Date: 06/05/10 06:37 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
this is getting VERY interesting :-)
Date: 05/31/10 07:25 am Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
Claude and Bill O_O HOT HOT HOT!!! That was absolutely H.O.T!I hope to read more about those two, screw Tom. LOL.
They seem to do this every now and then. I'm loving Claude at the moment.
I bet Tom and Robert heard them, but Robert already knows and doesn't care and Tom was curious and felt bothered by the whole thing, what with him being racist and all. Maybe he was repulsed by the idea, yet he probably got a huge boner under his sleeping bag muahaha!
About the french part,only one person did it right, before me but I didn't know it, hence the second comment where I already apologised for that so all's good ne?The tense just influences the meaning, is all.It might be conjugated otherwise, but it's also valid for the present in the context.If you keep it present tense you might want to change "fait" to "fais" then.Right conjugation and all.Just felt the need to explain myself.I know my english is not perfect,so I'm one to talk XD
Back to the story:
This chapter is short, but it's intense and make the story move forward than its peers.The scenery is beautiful. I can't wait to read about what's going on in Tom's thick head.
Author's Response: Not a problem, hon, your corrections are always very polite. :)
Date: 05/30/10 08:42 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
Oh.. oh my... that was exciting to read... it was a rather beautiful mental image too, I quite enjoyed the setting. :) There is no way that Tom didn't hear that though... I can't wait to read more
Date: 05/30/10 03:24 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
I've been really delinquent in reading and reviewing this fic, but now I've read through the chapters that I missed before and oh my god! You guys have created some amazingly nuanced characters here; Bill and Tom, of course, but I'm also loving Claude. This chapter shows just how much he and Bill seem to trust each other. Ach, poor Bill, living in a time and place when he has to try and cover up what he is.
Tom is, of course, a somewhat less sympathetic character than Bill so far, but I'm hoping he'll redeem himself later on. Again, he seems to have more depth to him, even if we haven't seen all of it yet. All in all, a fantastic historical/Western piece so far, and I can't wait for more!
Date: 05/29/10 05:45 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
^.^ didnt see that coming. but i prefer bill being with him than some random woman. i just hope tom saw. love it. cant wait for the next chapter
Date: 05/29/10 03:49 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
Hmmm interesting chapter! Cnt wait for more!!
Date: 05/29/10 03:41 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
i don't get it...Bill & claude !!?? first with that girl and now with his servant or whatever claude is...
Woa
i hope that Tom is watching them and that he's jealous
Date: 05/29/10 07:48 am Title: Typical
"By the way, "Time I put you in, non, chère?" .. what do you mean 'non, chère'? ._.
you could mean 'n'est-ce pas, mon cher' but still you don't go and call a horse 'mon cher' lol
you might want to change that :) again, hope I could be of any help!
Author's Response: I believe this one is criticizing pure word choice on both counts, which I can't claim to grasp the validity of."
What kind of a response is that? I feel sorry you understood it that way because it truly was not a rude criticism BUT a real question on my part. If you refuse my corrections or even questions, there are beta readers out there. This is such an original story, it'd be too bad for it to lose credibility because of such STUPID FRENCH MISTAKES. :) Peace!
Author's Response: I apologize if you misunderstood me, because in the same way you were confused, I didn't understand the point of your review. I see now that you were under the impression that "non" could have been a typo for "mon", so I see why you needed clarification. I hadn't presumed the first review necessarily rude; you only seem to now be venturing there.
Date: 05/29/10 01:10 am Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
Oh..my..god. Can I just leave that as a review? Is that allowed? :)
Well the ending has left me a little stunned, not gonna lie on that one lol. There was hope there it was Tom at first, cause i accidentally lost my place and came back at the wrong spot lol. But than I was just whoa. :P
Anyway, I really haven't lefta very good review XD I'm enjoying the story so much and I'm always excited for a new chap. Glad you explained what happened yesterday tho lol. I was a little confused and than bummed I didnt have the actual update lol. I do now tho! :)
Hugs,
Date: 05/29/10 12:41 am Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
This chapter made me freak! Damn, Bill. :D
Date: 05/28/10 11:27 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
Holy...wow. I have to say I was not expecting that at all. O_o but um wow. I like this chapter a lot, it holds a certain awe about it. Great job guys.
