far! :D

Author's Response: you know, i paid such little attention to becca while writing this (i know, that sounds kind of bad haha) that i didn't even notice her actions weren't lining up, so thank you bunches for pointing that one out, your review was quite helpful :)

thank god that bitch is gone but she shouldnt have cheated on tom...

Oo.. the suspense