Date: 05/28/10 11:04 pm Title: A Different Sort Of Heat
WOW!!!! Can't say I saw this coming! Very hot indeed!!!
Date: 05/28/10 06:35 pm Title: Prologue
Just read the other comments before me and it seems people already corrected the sentence. Or in other cases, tried to do so. Sorry for that. Next time I'll definitely check before commenting.=)
Author's Response: No prob, chica. ;)
Date: 05/28/10 06:29 pm Title: Typical
Tom's beliefs and his attitude plus the flashbacks suggest that he led a really rough life. His past "acquaintances" probably put him in that horrible state the day Bill found him.
Tom will definitely learn to respect Claude and Robert for their qualities as men, and see past their skin color. Or at the very least, accept them. Of course he's not expected to love them and be their buddy, because such strong beliefs and assumptions are not easy to let go.
I suspect whatever Bill does with Nat is far from being sexual.Or not.lol.
The people in this town are good. Hopefully,they will rub off on Tom and he will learn to do things the right way, or combine it with his devious ways but for a good cause and without harmful intent like he did with the Mayor.
Oh, and pardon me, I don't want to appear rude or anything but I'd like to correct you guys on the french sentence.(I hope you're not angry that I do so in a comment.)
"Qu'est-ce que je fait avec toi?"
It's not wrong,wrong given what you want to say.But that sentence is more like something in everyday's life.It's used in situations where you don't know what you will do with the person, go together somewhere? Or maybe doing something else?
Here in the context, and in litterature.It should be "Que vais-je faire de toi?" / "Que vais-je bien pouvoir faire de toi?"
Or change a bit what you wrote and it will have the same meaning: "Qu'est ce que je vais faire de toi?"
Both meaning "What am I going to do with you?"
I'm just assuming this is what you wanted to say. If not, I apologise because I clearly misunderstood. Now, I know it's not that important and nobody will care about that, but well...Just trying to be useful for once.
Back to the fic,it has this atmosphere to it...I love it. The way Tom and Bill's relationship is slowly shifting without them noticing it is delightful to read. Bill had Tom for weeks under his roof, and he didn't really notice how eager he've become to meet Tom in the morning lol. And he even justifies his better grooming to himself, that he does it because of a guest, eventhough Tom is hardly a guest anymore since he cooked all that time lol.
Tom on the other hand is curious, more and more so. As his curiosity increases, he's slowly drawn in Bill's charms and amazing personality. All of that without him realising it.
I'm so hooked by this story and am very attached to Bill already. Tom is not very appealing at the moment.I'm glad I could read it before going to sleep, great bedtime story =)
Date: 05/28/10 05:42 am Title: Typical
Hm, and update but no new chapter? I am (as usual) really enjoying the build up for this story, you guys are extremely talanted at that :)
Date: 05/28/10 02:15 am Title: Typical
By the way, "Time I put you in, non, chère?" .. what do you mean 'non, chère'? ._.
you could mean 'n'est-ce pas, mon cher' but still you don't go and call a horse 'mon cher' lol
you might want to change that :) again, hope I could be of any help!
Author's Response: I believe this one is criticizing pure word choice on both counts, which I can't claim to grasp the validity of.
Date: 05/28/10 02:01 am Title: Prologue
Hi, french tips again: "what am I going to do with you?" = (to fully respect the french expression) "qu'est-ce que je vais bien pouvoir faire de toi?" or "qu'est-ce que je vais faire de toi?" :)
hope I could help.
good chapter, I like where this is going!
Date: 05/23/10 10:37 am Title: Typical
I love this!!! Soooo much!!
Date: 05/19/10 06:43 pm Title: Typical
i like this a lot! update!
Date: 05/19/10 12:24 am Title: Typical
You've probably had this pointed out to you already, but... stallions are male. Mares are female :3 Just FYI. Otherwise I'm loving this story just oodles.
Author's Response: Lol, we're well aware, it was just a question of juggling the two horses and missing it in editing.